Thesis Statement Writing

Easiest Way to Write a Killer Thesis
Statement
A thesis statement is
a sentence that tells readers the main points your paper

covers and in what order they appear.
It is your entire paper squeezed in 1 sentence at the

end of the introduction.
A thesis statement includes
• your distinct standpoint on the subject;

• a brief summary of the main arguments;
• a roadmap for the paper.
FAQ on thesis statements:
1) Does every paper need a thesis statement?

- Yes.
2) Where do I put it?

- At the end of the introduction.
3) Can it be longer than 1 sentence?

- No.
4) Can I rewrite it if I change my mind?

- Sure. Revisit your thesis statement as you work on the paper.
A strong thesis statement is
• Not obvious
Disputable
• Some readers can disagree
• Not too broad

Focused
• Your position is clear
• Not boring
Relevant
• Readers won’t say ‘so what’?
A thesis statement and how it relates to the rest of
the paper
A thesis statement should:
• answer the questions ‘how’ and/or ‘why’;
• provide the logic of the paper;
• cover the entire paper.
The rest of the paper should:

• echo a thesis statement in every sentence;
• prove that the thesis statement is correct;
• repeat a rephrased thesis statement in the conclusion.
5 Groups of Never-Use Words:
• Personal pronouns – I, you, we

• Uncertainty qualifiers – might, maybe, perhaps
• Extremism symptoms – everything, all, none, always,
never
• Vague formulations – some, kind of, somewhat
• Obvious exaggerations – life-saving, best of the best
6 Groups of Must-Use Words:
• Sources of information: studies reveal, research shows
• Realistic views: many, significant, most
• Characteristics: primarily, frequently, often
• Clear explanations: because, thus, for, due to, since
• Relationships: impact, influence, tendency, contribute to
• Active verbs: demonstrate, illustrate, identify, elucidate,

present, inform, reveal, show, express, justify, convey
10 Common Mistakes in thesis statements:
1) Declaration of topic: Similarities of Societies.

2) Questions: Are there similarities between cultures?
3) Captain Obvious: Overeating is bad for health.
4) Falling between 2 stools: Sometimes this can happen,
but sometimes it can’t.
5) Too many words – keep it brief (up to 25 words).
6) Making vows: I am going to discuss, this paper will
analyze, the purpose of my paper is…
7) Random list: Argument 1; argument 2; argument 3
To be continued…
10 Common Mistakes in thesis statements
(continued)
8) “I don’t care that you don’t care” – Birds can divorce.

9) Random sentence – The origin of this concept dates
back to 1487.
10) Ambiguity overload – This concept may have a
number of practical implications, even though this
theory has certain limitations.
Best and Worst Examples - Part 1
• Declaration of topic:
Weak: Nursing as a demanding profession.
Strong: Nursing requires not only substantial education,
but also perfect self-discipline and enhanced
professional ethics.
• Questions:
Weak: Is study during sleep possible?
Strong: The recent studies have revealed that people can
learn during sleep and subconsciously modify their
behavior after they wake up.
• Captain Obvious:
Weak: Internet can be addictive.
Strong: Recent research shows that the unpredictable
way in which the useful e-mails arrive can make
checking for them addictive.
• Falling between 2 stools:
Weak: Sometimes students enjoy their studies, but
sometimes they don’t.
Strong: There is a direct relationship between students’
attitudes towards study and their learning
outcomes.
• Too many letters

Weak: I am going to discuss the importance of reducing
the sugar consumption in American elementary school
children who consume nine times the recommended
daily amount of sugar because of the prevalence of
soda machines and unhealthy snacks in the school
canteens. (41 words)
Strong: Sugar consumption of American elementary
school children should be reduced by controlling the
menus of school canteens and raising children’s
awareness of healthy diets. (26 words)
• Making vows:
Weak: I am going to write about the movie Titanic.
Strong: The 1997 movie Titanic was a huge success
owing to the talents of the leading actors, the film
director and the original genre of epic romantic disaster
movie.
• Random list:
Weak: This paper will discuss Titanic, James Cameron
and Leonardo DiCaprio.
Strong: see above.
• “I don’t care that you don’t care”

Weak: Everyone’s happiness is different.
Strong: While the individual’s definition of happiness
always depends on life values and experience, the
concept of happiness doesn’t have a universal
meaning.
• Random sentence
Weak: I enjoyed reading the novel.
Strong: Coelho’s fresh ideas and philosophical messages
conveyed in his Alchemist produced a long-lasting
impression on me.
Best and Worst Examples Part 6
10) Ambiguity overload

Weak: Sleep deprivation can have some negative effects
on people.
Strong: The study reveals that sleep deprivation can lead
to difficulties concentrating and weight problems in
adolescents aged 10 – 14.
* Some more examples are here

Free online thesis statement generators:
• Thesis generator from MPCFaculty

http://www.mpcfaculty.net/molly_may/thesis_generator.html
• Thesis creator from JohnMcGarvey

http://johnmcgarvey.com/apworld/student/thesiscreator.html
• Thesis builder from TomMarch

http://www.tommarch.com/electraguide/thesis.php
* Note that these thesis builders give you only standard examples,
and it is always better to write a thesis statement on your own.
Final checklist
Could Check it for

Does it answer
somebody must-use and
the question
disagree with never-use
‘how’ or ‘why’?
it? words?
Is your Does it tell Wow! Now your

standpoint everything your thesis
clear and paper will cover statement
precise? in brief? rocks!
Does it pass
the ‘so what’ Doesn’t it
and ‘who cares’ include any odd
questions? details?

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Easiest Way to Write a Killer Thesis

a sentence that tells readers the main points your paper

It is your entire paper squeezed in 1 sentence at the

• your distinct standpoint on the subject;

1) Does every paper need a thesis statement?

2) Where do I put it?

3) Can it be longer than 1 sentence?

4) Can I rewrite it if I change my mind?

• Not too broad

The rest of the paper should:

• Personal pronouns – I, you, we

• Sources of information: studies reveal, research shows

• Realistic views: many, significant, most

• Characteristics: primarily, frequently, often

• Clear explanations: because, thus, for, due to, since

• Relationships: impact, influence, tendency, contribute to

• Active verbs: demonstrate, illustrate, identify, elucidate,

1) Declaration of topic: Similarities of Societies.

8) “I don’t care that you don’t care” – Birds can divorce.

• Too many letters

• “I don’t care that you don’t care”

10) Ambiguity overload

* Some more examples are here

• Thesis generator from MPCFaculty

• Thesis creator from JohnMcGarvey

• Thesis builder from TomMarch

Could Check it for

Is your Does it tell Wow! Now your

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