Writing Process

WRITING
RESOURCE GUIDE
Learning to Write
Kindergarten through Second Grade
DRAFT

Kkau Mea Nui Writing Matters Project
Norma Jean Stodden, Sara Podlewski, Meghan Whitfield-OBrien, Heather DeWoody, Martha
Guinan and the teachers of Waimanalo Elementary and Intermediate School, Waimanalo,
Oahu, Hawai`i
Aloha WEIS Teachers,

How do students become better writers? Researchers and practitioners have been diligently working to answer this
question. Writing Next is a report from the Carnegie Corporation that identified 11 effective strategies to improve
writing. This report has largely influenced the professional development activities and materials that have been
created through the Kkau Mea Nui project. The teaching and use of writing strategies, a writing process approach,
and summarizing are three elements from Writing Next that have been at the heart of the Waimanalo Elementary and
Intermediate School and University of Hawai`i partnership.
This Writing Resource Guide is a compilation of the many strategies that WEIS teachers have been introduced to over
the last two years. The guide has been divided into four parts:
Learning to Write (K-2) Learning to Write (K-2) is divided up by the phases in the writing process.
For each phase, there is an introduction and multiple writing strategies to support emergent writers in that
phase of the writing process.
Note: A hard copy of this guide is being provided to all K-2 teachers.
Writing to Learn (K-3) - Writing to Learn (K-3) includes strategies to support writing in the content
areas. For each strategy, there is an introduction with connections to the CCSS, a Quick Reference with the
procedure and ideas for differentiation, and rubrics.
Note: A hard copy of this guide is being provided to all K-3 teachers.
Learning to Write (3-8) Learning to Write (3-8) includes sections for each phase of the writing
process. In each section, there is an introduction and multiple writing strategies to support student writers
in that phase of the writing process. Most strategies include an explanation with connections to the CCSS
and a Quick Reference with the procedure and ideas for differentiation.
Note: A hard copy of this guide is being provided to all 3-8 Language Arts teachers.
Writing to Learn (4-8) Writing to Learn (4-8) includes strategies to support writing across the
content. For each strategy, there is an introduction with connections to the CCSS, a Quick Reference with
the procedure and ideas for differentiation, and rubrics.
Note: A hard copy of this guide is being provided to all 4-8 teachers excluding LA.
The complete Literacy Resource Guide is available at http://www.cds.hawaii.edu/writingmatters/

This guide is a work in progress; there are pieces that will be improved and pukas that need to be filled. It is our
hope that WEIS teachers will use this guide to continue to develop the writing skills of their students. Over the
course of the 2013-2014 school year, we ask that teachers use the strategies found in this guide and provide the
project team with constructive criticism and feedback to improve this resource. Additionally, we ask that teachers
compile example lesson plans that include one or more of the strategies as well as student samples. The goal is to
include these models in the final version of the Writing Resource Guide. Long after the Kkau Mea Nui team no
longer has a presence at WEIS, new and experienced teachers will be able to use this Writing Resource Guide, filled
with examples from their own teachers and students, to effectively teach writing, a skill that will benefit students in
the classroom and beyond.
Mahalo,

Kkau Mea Nui Team

Graham, S., & Perin, D. (2007).Writing Next: Effective strategies to improve writing of adolescents in middle and high schools A report to
Carnegie Corporation of New York. Washington, DC: Alliance for Excellent Education.
Table of Contents
LEARNING TO WRITE Kindergarten through Second Grade

CONTINUUM OF TEACHER SUPPORT ............................................................................................................. 2
LEARNING TO WRITE: PREWRITING AND PLANNING .............................................................................. 1
LEARNING TO WRITE: DRAFTING ................................................................................................................ 32
LEARNING TO WRITE: REVISION .................................................................................................................. 51
LEARNING TO WRITE: EDITING AND CONVENTIONS ............................................................................ 68
LEARNING TO WRITE: PUBLISHING ............................................................................................................ 78
SIX WRITING TRAIT RUBRIC ......................................................................................................................... 81
WRITING PROCESS PLANNING MATRIX ..................................................................................................... 85
Continuum of Teacher Support

Effective teachers scaffold childrens writing experiences. Teachers scaffold or support
childrens writing as they demonstrate, guide, and teach. They also vary the amount of support
they provide according to their instructional purpose and the childrens needs. The
Continuum of Teacher Support for Writing outlines the continuum from the greatest amount
of support to the least and includes information about what each level of support would look
like in a classroom (e.g. who is doing the writing, the arrangement of students, and types of
activities).
LEARNING TO WRITE: PREWRITING AND PLANNING
Preview
Prewriting involves analyzing a writing situation, as well as generating, collecting,

developing, and organizing ideas in preparation for writing.
Learning specific prewriting strategies provides developing writers with a structure
for approaching different writing tasks and, most importantly, lays the foundation
upon which they build their writing lives.
The CCSS require children to follow a plan-draft-revise writing process as early as
second grade, although all children in the primary grades can use prewriting
strategies to generate original text.
What is prewriting?
Prewriting involves collecting and organizing ideas in preparation for
writing. Gail Tompkins (2008) writes, Prewriting is the getting-ready-to-write stage.
Prewriting involves getting started with a topic, generating ideas and details related to the
topic, and organizing those ideas in preparation for writing. This is the time when writers
decide what they want to say and begin crafting how they want to say it. Getting started
with a topic is often one of the most difficult tasks that writers face, and writers must to
know multiple ways to get started and develop their ideas. Freewriting or journaling,
reading about a topic, participating in discussions, drawing pictures, sequencing images, or
creating graphic organizers are a few ways that writers prewrite.

Prewriting is usually the first stage in the writing process, but many writers
return to prewriting when they draft and revise their work. Because writing is a
recursive process, writers may return to prewriting at any point in the writing process.
Prewriting does not end when drafting begins. The term prewriting describes the activities
that writers do when collecting and organizing their ideas, and writers often return to
prewriting strategies to brainstorm and develop their ideas even after the drafting process
has begun. No matter the form prewriting takes or the point in the writing process that
prewriting occurs, the focus of these activities is always to collect, develop, and organize
words and ideas in preparation for writing.

Ideas, organization, and voice are at the heart of prewriting. Generating ideas,
developing details, and organizing thoughts in preparation for writing hinge upon the
writing task, purpose, and audience, but demonstrating audience awareness and interest in
the topic are also important elements of prewriting. The form, purpose, and intended
audience are important considerations that writers must take into account when they
begin to craft a piece of writing: Writers generate, select, and develop ideas appropriate to
the audience, task, and purpose of the message. Part of the prewriting process is pulling
apart the writing situation and deciding how to approach it. Audience expectations and
genre conventions may heavily influence the ideas writers include in a text and the way
1
that the text is put together. Prewriting gives writers the opportunity to generate, select,
develop, and structure their ideas to meet the conventions of an established genre and the
expectations of an intended audience.
Why should children learn to prewrite?

Children need strategies for approaching different writing situations,
including strategies for analyzing the writing situation and getting started with a
topic (Writing Study Group of the NCTE Executive Committee, 2004). Graham and Perin
(2007) report that teaching students writing strategies, including ways to approach a
writing task, has a strong effect on the quality of students writing. Aside from
summarizing, learning strategies for planning, drafting, revising, and collaboration had the
greatest effect on students writing. Graham and Perins findings echo the National Council
of Teachers of English (NCTE) Beliefs about the Teaching of Writing (2004), which states,
Students should become comfortable with prewriting techniques [and] multiple strategies
for developing and organizing a message. Writing is a complex, non-linear, problem
solving process that engages students cognitive and creative faculties. There is no single
path to quality writing that will work for all children, all the time, and in all circumstances;
however, research shows that students need structure, sequence, and a repertoire of
strategies to accomplish a writing task. Learning specific prewriting strategies provides
developing writers with a structure for approaching different writing tasks and, most
importantly, lays the foundation upon which they build their writing lives.

The ways that writers approach a writing task depends on the purpose of the
message. The NCTE Beliefs about the Teaching of Writing (2004) explains, The thinking,
the procedures, and the physical format in writing all differ when writers purposes vary.
Writing the steps for a science experiment is different from writing a descriptive paragraph
about a favorite literary character. As a result, the kinds of prewriting that children do in
preparation for the task differ. Children may use a flow map to write the steps for the
experiment and use the Draw-Label-Caption strategy to prewrite about their favorite
character in a book. Because the kind of writing is different, the prewriting strategy and the
thinking behind the writing are different. Prewriting prepares writers minds for the kind
of thinking that a writing situation requires, allowing them to put their thoughts together
and arrange them in a way that meets the conventions of the writing situation.
How does prewriting fit into the Common Core?

Prewriting strategies can support reading literature and content area
literacy. The CCSS not only divides writing into categories, but the Standards also divide
reading into categories. Children in Kindergarten through second grade are required to
read fiction and non-fiction texts and study the structures and features of those texts. Being
able to write in the genres implies an understanding of the genres themselves, and as a
result, intense study of the features of each genre can teach children how to analyze a
writing task, purpose, and audience. Prewriting strategies can help children dissect a text
and understand its features. For example, Kindergarten students can use flow maps to
sequence events from shared stories as a bridge to learning to write their own short
narratives. Learning to use a specific prewriting strategy combined with a particular genre
2
(i.e., pairing flow maps with narrative writing) reinforces text structures and provides
children with a go-to strategy for getting started with a writing task in that genre.

Children can prewrite in preparation for any type of writing. The CCSS divides
writing into three broad categories: opinion, explanatory/informative, and narrative.
Beginning in kindergarten, the Standards stipulate that students should produce text for
each of these writing genres, receive feedback from peers, and make changes to their
writing. The complexity grows with each grade-level, and beginning in second grade,
children are expected to implement a plan-draft-revise writing process to generate an
original text. Although prewriting and planning is not apparent in the Standards until
second grade, Kindergarten and first grade teachers can provide a foundation for
prewriting and familiarize students with the plan-draft-revise process.

Prewriting provides a non-threatening way to introduce sharing and
conferencing into the writing process. The CCSS also requires that children receive
feedback from teachers and peers to revise their writing (see Writing Standard 5)
beginning in Kindergarten. Because responding to a fully formed draft is daunting for
students, teachers in Kindergarten, first, and second grade can use prewriting (such as
Draw-Label-Caption, bubble maps, flow maps) as a springboard to meet this standard and
scaffold instruction so that students learn to use talking throughout the writing process.
For example, first graders can begin the school year using the Draw-Label-Caption strategy
to write descriptive paragraphs about something they did over the summer. As children
finish prewriting with Draw-Label-Caption, they share their drawings with peers and/or
the teacher. They explain their pictures while their classmates and/or teachers ask
questions about the drawing, and then return to the drawings, revise, and then proceed to
drafting. When children become more proficient readers and writers, they can transition
into sharing their drafts with each other.
Prewriting Strategy Explanation: Draw-Label-Caption
What is Draw-Label-Caption? Draw-Label-Caption is a prewriting strategy that can help

students focus on a topic and add details to a piece of writing. Drawing a picture before
writing allows students to become familiar with their topic and visualize details. This
strategy works well for narrative and descriptive writing, but can also be used for
expository writing and writing in the content areas.

Why should teachers use the Draw-Label-Caption strategy? The Draw-Label-Caption
strategy develops the focus, ideas, and details for writing. It helps students find what they
believe is most important about a topic and plan their approach to the topic. In addition,
the strategy helps develop students abilities to write descriptively about a single topic and
can be used to sequence a series of events or instructions. Finally, the strategy is versatile.
Students can Draw-Label-Caption in their journals or as part of a longer writing project.

3
Because Draw-Label-Caption permits students to draw and label pictures, it is easy to

scaffold instruction for students at multiple ability levels. Not all students can write at the
beginning of Kindergarten or first grade, but they can draw and acquire letters and words
as they learn to label and caption their drawings. Students who come to Kindergarten and
first grade with some letters and words can use the strategy to develop their existing skills
and learn new ones.

How can the Draw-Label-Caption strategy be used in the classroom? Draw-Label-
Caption can help students learn to write descriptive, informational, or narrative pieces.
When students draw and label pictures before writing, they are able to visualize details and
make notes for what should be included in their writing. Students can use the Draw-Label-
Caption strategy to create storyboards and flow maps in preparation for writing narratives.
Teachers may also find that Draw-Label-Caption supports content area learning,
particularly scientific or historical writing that requires students to describe a procedure or
an event.
Draw-Label-Caption and the Six Traits of Writing

Ideas. The ideas trait focuses on the content of a piece of writing. Drawing in preparation
for writing provides students with opportunities to think about and develop their ideas.
Ruth Culham (2005) explains that drawing pictures, experimenting with words and letters,
as well as writing captions for images are all ways that young students learn to convey
ideas. As students draw and label pictures, they learn to make general statements; as they
practice drawing and labeling, they learn to select and expound upon specific details. Draw-
Label-Caption supports the natural progression from pictures to letters to words to
sentences. The strategy provides a starting place for all writers to find, visualize, and
develop a topic.

Organization. The Draw-Label-Caption strategy gives students a way to collect their words
and thoughts before writing a draft. The drawing helps students focus on the big picture
of their writing, while labeling the drawing helps them focus on the smaller details. The
attention to smaller details is important, because it allows students to find a direction for
their writing. Whereas the big picture can be overwhelming, the labels students generate
provide a loose structure for the final product. Similarly, writing captions for drawings may
provide students with a starting place for their topic sentence or conclusion, in addition to
helping them find the focus for their draft. The captions are particularly useful when
students arrange two or three of their drawings and captions into a sequence of events.

Voice. Voice is, perhaps, the hardest of the traits to teach and the hardest to assess. At the
prewriting stage, students can develop their voice through expressive language and images.
Draw-Label-Caption is one strategy that lends itself to developing students writers voices
because they draw an image and select what is most important or most fascinating about
that image. Labeling the drawings and the other labels in the drawings pulls details from
the students mind and onto paper. This strategy allows teachers to see what students find
most important about a topic (because the drawings are labeled), thus giving teachers the
opportunity to counsel students on ways to add more detail. All of these efforts manifest
later in the writing process, but can be nurtured at this early stage.
4
Connecting Draw-Label-Caption and the CCSS

Expository and Informational Writing. The Draw-Label-Caption strategy can be used to
teach students to write descriptively for informational and expository writing tasks. When
teachers use the Draw-Label-Caption strategy to teach descriptive expository and
informational writing, the following CCSS may apply:
Kindergarten
W.K.2 Use a combination of drawing, dictating, and writing to compose informative
/ explanatory texts in which they name what they are writing about and supply
some information about the topic.
First Grade
W.1.2 Write informative / explanatory texts in which they name a topic, supply
some facts about the topic, and provide some sense of closure.
Second Grade
W.2.2 Write informative / explanatory texts in which they introduce a topic, use
facts and definitions to develop points, and provide a concluding statement or
section.

Narrative Writing. The Draw-Label-Caption strategy can be used to teach students to
sequence events and write descriptive narratives. This strategy may prove particularly
effective for English language learners and visual learners, especially when combined with
the flow map graphic organizer. When teachers use the Draw-Label-Caption strategy in
coordination with the flow map graphic organizer to teach narrative writing, the following
CCSS may apply:
Kindergarten
RL.K.2 With prompting and support, retell familiar stories, including key details.
RL.K.3 With prompting and support, identify characters, settings, and major events
in a story.
RL.K.5 Recognize common types of texts.
RL.K.7 With prompting and support, describe the relationship between
illustrations and the story in which they appear.
RI.K.3 With prompting and support, describe the connection between events or
pieces of information in a text.
RI.K.7 With prompting and support, describe the relationship between illustrations
and the text in which they appear.
RF.K.4 Read emergent-reader texts with purpose and understanding.
W.K.3 Use a combination of drawing, dictating, and writing to narrate a single event
or several loosely linked events, tell the events in the order in which they occurred,
and provide a reaction to what happened.
W.K.7 Participate in shared writing projects.
W.K.8 With guidance and support from adults, recall information from experiences
or gather information from provided sources to answer a question.
SL.K.5 Add drawings or other visual displays to descriptions as desired to provide
additional detail.
5
L.K.1f Produce and expand complete sentences in shared language activities.

First Grade
RF.1.1a Recognize the distinguishing features of a sentence.
RL.1.2 Retell stories, including key details, and demonstrate understanding of their
central message or lesson.
RL.1.3 Describe characters, settings, and major events in a story, using key details.
RL.1.5 Explain major differences between books that tell stories and books that
give information, drawing on a wide reading of a range of text types.
RL.1.7 Use illustrations and details in a story to describe its characters, setting, or
events.
RI.1.2 Identify the main topic and retell key details of a text.
RI.1.3 Describe the connection between two events or pieces of information in a
text.
RI.1.7 Use the illustrations and details in a text to describe its key ideas.
W.1.3 Write narratives in which they recount two or more appropriately
sequenced events, include some details regarding what happened, use temporal
words to signal event order, and provide some sense of closure.
W.1.7 Participate in shared writing projects.
W.1.8 With guidance and support from adults, recall information from experiences
or gather information provided from sources to answer a question.
SL.1.5 Add drawings or other visual displays to descriptions when appropriate to
clarify ideas, thoughts, and feelings.
SL.1.6 Produce complete sentences when appropriate to task and situation.
L.1.1j Produce and expand complete simple and compound declarative,
interrogative, imperative, and exclamatory sentences in response to prompts.
Second Grade
RL.2.2 Recount stories, including fables and folktales from diverse cultures, and
determine their central message, lesson, or moral.
RL.2.5 Describe the overall structure of a story, including describing how the
beginning introduces the story and the ending concludes the action.
RL.2.7 Use information gained from the illustrations and words in a print or digital
text to demonstrate understanding of its characters, setting, or plot.
RI.2.3 Describe the connection between a series of historical events, scientific ideas
or concepts, or steps in technical procedures in a text.
RI.2.7 Explain how specific images contribute to and clarify a text.
W.2.3 Write narratives in which they recount a well-elaborated event or short
sequence of events, include details to describe actions, thoughts, and feelings, use
temporal words to signal event order, and provide a sense of closure.
W.2.8 Recall information from experience or gather information from provided
sources to answer a question.
L.2.1f Produce, expand, and rearrange complete simple and compound sentences.

Writing in Literature. Teachers can use the Draw-Label-Caption strategy to teach
students how to identify the characters and setting in a story. In addition, the Draw-Label-
6
Caption strategy can support students as they make connections between the illustrations
in a text and the words in a text. When teachers use the Draw-Label-Caption strategy to
write about literary texts, the following CCSS may apply:
Kindergarten
in a story.
First Grade
RL.1.7 Use illustrations and details in a story to describe its characters, settings, or
events.
Second Grade
Sample Scope and Sequence for Draw-Label-Caption in K-2
Draw-Label-Caption for Expository Writing in Kindergarten

Focus and Learning
Targets
Focus. Students will begin
the quarter exploring
relationships between
families and friends. They
will read books around
themes of families and
friends. Students will write
an expository piece about a
family member or a friend.

Learning Targets.
I can select a topic and
information to share.

I can use drawings and
words to name and give
information about a
topic.

I can explain how
illustrations help me
understand a text.

I can revise my drawings
Common Core Standards
Instructional Sequence
W.K.2 Use a combination of

drawing, dictating, and
writing to compose
informative / explanatory
texts in which they name
what they are writing about
and supply some
information about the topic.

RI.K.7 With prompting and
support, describe the
relationship between
illustrations and the text in
which they appear.

SL.K.4 Describe familiar
people and, with prompting
and support, provide
additional detail.

SL.K.5 Add drawings to
descriptions as desired to
provide additional detail.

Students will
1) Investigate different
kinds of
relationships,
focusing on families
and friends.

2) Draw a picture of a
family member or a
friend. (I do/you do)

3) Write one or two
word labels for 3-5
important parts of
their drawing. (I
do/we do/you do)

4) Dictate and/or
attempt to write one
sentence to caption
the drawing. (I do/we
do/you do)

5) Revise or re-draw
7
Draw-Label-Caption for Expository Writing in Kindergarten

Focus and Learning
Targets
and descriptions to give
more detail about my
topic.
I can write and expand a

complete sentence.
I can capitalize the first
letter of a sentence and
put a punctuation mark
at the end of a sentence.

L.K.1f Produce and expand
complete sentences in
shared language activities.

L.K.2a Capitalize the first
word in a sentence and the
pronoun I.

L.K.2b Recognize and name
end punctuation.
pictures, adding color
and details as
appropriate. (you do)
Draw-Label-Caption for Descriptive Writing in First Grade

Focus and Learning
Targets
Focus. Students will begin a
unit on the animal kingdom.
Over the course of the 6-
week unit, students will read
1 book about a different
animal for 5 weeks. They
will use the Draw-Label-
Caption prewriting strategy
to take notes on the animals,
and during the 6th week,
students will write a
descriptive (informational)
paragraph about an animal
of their choice.

Learning Targets.
I can select a topic and
information to share.

I can work with a teacher
or peer to add details to
my writing.

I can use information
from sources in my
W.1.2 Write informative

Students will
1) Read books about
some facts about the topic
different animals. (we
and provide some sense of
do)
closure.

2) Draw-Label-Caption
W.1.5 With guidance and
pictures of the
support from adults, focus
animals they read
on a topic, respond to
about. (we do)
questions and suggestions

from peers, and add details
3) Select one animal
to strengthen writing as
from all of the
needed.
animals studied. (I do

/ you do)

support from adults, recall
4) Revise their drawings
information from
of the selected
experiences or gather
animal. (I do / you
information from provided
do)
sources to answer a

question.
5) Draw-Label-Caption

the animal of their
RI.1.10 With prompting and
choice. (I do / we do /
support, read informational
you do)
texts appropriately complex

8
Draw-Label-Caption for Descriptive Writing in First Grade

Focus and Learning
Targets
writing.
I can read first grade

books about animals.
I can follow rules for

peer review.
I can use adjectives to
add descriptions to my
writing.
I can write expanded
sentences.

for grade 1.

SL.1.1a Follow agreed-upon
rules for discussions.

SL.1.4 Describe things with
relevant details, expressing
ideas and feelings clearly.

SL.1.5 Add drawings to
descriptions when
appropriate to clarify ideas,
thoughts, and feelings.

L.1.1f Use frequently
occurring adjectives.

L.1.1j Produce and expand
complete simple declarative,
interrogative, and
exclamatory sentences.
6) Write one or two
word labels for 5-7
parts of their
drawing. (I do / we
do / you do)

7) Meet in pairs or small
groups to talk about
the drawings and add
one label to their
drawing based on
conversations with
peers or teachers.
(we do / you do)

8) Write a paragraph (3-
5 sentences) about
the drawing using
key words from the
labels. *Paragraphs
should include a topic
sentence in which
students name the
animal they have
written about and a
concluding sentence.
(I do / we do / you
do)

9) Meet in pairs or small
groups to share
drawings and
sentences or share
drawings and
sentences with the
class. (you do)
Draw-Label-Caption for Narrative Writing in Second Grade

Focus and Learning
Targets
Focus. Students will learn
classroom procedures at the
beginning of the school year.
The class will sequence a
series of images for
appropriate classroom
conduct and write a series of
instructions for morning
procedures. Groups of
students will work together
to write a series of
instructions for other
classroom procedures.
Students work will be
displayed around the
classroom for the remainder
of the year.

Learning Targets.
I can write a narrative
about an event.

I can work with others to
write a narrative about
an event.
W.2.3 Write narratives in

Students will
which they recount a well-
1) Arrange a series of
elaborated event or
images that depict
sequence of events, include
the morning
details to describe actions,
procedure (coming
use temporal words to signal
into class, hanging
event order, and provide a
their backpacks, and
sense of closure.
doing the morning

bell work). (we do)
W.2.7 Participate in shared

writing projects.
2) Label the images, one

at a time, either as a
class or in table
groups. (we do)

SL.2.2 Recount or describe
3) Write one-sentence
key ideas or details from
captions for each of
visually presented
the images, either as
information.
a class or in table
groups. (we do)

4) Use temporal words
to write a paragraph
about the morning
routine. (we do / you
do)

5) Repeat the process in
small groups to write
procedures for other
class activities, like
going to recess, going
to lunch, what to do
in the library, etc. (I
do / we do / you do)

6) Present images and
paragraphs in class.

10
!"#$%&%'#()*%&%+#,-./%0")$"1-/2%34"#4)25%
67189%:);)")/8)%
81&'B)#3CD#,&9CE#$@*;'6%)#%&7-'=#;'1&9$'6%:"&;%6'(*=:6'*;'#'%*$<='#;"'#""'"&%#<96'%*'#'$<&=&'*('
3)<@;74'B)#3<;7'#'$<=%:)&',&(*)&'3)<@;7'#99*36'6%:"&;%6'%*',&=*+&'(#+<9<#)'%1&'%*$<='#;"'/<6:#9<M&'
"&%#<964'81<6'6%)#%&7-'3*)?6'3&99'(*)';#))#@/&'#;"'"&6=)<$@/&'3)<@;7I',:%'=#;'#96*',&':6&"'(*)'
&N$*6<%*)-'3)<@;7'#;"'3)<@;7'<;'%1&'=*;%&;%'#)&#64''
0".8)<7")'
8&99'6%:"&;%6'%*'")#3'#'$<=%:)&'*('
#')&#9'*)'<+#7<;&"'6=&;&4'81&'
")#3<;7'61*:9"',&'=9&#)'#;"'
6<+$9&4''
!1=)")/-#-./%#/<%>?4)/@1./%
A)"(#*%+#,-./@'2'!99*3'6%:"&;%6'
%*'"<=%#%&'*;&'*)'%3*'6&;%&;=&6'
#,*:%'%1&<)'")#3<;76'<;'9<&:'*('
3)<@;7'#'=#$@*;4'
>;6%):=%'6%:"&;%6'%*'9#,&9'%1&'
+*6%'<+$*)%#;%'$#)%6'*('%1&'
")#3<;74'
!)@8"1,-B)%C"1-/2'2'A6&'%1&'
B)#3CD#,&9CE#$@*;'6%)#%&7-'%*'
3)<%&'"&6=)<$@/&'$#)#7)#$164%
!6?'6%:"&;%6'%*'3)<%&'*;&'*)'%3*'
6&;%&;=&6'#6'#'=#$@*;'(*)'%1&'
")#3<;74'
34."5(.#"<@%#/<%D*.$%E#,@%2'
A6&'%1&'B)#3CD#,&9CE#$@*;'
6%)#%&7-'%*',:<9"'6%*)-,*#)"6'*)'
F*3'+#$6'&;')*:%&'%*'3)<@;7'
;#))#@/&64'
>?#K,*)%
F<<%!)4#1*@%2'G;=*:)#7&'6%:"&;%6'
%*')&/<6&'%1&<)'")#3<;76'#;"'9#,&96'
#6'%1&-',&7<;'%*'3)<%&'%1&<)'
=#$@*;64'H9"&)'6%:"&;%6'+#-',&'
#,9&'%*'9#,&9'%1&<)'9#,&964'G#=1'
9#,&9'=#;',&=*+&'#;'#""&"'"&%#<9'
*)'"&6=)<$@/&'6&;%&;=&4''
G%J7K,)<%I12I%1/4.%4I)%#1"%$14I%4I)%
."#/2)%(#@9)4(#**%1/%K5%I#/<@L%
G/8*7<)%!1#*.27)%#/<%HI.72I4@%2'
.1*3'6%:"&;%6'1*3'%*':6&'
"<#9*7:&'#;"'%1*:71%',:,,9&6'%*'
61*3'%1&'%1*:71%6'#;"'(&&9<;76'*('
$&*$9&I'#;<+#96I'#;"'*,J&=%6'<;'
%1&<)'")#3<;764%
D1/1@I%4I)%!"#$1/2@%2'!99*3'
6%:"&;%6'%*'K;<61'*)')&=)&#%&'%1&<)'
")#3<;76'#L&)'%1&-'3)<%&4%
!"#$%&"'()*+'!"#$%&'()*$!#+,"#&-.$/0&+0#*1$23'4#',-'.%&/&'0&1#'2'33345+64*)7'
11
!"#$%&#'()%*#+,-./0"($"1,.2/34"#4(25/
6"1,.2/&#'()7/#.8/*#+,-.7/9:1;</=(>("(.;(/
E1+F/!(7;"1'(/5-:"/)#'()7G/
BC#D+)(/
&#'()/(H("54J1.2G/H#:1'*('-*=)'
A#,&A6':#<',&:*+&'#'"&%#9A'*)'#'
6&<%&<:&4''
K88/)-47/->/8(7;"1+,H(/)#'()7G'
I6&'"&6:)9,9<7'3*)"6'%*'A#,&A'
-*=)'A#,&A64''
E1+F/&#'()/;-.H("7#,-.7I/4J-:2J47I/
>(()1.27I/#.8/7-:.87G/
!1#)-2/':'')(7'61*3'
:*</&)6#;*<64/
EJ-:2J4/':'')(7/61*3'%1*=71%6'
#<"'(&&A9<764/
*#))%-:4/':'')(7/61*3'6*=<"64/
E1+F/E:"./5-:"/)#'()7/1.4-/7(.4(.;(7G/
34(+/?''09:@'*<&'*('-*=)'A#,&A64'
'
34(+/@''G&:9"&'31#%'%1#%'A#,&A'"&6:)9,&64'
'
34(+/A''8)9%&'*<&'*)'%3*'6&<%&<:&6'#,*=%'
%1&'A#,&A'-*='$9:@&"4/
34(+/?//8)9%&'#':#$;*<'(*)'%1&'$9:%=)&4'
>'?=+$&"'1971'9<%*'%1&'#9)'39%1'%1&'
*)#<7&',#6@&%,#AA'9<'+-'1#<"64''
'
34(+/@//8)9%&'6&<%&<:&6'(*)'&#:1'A#,&A4'
5#B'>'#+'?=+$9<7'19714'>'#+'%19<@9<7'6$
"78#$6$,+)$9+:#$0"'.$."70;'>'%1)*3'
%1&',#6@&%,#AA'9<%*'%1&'#9)4'
<+.:#0=+>>B'>'#+'1*A"9<7'#<'*)#<7&'
,#6@&%,#AA4'C1&',#6@&%,#AA'(&&A6'
1&#/-'9<'+-'1#<"64'
?778B'C1&'<&%'63961&6'31&<'+-'
,#6@&%,#AA'(#AA6'%1)*=71'%1&'1**$4'
'
34(+/A''8)9%&'#'$#)#7)#$14''
/////>'?=+$&"'1971'9<%*'%1&'#9)'39%1'%1&'
*)#<7&',#6@&%,#AA'9<'+-'1#<"64'6$"78#$6$
,+)$9+:#$0"'.$."70@$>'%1*=71%'%*'+-6&A(4'
C1&',#AA')*AA&"'*D'*('+-'E<7&);$6'#<"'
F&3'%*3#)"'%1&',#:@,*#)"4'/A'.";'C1&'
,#AA'(&AA'%1)*=71'%1&'<&%4/
!"#$%&"'()*+'!"#$%&'()*$!#+,"#&-.$/0&+0#*1$23'4#',-'.%&/&'0&1#'2'33345+64*)7'
12
!"#$%&%'#()*%&%+#,-./%01"#1)23%45#6,*)%
Thank you!
Auntie
Happy
birthday,
Auntie!
3 balloons
Aunties bag
me
Aunties tall shoes
I gave balloons to my auntie for her

birthday.
13
Prewriting Strategy Explanation: Bubble Map

What is the bubble map prewriting strategy? The bubble map is a prewriting strategy
that can help students focus on a topic, generate ideas related to the topic, and develop
supporting details. The strategy allows students to map the connections between related
ideas and details, organize their thoughts, and prioritize ideas before they begin writing.

Why should teachers use the bubble map prewriting strategy? The bubble map
strategy is very versatile and can support expository/informative writing as well as
persuasive writing. Teachers can scaffold the strategy so that students use the bubble map
graphic organizer to develop sentences and paragraphs. In addition, teachers can scaffold
the use of bubble maps based on students ability levels. For example, some students may
need to draw pictures in addition to writing words in their bubble maps, while other
students can write one or two words in each bubble to plan their writing.

How can the bubble map strategy be used in the classroom? Students can use the
bubble map strategy to plan writing in any of the content areas. As students become more
familiar with the strategy, they can develop more intricate bubble maps with increasing
complexity. Teachers in lower elementary can build a strong foundation for this prewriting
strategy by keeping the bubble maps simple, providing clear examples and models, and
giving students practice translating the ideas and details on the bubble map into sentences
and paragraphs.

Bubble Maps and the Six Traits of Writing

Ideas. The bubble map strategy supports students as they generate and develop their ideas
for a piece of writing. The bubble map strategy shows connections between related ideas
and allows students to locate specific details related to a much broader topic.

Organization. The bubble map strategy gives students the opportunity to sort, categorize,
and label their thoughts. Students organize a piece of writing as they group related
thoughts together and draw lines to show connections. The strategy also allows students to
see the hierarchy of topics, ideas, and details, which helps them prioritize their thoughts as
they begin writing.

Voice. Students develop their writing voice as they select the ideas and details that are
most important and arrange that information on a bubble map. Although assessing voice
in a bubble map may not be appropriate, teachers can determine whether a student is well
on his/her way to expressing their writers voice when the ideas included in the bubble
map are original, thoughtful, appropriate to the task and audience, and expressive.

14
Bubble Maps and the CCSS

Although planning and prewriting are not part of the Common Core State Standards for
lower elementary, the Standards do require that young students sort objects and ideas into
categories, focus a piece of writing, and supply details or reasons in their writing. Bubble
maps build a foundation for prewriting and planning, which the CCSS does require in the
later grades. When students use a bubble map to prewrite in lower elementary, they are
learning how to gather and sort ideas, connect related ideas, and focus on specific ideas in
the context of a larger topic.

Sample Scope and Sequence for Bubble Maps in K-2
Bubble Maps for Expository Writing in Kindergarten

Focus and Learning
Targets
unit on Food at the
beginning of the second
quarter. Students will read
books about different types
of foods, markets, and food
production. Students will
visit a local farm, and then
write a friendly letter thank
the farmer for allowing them
to visit.

Learning Targets.
I can select an idea

and information to
share.

I can use drawings

and words to give
information about a
topic.

I can write and

expand a complete
sentence.

I can capitalize the

first letter of a
sentence and put a
punctuation mark at
W.K.2 Use a combination of

drawing, dictating, and
writing to compose
informative / explanatory
what they are writing about
and supply some
information about the topic.

descriptions as desired to
provide additional detail.

L.K.1f Produce and expand
complete sentences in
shared language activities.

L.K.2b Recognize and name
end punctuation.
Students will
1) Read a variety of
books on different
foods, markets, and
food production. (we
do)

2) Visit a local farm. (we
do)

3) Draw a bubble map
on the topic Local
Farms. (I do / we do
/ you do)
Topic: Local Farm
Idea 1: Something
you liked
Idea 2: Something
you learned

4) Generate a list of
things the class liked
at the farm and things
the class learned at
the farm. (I do / we
do)

5) Select one thing they
liked and one thing
they learned from the
15
Bubble Maps for Expository Writing in Kindergarten

Focus and Learning
Targets
the end of the
sentence.
class list and record it
on their bubble maps.
(I do / we do / you
do)

6) Develop 1-2 details
for the 2 ideas. (I do /
we do / you do)

7) Write a topic
sentence for the
paragraph and copy it
onto the paragraph
organizer. (We do)

8) Write 2-3 sentences
for each of the ideas
on the paragraph
organizer. (I do / we
do / you do)

9) Write a concluding
sentence for the
paragraph and copy it
onto the paragraph
organizer. (I do / we
do / you do)

10)Rewrite the
paragraph into the
friendly letter format.
Illustrate the
paragraphs as time
allows.
Bubble Maps for Expository Writing in First Grade

Focus and Learning
Targets
Focus. Students will learn
about ancient civilizations.

W.1.2 Write informative /
explanatory texts in which
Students will
1) Read books and
16

Focus and Learning
Targets
They will read books about
different ancient
civilizations and write
multiple informative
paragraphs about different
ancient civilizations.
Students will combine their
paragraphs at the end of the
unit into a picture book
about the ancient
civilizations that they
studied.

Learning Targets.
I can write an
informative
paragraph with a
topic sentence,
details, and a
conclusion.

I can work with peers

to research and write
about a topic.

I can gather
information from
sources.

I can find the main

idea and retell key
details of a text.

I can use past-tense

verbs.

I can write simple

and compound
sentences.

they name a topic, supply
some facts about the topic,
closure.

research and writing
projects.

information from
sources to answer a
question.

RI.1.2 Identify the main
topic and retell key details of
a text.

RI.1.10 With prompting and
support, read informational
texts appropriately complex
for grade 1.

L.1.1e Use verbs to convey a
sense of the past.

complete simple and

compound declarative,
interrogative, and
exclamatory sentences.

L.1.6 Use words and phrases
acquired through
conversations, reading and
being read to, and
responding to texts,
including frequently
participate in shared
learning activities
about ancient
civilizations.

2) Complete a bubble
map for each of the
civilizations they
learn about.
Topic: Ancient
Civilizations
Ideas (one for each
bubble map):
Greece, Egypt,
Mayan, Chinese
Details (for each
bubble map):
Interesting facts or
details about the
ancient civilization
studied that week

3) Write a topic
sentence, supporting
sentences, and a
conclusion from each
bubble map.

4) Illustrate each
paragraph.
5) Compile the
completed
paragraphs and
illustrations into a
picture book.
17

Focus and Learning
Targets
occurring conjunctions to
signal simple relationships.

Bubble Maps for Persuasive Writing in Second Grade+

Focus and Learning
Targets
Focus. Students will study
planets in our solar system.
They will read books about
different planets in science,
and then write a persuasive
essay about which planet
they would like to live on.

Learning Targets.
I can express and

support my opinion
when writing.

I can revise and edit

my writing with a
peer or teacher.

I can use information

from sources in my
writing.

I can use adjectives

and adverbs to make
my writing more
interesting.

I can produce,
expand, and
rearrange simple and
compound sentences.
W.2.1 Write opinion pieces Students will

in which they introduce the
1) Read books about the
topic they are writing about,
planets in our solar
state an opinion, supply
system.
reasons that support the

opinion, use linking words to
2) Take notes about the
connect opinion and
planets the using
reasons, and provide a
Cornell notes system.
concluding statement or

section.
3) Create a bubble map

about the planet they
would like to live on:
support from adults and
Topic: The planet
peers, focus on a topic and
that students
strengthen writing as
choose to live on
needed by revising and
(e.g, Mars, Pluto)
editing.
Idea 1: About the

planet
W.2.8 Recall information
Idea 2: Why I would
from experiences or gather
like to live there
Idea 3: Why I would
sources to answer a
like to live there
question.
Details: Support
each idea with 2
details

L.2.1e Use adjectives and
4) Share bubble maps
adverbs, and choose
with a peer or a
between them depending on
teacher. Add one or
what is to be modified.
more details to the

bubble map based on
L.2.1f Produce, expand, and
the prewriting
rearrange complete simple
conference.
and compound sentences.

18
Bubble Maps for Persuasive Writing in Second Grade+

Focus and Learning
Targets
5) Write a multi-
paragraph essay that
introduces the planet
and tells why they
want to live there.

6) Self-edit or peer edit
rough draft.
7) Revise rough draft
and rewrite onto
folder paper.

8) Illustrate the essay
and share with the
class.

19
!"##$%&'()&*+%,+-./0&12+(2%03&
4"-56&7%8%+%/5%&
?7446$!<),,-%=!-:!)!@$0:)&6$!,0$/0-&%=!:*0)*$=(!*1)*!.)%!:7,,+0*!,$0:7):-@$A!$5,+:-*+0(A!)%#!
-%'+0<)&+%)6!/0-&%=!).0+::!*1$!.+%*$%*!)0$):2!B1-:!:*0)*$=(!1$6,:!:*7#$%*:!'+.7:!+%!)!*+,-.A!
=$%$0)*$!-#$):!0$6)*$#!*+!*1$!*+,-.A!)%#!#$@$6+,!:7,,+0&%=!#$*)-6:2!C:-%=!*1$!47446$!<),!:*0)*$=(!
)66+/:!:*7#$%*:!*+!$5,6+0$!.+%%$.&+%:!4$*/$$%!0$6)*$#!-#$):!)%#!-#$%&'(!:,$.-D.!#$*)-6:!-%!*1$!
.+%*$5*!+'!)!6)0=$0!*+,-.2!
*+95%:"+%!
"#$%&'(!)!*+,-.!)%#!/0-*$!-*!)*!*1$!*+,!
+'!)!,-$.$!+'!,),$02!30)/!)!4+5!+0!.-0.6$!
)0+7%#!-*2!
8)9$!)!6-:*!+'!-#$):!)4+7*!*1$!*+,-.2!
;1++:$!*1$!<+:*!-<,+0*)%*!+0!<+:*!
-%*$0$:&%=!-#$):!'0+<!*1$!6-:*2!
?9$9+&?9:%!E!C:$!+%$!.+6+0!*+!+7*6-%$!
*1$!*+,-.A!)%+*1$0!.+6+0!*+!+7*6-%$!*1$!
-#$):A!)%#!)%+*1$0!.+6+0!*+!+7*6-%$!*1$!
#$*)-6:2!
>0-*$!*1$!-#$):!%$)0!*1$!*+,-.!+%!*1$!
,),$02!30)/!)!4+5!+0!.-0.6$!)0+7%#!
$).1!+%$2!30)/!)!6-%$!*+!.+%%$.*!$).1!
-#$)!*+!*1$!*+,-.2!
'9:%$&2@%&12+(2%03!E!8+#$6!*1$!
:*0)*$=(!'+0!:*7#$%*:!4$'+0$!)66+/-%=!
*1$<!*+!,0).&.$!-%#$,$%#$%*6(2!
8)9$!)!6-:*!#$*)-6:!'+0!$).1!-#$)2!3$.-#$!
/1)*!-:!<+:*!-<,+0*)%*!+0!<+:*!
-%*$0$:&%=!'0+<!*1$!6-:*2!
>0-*$!*1$!#$*)-6:!%$)0!*1$!-#$)!*1$(!
#$:.0-4$2!30)/!)!4+5!+0!.-0.6$!)0+7%#!
$).1!#$*)-62!30)/!)!6-%$!*+!.+%%$.*!
$).1!-#$)!*+!*1$!.+00$.*!#$*)-62!!
DE(B)$%&
&
&
&
&
&
&
&
&
&
&
&
&
!
;-<%+%/.(.9/!
;+(,&(/:&=(#%$&*-52"+%>!E!F66+/!
:*7#$%*:!*+!#0)/!)%#!6)4$6!,-.*70$:!-%!
*1$!47446$:2!
A>%&*+9B)2>&E!"%.67#$!,0+<,*:!'+0!*1$!
-#$)!)%#!#$*)-6!47446$:!*+!1$6,!=$*!*1$!
.0$)&@$!G7-.$:!H+/-%=2!I-@$!'$/$0!
,0+<,*:!'+0!.+<,6$&%=!*1$!47446$!<),!
):!:*7#$%*:!6$)0%!*1$!:*0)*$=(2!
;+(,&!"##$%&'()>&#3&C(/:!E!30)/!
47446$!<),:!4(!1)%#!+%!46)%9!,),$02&
F9)-5&
F%.-$%*!;-@-6-J)&+%:!
L76$#!4(!
,1)0)+1:!
!
!
K=(,*!
!
!
!
G:%(&
?7-6*!*1$!
,(0)<-#:!
!
!
;%2(-$>&
20
Prewriting Strategy Explanation: Flow Map Graphic Organizer
What is a flow map? The flow map graphic organizer is a prewriting strategy that can be
used for sequencing events in narratives or steps in a procedure. The strategy teaches
students to put information in sequential order, retell steps or events in a narrative or
procedure, and expand upon individual steps or events in a narrative or procedure.

Why should teachers use the flow map graphic organizer? The flow map graphic
organizer is a versatile prewriting strategy that can be used across the content areas in any
class or lesson that requires students to understand a process or retell a series of events.
Students can use the flow map to write summaries of a process or story, or they can use the
flow map to plan original narratives.

How can the flow map graphic organizer be used in the classroom? The flow map
graphic organizer can be used across the curriculum to show the steps in a process or put
events in order. For example, students can use the flow map to show the water cycle in
science, a timeline of their lives in social studies, or steps for brushing their teeth in health.
Math teachers can use the strategy to break down the steps in solving a problem. The
strategy is versatile, and it can be incorporated into any lesson in which students learn a
process or story.

Language Arts teachers may find the strategy particularly useful for retelling stories and
writing narratives. Using the Draw-Label-Caption strategy with the flow map is one way to
scaffold instruction and pull out more details and descriptions. For example, students can
draw, label, and caption the major events in a story, put images from a story in order and
then explain what the images show, or use the flow maps to plan original narratives.

Flow Maps and the Six Traits of Writing

Organization. Flow maps provide a skeletal structure for writing a process or narrative.
Once students place events in order, they can begin to elaborate on those events and tie
them together with transitional words and phrases. In this way, flow maps provide a
natural beginning, middle, and ending to a procedure or narrative piece.

Ideas and Voice. Narrative writing is one genre that lends itself to developing the
students ideas and writers voices. Deciding the most important events in a narrative and
putting those events in order not only demonstrate that students are aware of their
audience, but it also shows what students find most interesting or most valuable in an
experience. Providing instruction for students to add thoughts and feelings about events in
a narrative flow map is one additional way that teachers can support students developing
their writers voices.

21
Connecting Flow Maps and the CCSS

The flow map graphic organizer teaches students to put events and steps in order.
When teachers encourage students to use the flow map to sequence events in a process,
then the following CCSS may apply:
Kindergarten
in a story.
RL.K.5 Recognize common types of texts.
RI.K.3 With prompting and support, describe the connection between events or
pieces of information in a text.
RI.K.7 With prompting and support, describe the relationship between illustrations
and the text in which they appear.
RF.K.4 Read emergent-reader texts with purpose and understanding.
First Grade
RL.1.5 Explain major differences between books that tell stories and books that
give information, drawing on a wide reading of a range of text types.
RL.1.7 Use illustrations and details in a story to describe its characters, setting, or
events.
RI.1.2 Identify the main topic and retell key details of a text.
RI.1.3 Describe the connection between two events or pieces of information in a
text.
RI.1.7 Use the illustrations and details in a text to describe its key ideas.
RF.1.4a Read grade-level text with purpose and understanding.
Second Grade
RL.2.5 Describe the overall structure of a story, including describing how the
beginning introduces the story and the ending concludes the action.
RI.2.3 Describe the connection between a series of historical events, scientific ideas
or concepts, or steps in technical procedures in a text.
RI.2.7 Explain how specific images contribute to and clarify a text.
RF.2.4a Read grade-level text with purpose and understanding.

22
The flow map graphic organizer can be used with the Draw-Label-Caption
prewriting strategy to write descriptive narratives. When teachers use the flow map to
teach students to plan descriptive narratives or write procedures, the following CCSS may
apply:
Kindergarten
or several loosely linked events, tell the events in the order in which they occurred,
and provide a reaction to what happened.
W.K.7 Participate in shared writing projects.
First Grade
W.1.3 Write narratives in which they recount two or more appropriately
sequenced events, include some details regarding what happened, use temporal
words to signal event order, and provide some sense of closure.
or gather information provided from sources to answer a question.
Second Grade
W.2.8 Recall information from experience or gather information from provided
sources to answer a question.
SL.2.4 Tell a story or recount an experience with appropriate facts and relevant,
descriptive details, speaking audibly in coherent sentences.
SL.2.5 Add drawings or other visual displays to stories or recounts of experiences
when appropriate to clarify ideas, thoughts, and feelings.
SL.2.6 Produce complete sentences when appropriate to task and situation in order
to provide requested detail or clarification.
23
Sample Scope and Sequence for Flow Maps in K-2
Flow Maps for Re-Telling Narratives in Kindergarten

Focus and Learning
Targets
unit on fictional stories.
They will read multiple
fictional stories in class and
re-tell a favorite story for the
class using a flow map and
Draw-Label-Caption.

Learning Targets.
I can retell familiar
stories and include key
details.

I can identify the main
characters, settings, and
major events in a story.

I can share my work with
a classmate or teacher.
RL.K.2 With prompting and Students will

support, retell familiar
1) Read a story as a
stories, including key details.
class.

RL.K.3 With prompting and
2) Identify and discuss 3
support, identify characters,
parts of the story:
settings, and major events in
What happened at
a story.
the beginning, in the

middle, and in the
SL.K.1a Follow agreed-upon
end. (we do / you do)

3) Discuss the
SL.K.2 Confirm
Organization
understanding of a text read
writing trait.
aloud by asking and

answering questions about
4) Record the beginning,
key details.
middle, and end of

the story using the
flow map. (I do, we
descriptions to provide
do, you do)
additional detail.
Draw 3 pictures

that represent the
beginning, middle,
and end.
Label each of the
drawings to identify
the character and
setting.
Write a caption for
each drawing that
tells what
happened.

5) Share their
completed flow maps
with a teacher or
classmate.

24
Flow Maps for Writing Procedures in First Grade

Focus and Learning
Targets
Focus. Students will use the
writing process (plan, draft,
revise) to complete a writing
task. They will learn the
actions that writers perform
to complete a writing task,
and they will learn how to
reflect on the actions that
they take when completing a
writing task. For this unit,
students will complete a
plan, draft, revise writing
project and write a process
piece that explains the way
that they approached the
task.

Learning Targets.
I can write a reflective
narrative about my
writing process.

I can share my writing
with my teacher.

which they recount two or
more appropriately
sequenced events, include
some details regarding what
happened, use temporal
words to signal event order,
closure.

After completing an
extended writing project,
students will
1) Use their writing logs
to identify what they
did first, second,
third, and so on to
complete the writing
task. (I do, we do, you
do)

2) Record what they did
first, second, third,
and so on using a
flow map. Students
will use a
combination of
pictures and words
on the flow map.
Students will be
prompted to add how
they felt at each step
to the flow map. (I do,
we do, you do)

3) Write a paragraph
that tells what they
did first, second,
third, and so on to
complete the writing
task.

4) Share their original
writing project and
process piece with
the teacher in a
writing conference.
25
Flow Maps for Writing Narratives in Second Grade

Focus and Learning
Targets
Focus. Students will study
narrative structure. They
will read several fictional
narratives with as a class,
identify the structure of the
narratives, and
write/illustrate an extension
to a shared story.

Learning Targets.
I can describe the
structure of a story.

I can re-tell familiar
stories.

I can write a narrative
that includes details to
describe actions,
thoughts, and feelings.

I can use temporal words
to signal event order in
my writing.

I can use illustrations to
depict action in my
writing.


which they recount a well-
elaborated event or short
sequence of events, include
details to describe actions,
thoughts, and feelings, use
temporal words to signal
event order, and provide a
sense of closure.

writing projects.

RL.2.2 Recount stories,
including fables and
folktales from diverse
cultures, and determine
their central message,
lesson, or moral.

RL.2.5 Describe the overall
structure of a story,
including describing how the
beginning introduces the
story and the ending
concludes the action.

RL.2.7 Use information
gained from the illustrations
and words in a print or
digital text to demonstrate
understanding of its
characters, setting, or plot.

Students will
1) Read multiple
narrative picture
books with the class
and in literature
circles. (we do)

2) Identify the structure
of the stories (what
happened in the
beginning, in the
middle, and at the
end). (I do, we do,
you do)

3) Identify the main
character and
settings of the stories.
(I do, we do, you do)

4) Choose a shared story
to extend. (I do, you
do)

5) Use a flow map to
write a sequence of 3
events that happened
after the story ended.
(I do, you do)

6) Illustrate the
extended story.
Depict what
happened in each
picture.
26
!"#$%&'(%)*'(+,-%.*/'0,12*%3*2$*,40/%56*'62/7%
89,-:%;2<2*20-2%
C*$!D-;!,+.!9/+.*40!-/9+%4E$/!41!+!./$;/4&%9!1)/+)$9(!)*+)!0+%!<$!>1$#!'-/!1$?>$%04%9!$6$%)1!4%!
%+//+&6$1!-/!1)$.1!4%!+!./-0$#>/$2!C*$!1)/+)$9(!)$+0*$1!1)>#$%)1!)-!.>)!4%'-/,+&-%!4%!1$?>$%&+7!
-/#$/A!/$)$77!1)$.1!-/!$6$%)1!4%!+!%+//+&6$!-/!./-0$#>/$A!+%#!$=.+%#!>.-%!4%#464#>+7!1)$.1!-/!$6$%)1!
4%!+!%+//+&6$!-/!./-0$#>/$2!!
3*#-2=9*2!
"#$%&'(!)*$!%+,$!-'!)*$!./-0$11!-/!
1)-/(2!3/4)$!4)!+)!)*$!)-.!-'!+!.4$0$!-'!
.+.$/2!
"#$%&'(!)*$!5/1)!1)$.!4%!)*$!./-0$11!-/!
)*$!5/1)!$6$%)!4%!)*$!1)-/(2!3/4)$!4)!-%!
)*$!7$8!14#$!-'!)*$!.+9$2!:/+;!+!<-=!
+/->%#!4)2!
"#$%&'(!1><1$?>$%)!1)$.1!4%!)*$!
./-0$11!-/!$6$%)1!4%!)*$!1)-/(2!3/4)$!
$+0*!-%$!-%!)*$!.+9$2!:/+;!+!<-=!
+/->%#!$+0*!-%$2!
:$04#$!)*$!<$1)!;+(!)-!-/#$/!)*$!1)$.1!
-/!$6$%)1!@5/1)A!1$0-%#A!)*4/#B2!!
:/+;!+//-;1!)-!0-%%$0)!)*$!1)$.1!-/!
$6$%)1!4%!)*$!-/#$/!4%!;*40*!)*$(!
-00>//$#2!
>,?2*204'4#0!
@0-"9=2%569=206AB%CD(2*,20-2A%F!:/+;!
D-;!,+.1!)-!1*-;!$6$%)1!)*+)!)+G$!
.7+0$!4%!1)>#$%)1H!746$1A!1>0*!+1!
07+11/--,!/->&%$1!-/!$6$%)12!
>*'$%'0=%E'F2"%3,-69*2A!F!I77-;!
1)>#$%)1!)-!#/+;!+%#!7+<$7!.40)>/$1!4%!
)*$!D-;!,+.2!
G#"#*%G#=2!F!J1$!-%$!0-7-/!)-!->)74%$!
$+0*!1)+9$!-/!$6$%)!4%!)*$!1$?>$%0$!
+%#!+%-)*$/!0-7-/!)-!->)74%$!1><K1)+9$12!!
H2I(#*'"%J#*=A%F!I##!1.+0$!4%!)*$!
9/+.*40!-/9+%4E$/!'-/!1)>#$%)1!)-!;/4)$!
)$,.-/+7!;-/#1!@5/1)A!%$=)A!)*$%A!7+1)B2!!
%
59FK56'/2A%F!"%07>#$!1><K1)+9$1!4%!D-;!
,+.1!+1!1)>#$%)1!<$0-,$!0-,'-/)+<7$!
>14%9!)*$!1)/+)$9(2!
%
CD'I("2%L%)#,0/%6#%6+2%&#M,2A%
C$,.-/+7!;-/#1!
%
149%+7!$6$%)!-/#$/!
%
L4/1)A !
!
!!
C*$%A !
!
!!
%
%
3+4)!4%!74%$!)-!<>(!
% :/46$!)-!)*$!)*$+)$/!
&0G$)1!
%
%
%
%
N><K1)+9$1!4%!
%
O+/G!)*$!
)*$!1$?>$%0$!
%
0+/!
%
!
M+1)A !
!!
3+)0*!)*$!,-64$!
N)+9$1!-/!$6$%)1!
4%!)*$!1$?>$%0$!
27
!"#$%&'()%*+,#))%-./%0#1-/1-%*,/')%
234+5%6/7/,/1+/%
8+4/1+/!"!#$%!&'(!)*+$!,'!$-'(!./.0%$!'1!
$,%+$!23!*3!%4+%12)%3,5%
butterfly
chrysalis
egg
947/%0:+"/%#7%'%
;3</,=:%
H3,(#)/%
P0'(!)*+$!.*3!@%!;$%<!*.1'$$!,-%!.'3,%3,!
*1%*$!,'!$-'(!*!$%Q;%3.%!'8!%9%3,$!'1!$,%+$!
23!*!+1'.%$$5!D-%!$,1*,%C/!2$!9%1$*70%:!*3<!2,!
.*3!@%!23.'1+'1*,%<!23,'!*3/!+1'.%$$R@*$%<!
0%*1323C!%4+%12%3.%5!D%*.-%1$!*3<!$,;<%3,$!
)*/!;$%!&'(!)*+$!,'!.')+*1%!('1<$S!
92$;*02T%!,-%!+1'@0%)!$'0923C!+1'.%$$S!*3<!
$;))*12T%!*!+1'.%$$:!./.0%:!'1!%9%3,5!!
8#+4'"%8-3>4/)"!#$%!&'(!)*+$!,'!)*6%!
7)%023%$!'8!2)+'1,*3,!%9%3,$!23!-2$,'1/:!
$,;<%3,$=!029%$:!*3<>'1!,-%!.'));32,/5%
caterpillar
F#+'G3"',:%;34">41E!"!#$%!,-%!&'(!)*+!,'!
$-'(!.')+*12$'3$!*3<!<%C1%%$!'8!('1<$5%
L*1)!
M',!
N'2023C!
L*06!
D1',!
O+123,!
?@@C%
%
%
%
A!(*$!@'135!
?@@A%
%
%
?/!$2$,%1!
(*$!@'135!
?@B@%
%
%
A!$,*1,%<!
+1%$.-''05!!
?@BB%
?/!8*)20/!
)'9%<!
'9%1!,-%!
$;))%15!
?@BB%
%
%
A!.*)%!,'!
,-2$!$.-''05!
?@BD%
%
%
A!$,*1,%<!
B1$,!C1*<%5!
6/')#141E%"!#$%!&'(!)*+$!,'!$-'(!,-%!$,%+$!8'1!$'0923C!*!+1'@0%)5%
I am thinking of a number between 0 and 5.The number is odd. It is not 1. What number is it?
D-%!
3;)@%1!2$!
@%,(%%3!E!
*3<!F5!
G!
G!
I!
H!
D-%!
3;)@%1!2$!
'<<5!!
H!
D-%!
3;)@%1!2$!
3',!G5!
KG!
D-%!*3$(%1!
2$!H5!
H!
J!
28
!"#$%&'()"")$*+,'-#./'012-'3)4,'
56#78'9+:+"+%7+'
()"")$*+';."67.6"+!
"#$!%&!'($!)*+,-*.!/-.0!'%!'$-1(!.%2#3!1(+45*$#!'%!/*+'$!#-**-67$0!+0!'%!($4)!'($,!*$1%3#+8$!'($!
/-.!0'%*+$0!-*$!)2'!'%3$'($*9!:(+0!)*%1$00!#%'!%#4.!+#7%47$0!*$1-44+#3!5$'-+40!&*%,!'($!0'%*.;!4+<$!'($!
1(-*-1'$*0!-#5!0$=#30;!>2'!+'!-40%!+#7%47$0!)4%'!0'*21'2*$9!:$-1($*0!1-#!20$!'($!?%/!,-)!'%!5+00$1'!
'($!0'*21'2*$!%&!0'%*+$0!+#!%*5$*!'%!($4)!1(+45*$#!*$1%3#+8$!'($!/-.!#-**-67$0!-*$!)2'!'%3$'($*9!@0!
0'25$#'0!>$3+#!'%!*$1%3#+8$!'($!)4%'!0'*21'2*$0!'(-'!%'($*!-2'(%*0!$,)4%.;!'($.!-*$!%#$!0'$)!14%0$*!
'%!/*+6#3!'($+*!%/#!0'%*+$09!!
!
<=)>41+'?!"#$%&'()$*"#$+&*,")$-(.$*"#$+-/./'0#'-#./'9#,#%&'@7$2%A'B1#>)=A'0)11#%&'@7$2%'
'
'
'
'
:($!I+'1(!,2*5$*0!@04-#;!
'
/(%!%J$*$5!(+0!4+&$!+#!
'
)4-1$!%&!C5,2#59!
'
'
'
'
'
@04-#!*$'2*#0!'%!E-*#+-!
'
-#5!>*$-<0!'($!I+'1(G0!
@04-#!1%,$0!>-1<!'%!4+&$!
'
0)$449!C5,2#5!,20'!&%*&$+'!
-#5!K%+#0!'($!>-L4$!
'
-3-+#0'!'($!I(+'$!I+'1(9!
(+0!4+&$;!-11%*5+#3!'%!'($!
'
"45!H-3+19!
'
'
'
A$'$*;!B20-#;!-#5!D21.!0$'!
'
:($!I(+'$!I+'1(!+0!
%J!'%!F#5!@04-#!'%!>*$-<!
'
5$&$-'$59!@04-#!#-,$0!
'($!I+'1(G0!0)$44!-#5!&*$$!
'
A$'$*;!B20-#;!C5,2#5;!
:2,#209!C5,2#5!>$'*-.0!
'
-#5!D21.!*24$*0!%7$*!
(+0!>*%'($*!-#5!0+0'$*0!'%!
'
E-*#+-9!
'($!I(+'$!I+'1(9!
'
'
' A$'$*;!B20-#;!C5,2#5;!
' -#5!D21.!3%!'%!E-*#+-!-#5!
' F#5!'(-'!D21.G0!&*+$#5;!H*9!
' :2,#20;!(-0!>$$#!'-<$#!
' )*+0%#$*!>.!'($!I(+'$!
I+'1(9!
'
'
'
29
!"#$"%&'%()*+,,+-."/)0'12)3450)6+7/)
B$'&C)D"E","%&")
!"#$"%&'%()*+,,+-."/)0'12)3450)6+7/)+%8)9,+0:;+<"4:=+7-5%)
!"#$%&'()*"+('&(,&)'"&-.$()/"'&0/,1&'%#/"*&'(,/."'&(,&'"2)"+$"&#+*&/"("33&"4"+('&0/,1&(%"&'(,/56&7&
8,9&1#-&-/,4.*"'&(%"&'(/)$()/"&0,/&'()*"+('&(,&3"#/+&(,&-)(&"4"+('&.+&,/*"/6&!"#$%"/'&$#+&#**&
("1-,/#3&9,/*'&(,&(%"&8,9&1#-&(,&'.:+.05&9%#(&%#--"+"*&#(&(%"&;":.++.+:<&1.**3"<&#+*&"+*&,0&(%"&
'(,/56&=.1-3.>"*&4"/'.,+'&,0&8,9&1#-'&$#+&;"&)'"*&0,/&5,)+:"/&'()*"+('<&9%.3"&1,/"&*"(#.3"*&8,9&
1#-'<&3.?"&(%"&,+"&-.$()/"*&;"3,9<&$#+&;"&)'"*&0,/&,3*"/&'()*"+('6&
)
>?+@74")A)!"#$!%&'()!*#$!+&*,#)!-(.!*#$!+-/./'0$!)
@./"$A,+'B&C'"&(%"&-.$()/"'&;"3,9&(,&("33&!"#$%&'()$*"#$+&*,")$-(.$*"#$+-/./'0#&.+&5,)/&,9+&9,/*'6&
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
)
30
!"#$$%$&'(#))#*+,-'.%/0'1"2.'3#4-'
CD%EF'?,A,),$E,'
!"#$$%$&'(#))#*+,-'.%/0'1"2.'3#4-'#$5'6)#.78#9,"7:#4*2$!
"#$%&'#(!)*'!$(&!+,-!.*/(!-0#1!23*-45*6&748*/9,'!#,!/7*'!,30:0'*7!'*33*9;&(<!=1&!(#3*#&:>!)*'!
1&7/!(#$%&'#(!/7*'!/&3(,'*7!!'*33*9;&(!,3!)3&*9;&!?)9,'*7!'*33*9;&(<!@(0':!#1&!:3*/10)!,3:*'0A&3!
-077!1&7/!(#$%&'#(!0%&'9B>!.*0'!)1*3*)#&3(C!,3:*'0A&!&;&'#(C!*'%!;0($*70A&!0./,3#*'#!%&#*07(<!!
'
;<#=4",'>'?,=%'#$5'/0,'@#""'2A'B#)$!
203&)9,'(D!@(&!*!+,-!.*/!#,!/7*'!*!?)9,'*7!(#,3><!E*.&!#1&!.*0'!)1*3*)#&3!*'%!#&77!-1*#!1*//&'(!
?3(#C!'&F#C!*'%!7*(#!0'!#1&!(#,3><'
'
'
'
G*37>!,'&!.,3'0':C!
'
'
A black cat named Remi woke up. He felt playful, so he looked for his
'
'
yellow ball of yarn. He could not find it!
'
'
'
'
'
'
'
=1&'C!!
!
'
'
Remi went to see his puppy, Astro. Astro was still asleep on the
'
couch, but Remi saw the ball of yarn under Astro s paw. He tried to
'
get the yarn, but the puppy pulled the yarn closer.
'
'
'
'
'
'
H0'*77>C!
'
!
'
Remi was tired of waiting for Astro to wake up. He jumped on the
'
puppy and tugged at this ear. Astro opened one eye and pushed the
'
'
ball of yarn away. Remi pounced on it and chased it around the room.
'
'
'
'
'
31
LEARNING TO WRITE: DRAFTING
Preview
Drafting involves pouring ideas onto paper in the form of drawings, sentences, and
paragraphs.
Students can study the craft of other writers and genre conventions to learn how to
structure texts.
Young writers benefit from learning strategies for getting started on a draft.
What is drafting?
The term drafting describes the act of compiling ideas and putting them on
paper. Drafting involves pouring ideas onto paper. For emergent writers, drafting may
occur in the form of pictures and/or letters; for developing and experienced writers,
drafting may occur in the form of putting words into sentences and organizing sentences
into paragraphs. At this point in the process, writers attend to the content of their
writingcontinuing to develop ideas, organizing ideas into a logical progression, as well as
crafting sentences and selecting effective words. Free writing or journaling, translating
prewriting into sentences and paragraphs, and putting ideas in order are all part of
drafting.

Drafting may occur after prewriting, but many writers fluctuate between
prewriting, drafting, and revising as they compose texts. Drafting does not begin when
prewriting ends or when revising begins. The focus of drafting is to pour ideas onto
paper, to write what needs to be written. The approach that each writer takes during
drafting may be different, and it is also worth noting that the same writer may take
different approaches to different writing tasks. Writers may return to prewriting or jump
to revising as they draft. No matter the form that drafting takes or point in the writing
process that drafting occurs, the focus of drafting is to put ideas onto paper in some
structured way.

Ideas, organization, voice, word choice, and sentence fluency are at the
heart of drafting. Putting ideas together, organizing ideas in the best order,
experimenting with words, and developing topic sentences and conclusions are all part of
drafting. Students can learn different ways to approach a writing task by studying the craft
of other writers. When students read to uncover the craft of other writerswhen students
read as writersthey ask and answer questions about the way an author has structured a
text, why the author used different words, how the author began sentences, and so forth.
Students can then begin to understand the rhetorical, intentional choices that authors
make, and from there, students can begin to experiment with language in similar ways.
Studying the ideas, organization, voice, word choice, and sentence structure from other
writers can help young writers learn how to structure and present their message in
different ways, whether sticking to or breaking free from generic convention.
32
Why should students learn strategies for drafting?

Young writers benefit from learning multiple strategies for drafting. In the
same way that students benefit from learning different prewriting strategies, they also
benefit from learning strategies for drafting texts appropriate to purpose, task, and
audience. A personal narrative is different from a book report. Even though students may
do either of these assignments in a language arts block, the way that these types of texts are
put together and the purpose that they accomplish are entirely different. Similarly, a
procedural explanation of a science experiment is different from a descriptive observation
of a science experiment. The task, purpose, and intended audience for a text may influence
the way that writers plan and draft. For this reason, learning specific strategies for
planning and drafting different types of texts can help young writers learn genre
conventions and meet the expectations of readers. In addition, learning these drafting
strategies gives students experience manipulating the structure of sentences and
paragraphs, teaching them where information is usually located within certain kinds of
texts, which can support reading comprehension in all of the content areas.
How does drafting fit into the Common Core?

Drafting strategies can support reading literature and content area literacy.
The CCSS requires students to write opinion, explanatory/informative, and narrative texts.
Through intense study of each genre, students can begin to learn distinctive features and
structure of texts from multiple genres. Reading as a writer means reading to understand
how the author put the text together, which involves questioning the way the author
organized and presented ideas, the words that the author selected, the way that the author
crafted sentences, and (in some cases) the way an author used conventions to make an
impact (i.e., using an exclamation mark to show excitement). When students read as
writers, they learn to dissect the salient features of different types of texts and how to
integrate those features into their own writing. Drafting strategies, like the paragraph
hamburger and Transition-Action-Details, can help students get started with an idea for
writing, learn genre conventions, and experiment with genre conventions in their own
writing.

Drafting provides an opportunity for students to share and conference with
one another and with the teacher. The CCSS requires that students receive feedback
from teachers and peers to revise their writing (see Writing Standard 5) beginning in
Kindergarten. Another benefit of learning to read like a writer is that students learn how to
question each other about their writing at a deeper level. For example, a second grade class
might study the organization of a social studies article in the Weekly Reader. Students learn
to question the way that the text is put together, looking for the introduction, topic
sentence, supporting sentences, and concluding sentences or section. In the next writing
assignment, the teacher may focus on the organization writing trait and develop questions
for students to ask one another in writing conferences related to the organization trait
based on the class discussion of the Weekly Reader article. In this way, students not only
learn the features of an informative text, they also learn how to integrate those features
into their own writing and discuss those features in the context of a writing conference. If
teachers integrate talking into the writing process early (perhaps beginning by
33
encouraging students to talk to each other about their prewriting), then transitioning to
sharing drafts becomes much easier.

!"##$%&'()&*+&,(-(.-()/&0&1-(234.&5*-(*%.6&
7"389&:%;%-%48%&
!"##$%&'())*+,&*-&(&.%/-(0$%&)/%1/*0+,&-2/(2%,3&24(2&5(+&-"))6/2&)%/-"(-*.%7&%8)6-*26/37&(+9&
*+:6/'(06+($&1/*0+,&(5/6--&24%&56+2%+2&(/%(-;&<4*-&-2/(2%,3&4%$)-&-2"9%+2-&:65"-&6+&(&26)*57&,%+%/(2%&
*9%(-&/%$(2%9&26&24%&26)*57&(+9&9%.%$6)&-"))6/0+,&9%2(*$-;&=-*+,&24%&#"##$%&'()&-2/(2%,3&($$61-&
-2"9%+2-&26&%8)$6/%&56++%506+-&#%21%%+&/%$(2%9&*9%(-&(+9&*9%+0:3&-)%5*>5&9%2(*$-&*+&24%&56+2%82&6:&(&
$(/,%/&26)*5;&?2"9%+2-&5(+&"-%&24%&#"##$%&'())*+,&-2/(2%,3&26&)$(+&)(/(,/()4-;&
,-+8%<"-%&
@; A/%(2%&(&#"##$%&'()&,/()4*5&6/,(+*B%/;&
C; D%.%$6)&(&,%+%/($&26)*5&-%+2%+5%&"-*+,&24%&
E<6)*5F&(+9&EG9%(F&#"##$%-;&=-%&24%&
E<(+2($*B*+,&<6)*5&?%+2%+5%-F&H"*5I&
/%:%/%+5%&26&>+9&9*J%/%+2&1(3-&26&1/*2%&
26)*5&-%+2%+5%-;&
K; L/*2%&-"))6/0+,&-2(2%'%+2-&"-*+,&24%&
EG9%(F&(+9&56++%52%9&ED%2(*$-F&#"##$%-;&
13=%-%4>(>+4&(4<&?@*%4A3+4&
,(-(.-()/&B(C#"-.%-&Q&=-%&24%&)(/(,/()4&
4('#"/,%/&6/,(+*B%/&26&1/*2%&24%&>/-2&9/(R&
6:&(&)(/(,/()4&:/6'&(&#"##$%&'();&
&
D+$$(#+-(>E%&F-3>4.&Q&L/*2%&26)*5&
-%+2%+5%-7&56+5$"-*6+-7&(+9S6/&)(/(,/()4-&
:/6'&#"##$%&'()-&*+&'69%$%97&,"*9%97&
*+2%/(50.%7&(+9&-4(/%9&1/*0+,&6))6/2"+*0%-&
#%:6/%&)/(505*+,&*+9%)%+9%+2&1/*0+,;&
D+$+-&D+<%&Q&L/*2%&T6/&"+9%/$*+%U&24%&26)*5&
-%+2%+5%&(+9&56+5$"-*6+&1*24&6+%&56$6/V&
1/*2%&T6/&"+9%/$*+%U&24%&-"))6/0+,&T9%2(*$U&
-%+2%+5%-&1*24&(+624%/&56$6/;&
M; N%16/I&24%&26)*5&-%+2%+5%&*+26&(&
56+5$"-*6+&"-*+,&+%1&16/9-;&=-%&24%&
EA()0.(0+,&A6+5$"-*6+-F&H"*5I&/%:%/%+5%&
26&>+9&9*J%/%+2&1(3-&26&1/*2%&56+5$"-*6+-;&
GAA%AAC%4*&Q&=-%&24%&-*8&2/(*2-&6:&1/*0+,&
(+($305&/"#/*5&26&2(/,%2&-)%5*>5&1/*0+,&
2/(*2-;&EW/,(+*B(06+F&(+9&EG9%(-F&'(3&16/I&
#%-2&:6/&36"+,&1/*2%/-;&
O; N%)%(2&24%&)/65%9"/%&:6/&%(54&EG9%(F&
#"##$%&6+&24%&#"##$%&'();&P(54&*9%(&1*24&
/%$(2%9&9%2(*$-&5(+&#%56'%&(&)(/(,/()4;&
?@(C)$%&!"##$%&'()&(4<&,(-(.-()/H&G483%4*&D3E3$3I(>+4A&
G483%4*&D3E3$3I(>+4A&
J+)38&
[+5*%+2&A*.*$*B(06+-&
N"$%9&#3&
)4(/(64-&
&
&
P,3)2&
&
&
&
*+2%/%-0+,&(+5*%+2&5*.*$*B(06+;&
Y4(/(64-&/"$%9&P,3)2;&<4%3&1%/%&I*+,-7&
K<%(&
#"2&24%&)%6)$%&($-6&#%$*%.%9&24(2&
)4(/(64-&1%/%&,69-7&266;&<4%&
!"*$2&24%&
)3/('*9-&
&
&
1%*(3$A&
X(+3&24*+,-&'(I%&P,3)2&(+&
)4(/(64-&#"*$2&)3/('*9-&14%/%&24%3&
56"$9&#%&#"/*%9;&P,3)2&*-&(+&*+2%/%-0+,&
(+5*%+2&5*.*$*B(06+&26&-2"93;&L4*54&
(+5*%+2&5*.*$*B(06+&96&36"&$*I%&26&$%(/+&
(#6"2Z&
34
Strategy Explanation: Paragraph Hamburger Drafting
What is the paragraph hamburger? The paragraph hamburger is a graphic organizer

that shows students the different parts of a paragraph. Each part of the hamburger stands
for a part of the paragraph. The top bun and the bottom bun represent the topic sentence
and conclusion, respectively, which illustrates how the topic sentence and conclusion hold
the paragraph together. The hamburger filling (the meat, cheese, and vegetables)
represents the supporting details, while the condiments (ketchup, mustard, and
mayonnaise) represent word choice.

Why should teachers use the paragraph hamburger? The paragraph hamburger
provides students with the basic structure and visual representation of the parts of
paragraphs. This is a versatile strategy that can be used for many different types of writing,
and it is an easy way to differentiate instruction for diverse students.

How can the paragraph hamburger be used in the classroom? This strategy lends to
many different kinds of writing, making it versatile. Teachers can adapt the organizer to
prompt students to sequence events, to make comparisons, or to provide multiple details in
a descriptive paragraph. Because the organizer divides the topic sentence, supporting
sentences, and conclusion, students can easily see which parts of their original paragraphs
are missing or incomplete.
The Paragraph Hamburger and the Six Traits of Writing

Ideas. The paragraph hamburger graphic organizer provides students with an easy way to
transition their ideas from prewriting into a draft. Using the organizer allows students to
see which ideas need to be developed further.

Organization. The paragraph hamburger teaches students the basic structure of a
paragraph. The strategy provides a skeletonor a frameworkfor a focused, cohesive
paragraph.

Voice. When students begin drafting paragraphs, they begin to think about how they want
their writing to begin and end. The paragraph hamburger gives students space to
experiment with different kinds of topic sentences and conclusions before they write a final
draft. The strategy also encourages students to arrange their supporting statements in the
most effective way.
Connecting the Paragraph Hamburger and the CCSS

Persuasive (Opinion) Writing. The paragraph hamburger drafting strategy can be used to
develop opinions and reasons to support opinions. When teachers use the strategy to teach
persuasion (or opinion) writing, the following CCSS may apply:

35
Kindergarten
W.K.1 Use a combination of drawing, dictating, and writing to compose opinion
pieces in which they tell a reader the topic or name of the book they are writing
about and state an opinion or preference about the topic or book.
First Grade
W.1.1 Write opinion pieces in which they introduce the topic or name the book they
are writing about, state an opinion, supply a reason for the opinion, and provide
some sense of closure.
Second Grade
W.2.1 Write opinion pieces in which they introduce the topic or book they are
writing about, state an opinion, supply reasons that support the opinion, use linking
words to connect opinion and reasons, and provide a concluding statement or
section.

Explanatory and Informational Writing. The paragraph hamburger drafting strategy can
support students as they learn to write explanatory, informational, and descriptive
paragraphs. When teachers use the strategy to teach explanatory or informational writing,
the following CCSS may apply:
Kindergarten
W.K.2 Use a combination of drawing, dictating, and writing to compose
informative/explanatory texts in which they name what they are writing about and
supply some information about the topic.
First Grade
W.1.2 Write informative/explanatory texts in which they name a topic, supply some
facts about the topic, and provide some sense of closure.
Second Grade
W.2.2 Write informative/explanatory texts in which they introduce a topic, use facts
and definitions to develop points, and provide a concluding statement or section.
Sample Scope and Sequence for the Paragraph Hamburger

Paragraph Hamburger in First Grade
Focus and Learning
Targets
Focus. Students will read
RL.1.3 Describe characters, Students will
different versions of
settings, and major events in
1) Read The Korean
Cinderella and watch
a story, use key details.
Cinderella in class.
Disneys Cinderella in class.

Students will write an
RL.1.9 Compare and
2) Watch Disneys
opinion paragraph that
contrast the adventures and
Cinderella in class.
describes which Cinderella experiences of characters in

story is their favorite.
stories.
3) Compare the 2

versions of
Learning Targets.
RF.1.4a Read grade-level
Cinderella with a
double-bubble
I can use key details to text with purpose and

36

Focus and Learning
Targets
describe characters,
understanding.
thinking map in their
settings, and major

reading tablet.
events in stories.
W.1.1 Write opinion pieces

in which they introduce the
4) Choose their favorite
topic or name the book they
version of
I can compare and
are writing about, state an
Cinderella that the
contrast characters
opinion, supply a reason for
class discussed.
and events from two
the opinion, and provide

stories.
5) Create a bubble map

that shows which
I can write a
L.1.1g
U
se
f
requently
version of
paragraph that
Cinderella they
describes my opinion occurring conjunctions
(lesson
f
ocus:
a
nd,
b
ecause)
preferred, supplies 1
about a character or

reason (idea) for
book.
their preference, and
complete simple and
3 details to support
I can connect my
compound
d
eclarative,
the reason.
thoughts with the

conjunctions and and interrogative, imperative,
and exclamatory sentences
The class will
because.
in response to prompts
1) Generate several
topic sentences
I can write simple and
L.1.6
U
se
w
ords
a
nd
p
hrases
through collaborative
compound sentences.
acquired through
writing activities.
conversations, reading and

being read to, and
2) Use the paragraph
hamburger to model
including using frequently
how to turn the
bubble map into a
signal simple relationships.
paragraph.

Students will
1) Record their topic
sentence, supporting
sentences, and
conclusion onto the
paragraph
hamburger organizer.

2) Use the paragraph
hamburger (or
Organization)
37

Focus and Learning
Targets
checklist to self-
assess and revise
their work.

3) Rewrite their final
draft onto folder
paper and illustrate
their work.
38
!"#"$#"%&'(")*+#$,#'-'.'/#"012$'34#"4,$5'
6+178'9,:,#,27,'
!"#$%&'&('&%"$"&)*+'(#'$,-$&$.'&/,0($-1'&1#(2$1"&1$"#3%-$-1+.#01-$4'(&0,5#$1"#,'$,.#&-$,014$&$
%&'&('&%"6$7&8"$%&'1$49$1"#$"&)*+'(#'$'#%'#-#01-$&$%&'1$49$1"#$%&'&('&%"6$!",-$-1'&1#(2$(,:#-$&$:,-+&3$
'#%'#-#01&;40$49$"4<$1"#$,094')&;40$,0$&$%&'&('&%"$,-$'#3&1#.6$$
!#;7,<+#,'
=6 >01'4.+8#$1"#$)&,0$%&'1-$49$&$
%&'&('&%"$,0$'#3&;40$14$1"#$
%&'&('&%"$"&)*+'(#'$4'(&0,5#'?$
!4%,8$-#01#08#$@$!4%$*+0$
A#1&,3$-#01#08#-$@$B,33,0($
C4083+-,40$@$D4E4)$*+0$
F6 G',1#$&$14%,8$-#01#08#$1"&1$,0.,8&1#-$
<"&1$1"#$%&'&('&%"$<,33$*#$&*4+16$
H6 G',1#$.#1&,3$-#01#08#-$1"&1$(,:#$
)4'#$,094')&;40$&*4+1$1"#$14%,86$
I6 G',1#$<',1#$&$84083+.,0($-#01#08#$
1"&1$-+))&',5#-$1"#$%&'&('&%"6$
!"#"$#"%&'(")*+#$,#'C#$"21D,#'
'
'
' =;%17'3,24,27,'
'
'
'
'
' /,4"1@>'
' T+%%4';0($
' -#01#08#-$U$
' ,01#'#-;0($<4'.-''
'
'
' E;27@+>1;2'
'
=,"7&12$'!"#4>';:'!"#"$#"%&>'
?+1@<'"'!"#"$#"%&'(")*+#$,#$@$
J334<$-1+.#01-$14$.'&<K$8434'K$&0.$
3&*#3$1"#$%&'1-$49$%&'&('&%"-$40$1"#,'$
4<0$%&'&('&%"$"&)*+'(#'$
4'(&0,5#'-6$L&-1#$#&8"$%&'&('&%"$
"&)*+'(#'$,014$-1+.#01-M$<',;0($
1&*3#1-$4'$%4-1$4014$*+33#;0$*4&'.6$
!"#"$#"%&'(")*+#$,#'3&;A7">,'@$
C'#&1#$&$3&'(#$%&'&('&%"$"&)*+'(#'$
4'(&0,5#'$14$.,-%3&2$40$&$*+33#;0$
*4&'.$&0.$3&*#3$1"#$%&'1-$49$1"#$
4'(&0,5#'$<,1"$-1+.#01-6$L4-1$
#N&)%3#-$49$%&'&('&%"-$1"&1$-"4<$
1"#$14%,8$-#01#08#K$.#1&,3-K$&0.$
84083+-,406$
!"#"$#"%&'34"#4,#>$@$O#0#'&1#$&$
14%,8$-#01#08#$<,1"$-1+.#01-$&0.$&-P$
1"#)$14$<',1#$,1$,0$1"#,'$1&*3#1$4'$40$
1"#$%&'&('&%"$4'(&0,5#'6$J334<$
-1+.#01-$14$84)%3#1#$1"#$%&'&('&%"$
*2$&..,0($1"#,'$4<0$.#1&,3-$&0.$
84083+-,406$
?"78A"#<>'!"#"$#"%&>$@$Q48&1#$&$
<#33R<',E#0$%&'&('&%"6$J-P$-1+.#01-$
14$,.#0;92$1"#$14%,8$-#01#08#K$.#1&,3-K$
&0.$84083+-,406$S#84'.$'#-%40-#-$40$
1"#$%&'&('&%"$"&)*+'(#'$4'(&0,5#'6'
!"#"$#"%&'B+)*@,$@$Q48&1#$&$<#33R
<',E#0$%&'&('&%"6$C+1$1"#$%&'&('&%"$
,014$%,#8#-$&0.$&334<$-1+.#01-$14$%+1$
1"#$%&'&('&%"$*&8P$14(#1"#'6$
39
!""#$%&'()*+$*,$"-&*.(/+(/&()*
01-&2*3(4(#(/&(*
!"#$%&'()*()%('&+,(&-'-+../&*0(&1,'*&+)2&*0(&3"'*&4()(,+.&'()*()%('&$)&#+,+4,+#0'5&!0(&*"#$%&'()*()%(&
'0"-.2&4,+6&*0(&,(+2(,'7&+8()9")&+)2&$)*,"2-%(&*0(&$2(+'&*0+*&:$..&%"3(&.+*(,&$)&*0(&#+,+4,+#05&
;$<(,()*&*"#$%&'()*()%('&:",=&:(..&>",&2$<(,()*&:,$9)4&4(),('?&:0$.(&'"3(&*/#('&">&*"#$%&'()*()%('&
:",=&>",&3+)/&=$)2'&">&:,$9)4&*+'='5&&&
>*?%#+)*$4*,$"-&*.(/+(/&()*
,$"-&*
R0+*&$'&*0(&'-6W(%*&">&*0(&
#+,+4,+#0X&!0$'&:$..&6(&*0(&!"#$%*&
R,$*(&*0(&*"#$%&">&*0(&#+,+4,+#0&$)&
*0(&*"#$%&'()*()%(5&
R0+*&:$..&*0(&#+,+4,+#0&'+/&+6"-*&
*0(&'-6W(%*X&!0$'&:$..&6(&*0(&3+$)&
8%-/*9:(%*
$2(+5&Y)%.-2(&*0(&3+$)&$2(+&$)&*0(&
*"#$%&'()*()%(5&
5$&%6/7*8%-/*9:(%)*%/:*,$"-&*.(/+(/&()*@&
!(+%0&'*-2()*'&*"&."%+*(&*0(&3+$)&$2(+'&">&
#+,+4,+#0'&$)&3()*",&*(A*'5&B"))(%*&3+$)&$2(+'&
:$*0&'*-2()*'7&'*-2/&">&*"#$%&'()*()%('5&
&
C5 D(+2&*(A*'&>,"3&*0(&'+3(&4(),(&*0+*&*0(&
'*-2()*'&:$..&:,$*(5&E",&(A+3#.(?&$>&
'*-2()*'&:$..&:,$*(&+)&(A#"'$*",/&
#+,+4,+#0&",&(''+/?&*0()&*0(/&'0"-.2&,(+2&
(A+3#.('&">&(A#"'$*",/&:,$9)4&$)&%.+''5&
F5 G"%+*(&*0(&3+$)&$2(+&$)&(+%0&">&*0(&3()*",&
*(A*'5&H"9%(&I:$*0&'*-2()*'J&:0(,(&*0(&
3+$)&$2(+&$'&."%+*(2&+)2&:0+*&$*&2"('5&
!0(&3+$)&$2(+&$'&'*+*(2&$)&*0(&1,'*&
",&'(%")2&'()*()%(&$)&+&#+,+4,+#05&
!0(&3+$)&$2(+&*(..'&:0+*&*0(&:0".(&
#+,+4,+#0&:$..&6(&+6"-*5&
K5 !-,)&*0(&3+$)&$2(+&$)*"&+&L-('9")&*0+*&*0(&
#+,+4,+#0&+)':(,'5&
M5 NA#.+$)&*0+*&+&!"#$%&'()!()%(&+)':(,'&*0(&
3+$)&$2(+&L-('9")&:$*0"-*&4$O$)4&+:+/&
+)/&2(*+$.'5&&
P5 B,(+*(&+&%0+,*&:$*0&(A+3#.(&*"#$%&
'()*()%('5&B$,%.(&=(/&:",2'&+)2&$2()9>/&
*0(&>(+*-,('&">&(+%0&*"#$%&'()*()%(5&Q22&
3",(&(A+3#.('&*0,"-40"-*&*0(&/(+,5&
8%-/*9:(%*01()6$/*%/:*,$"-&*.(/+(/&()&@&
R,$*(&*0(&3+$)&$2(+&">&+&#+,+4,+#0&+'&+&
L-('9")?&+)2&*0()&:,$*(&+&*"#$%&'()*()%(&*0+*&
+)':(,'&*0+*&L-('9")&:$*0"-*&4$O$)4&+:+/&*0(&
2(*+$.'5&&
&
C5 R,$*(&+&3+$)&$2(+&L-('9")&>",&*0(&*"#$%5&
F5 S,+$)'*",3&$2(+'&,(.+*(2&*"&*0(&*"#$%&+)2&
,(%",2&*0(3&")&+&#,(:,$9)4&4,+#0$%&
",4+)$T(,5&
K5 Q)':(,&*0(&3+$)&$2(+&L-('9")&:$*0"-*&
3()9")$)4&*0(&2(*+$.'5&&
U()(,+*(&*"#$%&'()*()%('&:$*0&
'*-2()*'&+'&+&%.+''&",&$)&#+$,'&
6(>",(&:,$9)4&*"#$%&'()*()%('&
$)2(#()2()*./5&
D(>(,&*"&3()*",&*(A*'&*"&4(*&$2(+'&
>",&*0(&>",3+*&+)2&'*,-%*-,(&*0+*&+&
*"#$%&'()*()%(&3$40*&*+=(5&
M5 V"'*&+&>(:&(A+3#.('&">&*"#$%&'()*()%('&>",&
*0(&'+3(&3+$)&$2(+&L-('9")&")&*0(&6"+,25&&
P5 D(O$(:&*0(&%0(%=.$'*&>",&*"#$%&'()*()%('&
+)2&,+*(&(+%0&*"#$%&'()*()%(&+4+$)'*&*0(&
%0(%=.$'*5&E$)2&*0(&6('*&(A+3#.(&+)2&
2$'%-''&:0+*&3+=('&$*&+&L-+.$*/&*"#$%&
'()*()%(5&&
.%;"<(*,$"-&*.(/+(/&(*='(&2<-)+*
! !0(&*"#$%&'()*()%(&*(..'&*0(&3+$)&$2(+&">&
*0(&#+,+4,+#05&&
! !0(&*"#$%&'()*()%(&+)':(,'&*0(&3+$)&$2(+&
L-('9")5&
! !0(&*"#$%&'()*()%(&$'&4()(,+.5&!0(,(&+,(&
)"*&3+)/&2(*+$.'&$)&*0(&'()*()%(5&
! !0(&*"#$%&'()*()%(&0+'&+)&+%9O(&O(,65&
40
!"#$%&'(")%"$'%*+,#-%.($/($-()%
."0,1(%2())+$%3+4%567%
2())+$%*#/1(%%!"#$%&'($)*+,-(.*/#$0#$.#1*
84"'(%2(9(1**2%
=>?(-<9()*
8(1%$)7(19*:#0;##$*<*6<($*("#<*<$"*
17--,=%$)*"#0<(>1?*
@+00+$%@+4(%./"/(%./"$'"4')*
@?2?B*@=(0#*($&,=6<%A#C#D-><$<0,='*0#D01*($*
;9(.9*09#'*$<6#*<*0,-(.E*17-->'*1,6#*&<.01*
<:,70*09#*0,-(.E*<$"*-=,A("#*1,6#*1#$1#*,&*
.>,17=#?*
@?2?F*G<=%.(-<0#*($*19<=#"*=#1#<=.9*<$"*
;=(%$)*-=,H#.01*
I!?2?B*!"#$%&'*09#*6<($*("#<*<$"*=#0#>>*J#'*
"#0<(>1*,&*<*0#D0?*
K?2?2H*G=,"7.#*<$"*#D-<$"*.,6->#0#*1(6->#*
<$"*.,6-,7$"*"#.><=<%A#E*($0#==,)<%A#E*
(6-#=<%A#E*<$"*#D.><6<0,='*1#$0#$.#1*($*
=#1-,$1#*0,*-=,6-01?%
!"#$%&'*09#*&#<07=#1*,&*0,-(.*1#$0#$.#1?*
@=(0#*<*0,-(.*1#$0#$.#*&,=*<$*($&,=6<%A#*
-<=<)=<-9?%
2("4$#$A%*"4A(/)*
!*.<$*L$"*09#*6<($*("#<*,&*<*-<=<)=<-9?*
!*.<$*0#>>*09#*"(M#=#$.#*:#0;##$*<*6<($*("#<*
1#$0#$.#*<$"*17--,=%$)*"#0<(>*1#$0#$.#1?*
!*.<$*;=(0#*<*0,-(.*1#$0#$.#*&,=*<$*($&,=6<%A#*
-<=<)=<-9*;(09*<*-<=0$#=?*
!"/(4#"1)%
NG<==,01O*-<=<)=<-9*P<Q<.9#"R*
G=,H#.0,=*,=*"='*#=<1#*:,<="**
:;4"<+$%*345*6($70#1%
S9<=0*-<-#=*
T<=J#=1*
!(/B+'*
2? 8(10=(:70#*.,-(#1*,&*NG<==,01O*-<=<)=<-9*0,*#<.9*107"#$0?*I#<"*09#*-<=<)=<-9*;(09*09#*.><11?*
B? U1JV*N@9<0*(1*09(1*-<=<)=<-9*0#>>($)*71*<:,70WO*U>>,;*107"#$01*0,*=#1-,$"?%/07"#$01*19,7>"*<$1;#=*
09<0*09#*-<=<)=<-9*(1*<:,70*-<==,01*,=*;9<0*-<==,01*#<0?*
X? U1JV*NY,;*",*',7*J$,;*09<0*09(1*-<=<)=<-9*(1*<:,70*-<==,01WO*U>>,;*107"#$01*0,*=#1-,$"?*+9#'*
19,7>"*<$1;#=*09<0*09#*0,-(.*,&*09#*-<=<)=<-9*(1*$<6#"*($*09#*L=10*1#$0#$.#?*
Z? [D-><($*09#*0#=6*!"#$%#&'"?**
3? I#-9=<1#*09#*\7#1%,$*<$"*<1JV*N@9<0*(1*09#*6<($*("#<*,&*09(1*-<=<)=<-9WO*/07"#$01*19,7>"*<$1;#=*
09<0*09#*6<($*("#<*&,=*09(1*-<=<)=<-9*(1*;9<0*-<==,01*#<0?*
]? U1JV*N@9(.9*1#$0#$.#*0#>>1*',7*09#*6<($*("#<WO*^=E*N@9(.9*1#$0#$.#*0#>>1*',7*09<0*09#*-<=<)=<-9*(1*
<:,70*;9<0*-<==,01*#<0WO*/07"#$01*19,7>"*<$1;#=*09<0*09#*L=10*1#$0#$.#*.,$0<($1*09#*6<($*("#<?*
F? @=(0#*09#*0,-(.*1#$0#$.#*,$*.9<=0*-<-#=?*
_? 8(1.711*09#*"#0<(>1*09<0*09#*<709,=*($.>7"#1*($*09#*-<=<)=<-9?*U1JV*N@9<0*",#1*09#*-<=<)=<-9*1<'*
<:,70*09#*09($)1*09<0*-<==,01*#<0WO*/07"#$01*19,7>"*<$1;#=*09<0*-<==,01*#<0*$701E*:#==(#1E*&=7(01E*#0.?*
I#.,="*09#*"#0<(>1*7$"#=$#<09*09#*0,-(.*1#$0#$.#*($*<*"(M#=#$0*.,>,=*6<=J#=?*
`? 8(1.711*09#*&#<07=#1*,&*09#*1#$0#$.#?*a,%.#*;(09*107"#$01*09<0*09#*1#$0#$.#*0#>>1*09<0*09#*
-<=<)=<-9*;(>>*:#*<:,70*;9<0*-<==,01*#<0*;(09,70*)(A($)*<;<'*09#*"#0<(>1?*G(.J*,70*<$"*.(=.>#*09#*J#'*
;,="1*($*09#*0,-(.*1#$0#$.#*;(09*107"#$01?*
24?G,10*09#*.9<=0*($*09#*.><11=,,6*&,=*><0#=*=#&#=#$.#?*
C+11+D6;,%
a#D0*>#11,$*b*I#A(#;*!"#$%#&'"*<$"*()*#+%,'$('$+'?*!$10=7.0*107"#$01*0,*;,=J*($*-<(=1*0,*>,.<0#*09#*
6<($*("#<*<$"*0,-(.*1#$0#$.#*($*<$,09#=*6#$0,=*0#D0?*8(1.711*09#*0,-(.*1#$0#$.#1*107"#$01*L$"?*
c707=#*>#11,$*b*I#;=(0#*<*0,-(.*1#$0#$.#*($*<*"(M#=#$0*;<'?*
41
!"#$%&'(&!)*+),-.-*/&!'#-0&1$*+$*0$%&
23-04&5$($6$*0$&
78$*9'*&:6);;$6!"!#$%!&!$'()*+!,%(-!')!+(&-!
'.%!(%&/%(0$!&1%*2)*3!4*!&1%*2)*!+(&--5*+!
')657!$%*'%*7%!85'.!&!$'()*+!,%(-!8)(9$!85'.!
&*:!':6%!);!8(52*+3!
<3 =579!&!,%(-!&*/!8(5'%!5'!5*!'.%!7%*'%(!
7)>?@*!);!'.%!+(&6.57!)(+&*5A%(3!4*!&72)*!
,%(-!8)(9$!-%$'B!-?'!&!>5*95*+!,%(-!85>>!
8)(9!'))3!
C3 D5>>E5*!'.%!F($'!7)>?@*!);!'.%!)(+&*5A%(!
85'.!G8.)H!)(!G8.&'3H!
I3 D5>>E5*!'.%!>&$'!7)>?@*!);!'.%!)(+&*5A%(!85'.!
&!7)*'()>>5*+!5/%&3!
!
! <='&>&<=)+&
!
!
J%*(:!
!
! K:!'%&7.%(!
!
! L?@@%(!
!
709'*&?$6;&
@A$)&
-)?+.'!
&!*%8!-59%3!
-&9%/!
;(%$.!7))95%$3!
5$!
'.%!-%$'!
$%&$)*3!
<=$*&'6&<=$6$&K&<=)+L%&M)##$*-*/!"!D)7?$!)*!
G8.%*H!)(!G8.%(%BH!&*/!'.%*!%N6>&5*!G8.&'0$!
.&66%*5*+3H!,)&!-.$/&00+'1'2!7)?>/!@%&*!
8.&'!7)?>/!.&66%*B!8.&'!/5/!.&66%*B!8.&'!@&:!
.&66%*B!)(!8.&'!$.)?>/!.&66%*3!O.5$!':6%!);!
')657!$%*'%*7%!-%!?$%/!85'.!&*:!':6%!);!8(52*+B!
-?'!@&:!-%!@)$'!%U%72,%!;)(!*&((&2,%3!
<3 V(5'%!G8.%*H!)(!G8.%(%H!5*!'.%!F($'!
7)>?@*3!
23$%9'*%&)*A&HI0,)F)9'*%!"!Y%8(5'%!&!
/%7>&(&2,%!')657!$%*'%*7%!&$!&!Z?%$2)*!)(!
%N7>&@&2)*3!
#$%!&!$'(&'%+:!'.&'!$'?/%*'$!;)?*/!5*!&!
@%*')(!'%N'!)(!>%&(*%/!5*!7>&$$3!
#$%!'.%!@&5*!5/%&!Z?%$2)*!&*/!&*$8%(!&$!
'.%!')657!$%*'%*7%3!
R)@-5*%!'.%!$'(&'%+5%$!')!@&9%!')657!
$%*'%*7%$!@)(%!5*'%(%$2*+3!
!
N)-*&@A$)&23$%9'*Q!V.&'!5$!'.%!;&$'%$'!&*5@&>[!
&
HI)F#,$&!'#-0&1$*+$*0$%&
\5/!:)?!9*)8!'.&'!7.%%'&.$!(?*!;&$'%(!
'.&*!&*:!)'.%(!&*5@&>[!
R.%%'&.$!&(%!'.%!;&$'%$'!&*5@&>$!5*!'.%!
8)(>/]!
R.%%'&.$!(?*!;&$'%(!'.&*!&*:!)'.%(!&*5@&>3!
J-%+&'(&@A$)%&"!K&9%!&!>5$'!);!'.%!7&'%+)(5%$!'.&'!
85>>!-%!&//(%$$%/!5*!'.%!6&(&+(&6.3!O.5$!':6%!);!
')657!$%*'%*7%!8)(9$!8%>>!8.%*!8(52*+!
5*;)(@&2,%B!%N6>&*&')(:B!&*/!)65*5)*!65%7%$3!
!
HI)F#,$%!
P%)*5!.&$!&>>!);!'.%!'(&5'$!);!&!$'&(!$'?/%*'Q!
.&(/!8)(95*+B!;(5%*/>:B!&*/!.)*%$'3!
M()*@&*B!O.)(B!&*/!R&6'&5*!4@%(57&!&(%!
'.%!-(&,%$'!4,%*+%($3!
S?(!7&'!%*T):$!%&2*+B!'&95*+!*&6$B!&*/!
8&'7.5*+!-5(/$3!
C3 V(5'%!G8.&'0$!.&66%*5*+H!5*!'.%!$%7)*/!
7)>?@*3!!
!
<=$*&>&<=$6$&
!
!
W&$'!@)*'.B!
!
!
!
M*!J&8&505B!!
!
!
4'!'.%!X(%&'!L')*%!
&
O&->%B!
<=)+L%&M)##$*-*/&
M!8%*'!')!$%%!@:!
+(&*/@&3!
+(%%*!%*%(+:!6)8%($!
@&*:!.)@%$3!
'.%!V.5'%!V5'7.!
95>>%/!4$>&*3!
B'C$6&DE3F;$6G&1+)+$F$*+%!"!M*7>?/%!*?@-%(!
8)(/$!5*!')657!$%*'%*7%$!$5+*&>$!'.%!(%&$)*!;)(!
8(52*+!&*/!$?++%$'$!'.&'!&!>5$'!);!5*;)(@&2)*!
85>>!;)>>)83!=)8%(!$'&'%@%*'$!8)(9!8%>>!8.%*!
8(52*+!5*;)(@&2,%B!%N6>&*&')(:B!&*/!)65*5)*!
65%7%$3!
!
HI)F#,$%!
M!8&'7.%/!!"#$@),5%$!'.5$!8%%93!
L.&(9$!.&,%!%&'(!'%%'.!5*!'.%5(!@)?'.3!
J&((:!$.)8%/!7)?(&+%!5*!!)*++!8&:$3!
42
!"#$%"$&'(!)&*+,-.)&-(
/,.*0(123242&*2(
!"#$%&'("#')$"*+),-)-.+)+#/)"0),)1(+$+)"0)23(4#56)!"#$%&'("#')*,7+),)1(+$+)"0)23(4#5)0++%)8#('.+/6)
9""/)$"#$%&'("#')23,1)&1)-.+)*,(#)1"(#-')(#)-.+)23(4#5:)%+,;+)3+,/+3')2(-.)'"*+-.(#5)-")-.(#7),<"&-:)
,#/)/+'$3(<+)."2)-.+)23(-+3)0++%'),<"&-)-.+)-"1($6))
5(6"47-()3("(!)&*+,-.)&(
=.+)$"#$%&'("#)'."&%/)3+'-,-+)-.+)*"'-)(*1"3-,#-)1,3-)"0)-.+)1,3,53,1.6)
>6 ?(#/)-.+)-"1($)'+#-+#$+)"0)-.+)1,3,53,1.6)
@6 A+2"37)-.+)-"1($)'+#-+#$+)&'(#5)/(B+3+#-)2"3/'6)
C6 D3(-+)-.+)'&**,3E)'-,-+*+#-),-)-.+)+#/)"0)-.+)1,3,53,1.6)
(
8".&(9:2"(
;7<2(=>,??"4@AB(
E.&"+(F<),'<7(
;7<2(=G.&'24AB(
CD"?#+2(
(
(
(
(
(
(
(
(
F)#.*(>2&72&*2(
G($.,+%)H"3/,#)2,'),)53+,-)<,'7+-<,%%)1%,E+36)
A+2"37)-.+)'+#-+#$+)&'(#5)#+2)2"3/'6)
>,??"4@(
G($.,+%)H"3/,#)2,')-.+)<+'-)<,'7+-<,%%)1%,E+3)
+;+36)
=.(#7)"0)"#+)%,'-)'+#-+#$+)-.,-)5(;+')-.+)3+,/+3)'"*+-.(#5)-")-.(#7),<"&-)"3)/"6)
D3(-+)-.+)8#,%)-."&5.-),F+3)-.+)'&**,3E6)
H(I.&:-()3(G.&'24-(
/,2-$)&)I)J//),)K&+'4"#),-)
-.+)+#/)"0)-.+)1,3,53,1.6)
)
(
CD"?#+2(
F)#.*(>2&72&*2L(=.+)A,;+#'),#/)
-.+)MN+3')1%,E+/)(#)-.+)O&1+3)
P"2%)-.(')E+,36)
)
>,??"4@L)Q#)-.+)+#/:)-.+)
A,;+#')2"#)-.+)O&1+3)P"2%6)
)
/,2-$)&L)!,#)-.+E)2(#),5,(#)
#+R-)E+,3S)
)
E.&.-<2:)!)&*+,-.)&L)Q#)-.+)+#/:)
-.+)A,;+#')2"#)-.+)O&1+3)P"2%6)
!,#)-.+E)2(#),5,(#)#+R-)E+,3S)
)
!"++(7)(J*$)&)I)J//),)'+#-+#$+)
-.,-)-+%%')-.+)3+,/+3)2.,-)-.+E)
'."&%/)/"6)
)
CD"?#+2(
F)#.*(>2&72&*2L)GE)0,*(%E).,'),)
03&(-)'-,#/),-)-.+)%"$,%)0,3*+3T')
*,37+-6)
)
>,??"4@L)P&E(#5)%"$,%)0""/)
'&11"3-')0,*(%(+')%(7+)*(#+6)
)
!"++(7)(J*$)&L)U('(-)&'),-)-.+)
0,3*+3T')*,37+-)-.(')2++7+#/V)
)
E.&.-<2:)!)&*+,-.)&L)P&E(#5)
%"$,%)0""/)'&11"3-')0,*(%(+')%(7+)
*(#+6)U('(-)&'),-)-.+)0,3*+3T')
*,37+-)-.(')2++7+#/V(
K.'(E22+.&')I)J//),)'+#-+#$+)
-.,-)'."2')-.+)3+,/+3),)<(5)
0++%(#56)
)
CD"?#+2)
F)#.*(>2&72&*2L)=.(')'&**+3:)
/,#$+/)(#)*E)83'-)$"*1+44"#6)
)
>,??"4@L)D.+#)Q)2"#)-.+)
$"*1+44"#:)Q)0+%-)%(7+),)
13(#$+''6)
)
K.'(E22+.&'L)Q)0+%-)%(7+)-.+)<+'-)
/,#$+3)+;+36)
)
E.&.-<2:(!)&*+,-.)&L)D.+#)Q)
2"#)-.+)$"*1+44"#:)Q)0+%-)%(7+),)
13(#$+''6)Q)0+%-)%(7+)-.+)<+'-)
/,#$+3)+;+36(
43
Strategy Explanation: Transition-Action-Details (TAD)
What is Transition-Action-Details (TAD)? Transition-Action-Details, or TAD, is a drafting

strategy that helps writers sequence events. This graphic organizer provides students
space to describe what happened, supply a reaction or details about what happened, and
use temporal words to signal event order. TAD can be used as a during or after reading
activity to help students summarize the main points in a text, or it can be used to help
students draft original texts, such as procedures, explanations, or narratives.

Why should teachers use the TAD drafting strategy? Opportunities to write event
sequences come up all the time in school. Students talk about what they did over the
weekend, they describe how they solved a problem, or they retell a story that they read.
The TAD organizer provides a structure for putting sequences together and can be
combined with prewriting strategies to make the transition from prewriting to drafting
easier.

How can the TAD strategy be used in the classroom? Because students have multiple
opportunities to write sequences in school, the strategy can be used across the content
areas. Teachers may use TAD to summarize shared stories in history, social studies, or
reading; however, teachers may also use TAD to prompt students to write procedures in
science or step-by-step (how-to) explanations for solving problems. As students become
comfortable using the strategy, they can use it to write original fiction and non-fiction
narratives.
Transition-Action-Details and the Six Traits of Writing

Ideas. TAD encourages students to develop multiple details related to one event in a
sequence, making the content of their writing more interesting and engaging. In addition,
the strategy helps students see the connections between events.

Organization. Aside from drawing out more details and descriptions (which may lead
students to write longer, more developed texts), TAD helps students learn how to structure
a sequence of events and use transitions consistently.

Voice. Young writers may choose to tell a story by relating what happened first, second,
and so forth. As students grow as writers, they may begin to play with the way they
organize a text. Students develop their writers voice by showing their awareness of the
power of their words to impact their readers. With the TAD strategy, students demonstrate
audience awareness by arranging events in new, surprising ways and developing strong
details. Learning to organize events in different ways (i.e., flashbacks, dream sequences)
comes through reading texts that play with organizational techniques and integrating these
techniques into ones own writing. TAD gives students a structured space to do just that.

44
Word Choice. Students show that they are developing their word choice when they
experiment with words gathered from conversations or other authors to craft their
sentences. The TAD organizer can support students as they learn to use precise and
accurate words, because the organizer provides a space for students to develop details,
transitions, and actions.
Connecting Transition-Action-Details and the CCSS

Narrative Writing. Transition-Action-Details helps students sequence events for writing
procedures, explanations, or narratives. When teachers use the TAD drafting strategy to
teach students how to read and write narratives, the following CCSS may apply:
Kindergarten
or several loosely linked events, tell about the events in the order in which they
occurred, and provide a reaction to what happened.
in stories.
RI.K.3 With prompting and support, describe the connection between two
individuals, events, ideas, or pieces of information in a text.
First Grade
W.1.3 Write narratives in which they recount two or more appropriately sequenced
events, include some details regarding what happened, use temporal words to signal
event order, and provide some sense of closure.
W.1.7 Participate in shared research and writing projects (e.g., explore a number of
how-to books on a given topic and use them to write a sequence of instructions).
RI.1.3 Describe the connection between two individuals, events, ideas, or pieces of
information in a text.
Second Grade
W.2.7 Participate in shared research and writing projects (e.g., read books on a
single topic to produce a report; record science observations).
W.2.8 Recall information from experiences or gather information from sources to
answer a question.
RL.2.3 Describe how characters in a story respond to major events and challenges.
45
RI.2.3 Describe the connection between a series of historical events, scientific ideas,
or steps in technical procedures in a text.
RI.2.6 Identify the main purpose of a text, including what the author wants to
answer, explain or describe.
Sample Scope and Sequence for Transition-Action-Details
Transition-Action-Details in First Grade

Focus and Learning
Targets
Focus. The class will
spend several weeks
observing caterpillars
transform into butterflies.
Students will observe the
caterpillars every day and
record the changes that
they observe, and then
write a summary of the
lifecycle of caterpillars
based on their
observations.

Learning Targets.
I can use temporal
words to write the
stages in the
lifecycle of a
butterfly in order.

I can use notes
from observations
to write the
lifecycle of a
butterfly.

I can use adjectives
to describe my
reaction to the
lifecycle of a
butterfly.


which they recount two or
more appropriately
sequenced events, include
some details regarding
what happened, use
temporal words to signal
event order, and provide

W.1.7 Participate in
shared research and
writing projects.

information from
information from
provided sources to
answer a question.

L.1.1e Use verbs to
convey a sense of past,
present, and future.

L.1.1f Use frequently
occurring adjectives.

L.1.6 Use words and
phrases acquired through
conversations, reading
and being read to, and
including frequently
The class will

1) Collect caterpillars in the
terrarium. Students may
bring caterpillars from
home, but the class will
also hunt for caterpillars
on the playground.
2) Observe the caterpillars
during science lab (daily).
3) Record the changes
observed in the science
log. Students will take
notes in their science
tablets as well.

After the class observes a few
caterpillars transform into
butterflies, students will
4) Use a flow map to draw
and identify the lifecycle
of butterflies.
5) Translate the flow map
into the TAD organizer as
a class.
Students will write
what happened
and provide a
reaction.
The teacher will
supply temporal
words and briefly
discuss with the
class.
6) Use the class TAD to
write a shared narrative
46
Transition-Action-Details in First Grade

Focus and Learning
Targets

signal simple
relationships.
paragraph.
47
!"#$%&'($)*+'($),-.#&/%01!*,203."#.-450
67&+809-:-"-$+-0
!"#$%&'($)*+'($),-.#&/%01("1!*,01&%1#12"#3&$41%."#.-451.6#.16-/7%1%.82-$.%1("4#$&9-1#1%-:8-$+-1(;1
-<-$.%1&$.(1#17#"#4"#76=1!6-1%."#.-4517"(<&2-%1#$1&$.-"$#/1%."8+.8"-1;("1$#""#'<-%1("17"(+-28"-%=1>$1
#22&'($01.6&%12"#3&$41%."#.-451?#51@-1+(?@&$-21A&.61(.6-"1%."#.-4&-%1.(16-/715(8$41A"&.-"%1("4#$&9-1
.6-&"1&2-#%1#$212-<-/(712-.#&/%=1!6-1("4#$&9-"1#/%(18%-;8/1;("16-/7&$41%.82-$.%1.(1"-?-?@-"1.(1#221
."#$%&'($%1#$212-.#&/%1.(1.6-&"1A"&'$4=1
;"(+-<7"-1
B= >$."(28+-1#1%-:8-$+-1(;1-<-$.%1&$1"-/#'($1
.(1.6-1!"#$%&'($)*+'($),-.#&/%1C!*,D1
("4#$&9-"E=1
F= G"&.-1A6#.16#77-$-21H"%.1&$1.6-1H"%.1@(I1
(;1.6-1J*+'($K1+(/8?$=1*221#1;-A1$(.-%1
#@(8.1A6#.16#77-$-21H"%.1&$1.6-1J,-.#&/%K1
+(/8?$=1L($'$8-1H//&$41&$1.6-1J*+'($K1#$21
J,-.#&/%K1+(/8?$%=1
M= N(1@#+O1.(1.6-1H"%.1@(I1(;1.6-1."#$%&'($1
+(/8?$1#$21A"&.-1#1%&?7/-1."#$%&'($1.(1
&$."(28+-1.6-1H"%.1#+'($=1L($'$8-1#22&$41
."#$%&'($%1;("1-#+61#+'($=1
,&=-"-$'#'($0#$<0>?.-$%&($1
@"&.-0&$0.A-0B($.-$.0*"-#%1T1U%-1!*,1.(1
A"&.-17"(+-28"-%01-I7/#$#'($%01#$21
%-:8-$+-%1&$1%+&-$+-01?#.6016&%.("5V%(+&#/1
%.82&-%01#$21/&.-"#.8"-=1
C(<-/0.A-03."#.-451T1U%-1!*,1.(1
%8??#"&9-1?#W("1-<-$.%1&$1%6#"-21%.("&-%1
@-;("-1.-#+6&$41%.82-$.%1.(18%-1&.1.(1A"&.-1
.6-&"1(A$1$#""#'<-%=0
,-D-/(E0,-.#&/%0#$<0,-%+"&E'($%1T1
L6#//-$4-1(/2-"1%.82-$.%1("17"(H+&-$.1
A"&.-"%1.(1A"&.-1%-$.-$+-%1;("1-#+612-.#&/1
&$+/82-21&$1.6-1("4#$&9-"=1X<-"51/-<-/1(;1.6-1
!*,1("4#$&9-"1+#$1@-+(?-1#17#"#4"#761
A6-$1%.82-$.%12-<-/(712-.#&/%1#$21
2-%+"&7'($%1&$.(1/($4-"1%-$.-$+-%=1
*<<0F$."(<7+'($%0#$<0B($+/7%&($%0T1
L6#//-$4-1%.82-$.%1.(1"-<&%-1.6-&"1&$&'#/1
2"#31;"(?1!*,1A&.61.(7&+1%-$.-$+-%01
6((O%01#$21+($+/8%&($%=0
P= Q-#21.6-1+(?7/-.-21!*,1("4#$&9-"1#%1#1
+(?7/-.-212"#3=1R#O-1%8"-1.6-1&2-#%1#$21
2-.#&/%1#"-17"-%-$.-21&$1.6-1@-%.1("2-"=1
S= !"#$%;-"1.6-1&$;("?#'($1;"(?1.6-11!*,1
("4#$&9-"1&$.(1#1H$#/12"#3=1
*%%-%%G-$.0
3&?0!"#&.%0(:0@"&'$40*$#/5'+097H"&+1T1!6-1
JZ"4#$&9#'($K17("'($1(;1.6-1%&I1."#&.%1
"8@"&+1?#51@-18%-;8/1;("1.-#+6&$41#$21
#%%-%%&$41.6-1!*,12"#3&$41%."#.-45=1
!"#$%&'($)*+'($),-.#&/%097H"&+1T1,-<-/(71
#1+6-+O/&%.1;("1%.82-$.%1.(1%-/;)#%%-%%1#$21
"-<&%-12"#3%17"(28+-21A&.61!*,=0
3#GE/-0!"#$%&'($)*+'($),-.#&/%0BA-+8/&%.0
>1A"(.-1M1("1?("-1#+'($%=1
*//1(;1?51#+'($%1#"-1($1.(7&+=1
>1A"(.-1F1("1?("-12-.#&/%1;("1-#+61#+'($=1
*//1(;1.6-12-.#&/%1#"-1($1.(7&+=1
>1A"(.-1#1."#$%&'($1;("1-#+61#+'($=1
9-D&%-0@("<0BA(&+-1T1X$+(8"#4-1%.82-$.%1
.(1H$21($-1("1.A(1J("2&$#"5K1("1
J(<-"8%-2K1A("2%1#$21"-7/#+-1.6-?1A&.61
J%7#"O/-K1A("2%=1
B(GH&$-0,"#I&$40#$<0@"&'$40T1*//(A1
5(8$41A"&.-"%1("1"-/8+.#$.1A"&.-"%1.(1
&$+("7("#.-12"#A&$4%1&$.(1.6-1!*,1
("4#$&9-"=1
B(/("0B(<-1T1G"&.-1C("1(8./&$-D1/-<-/1B1
."#$%&'($01#+'($01#$212-.#&/%1A&.61($-1
+(/("Y11/-<-/1F1."#$%&'($01#+'($01#$212-.#&/%1
A&.61#$(.6-"1+(/("01#$21%(1($01.(14"(871
"-/#.-21."#$%&'($01#+'($01#$212-.#&/%1
.(4-.6-"=1
48
!"#$%&'($)*+'($),-.#&/%01!*,203."#.-450
67&+809-:-"-$+-0
;<#=>/-0!"#$%&'($)*+'($),-.#&/%!"!#$%&'(!)*%+!,-!.-'&!/'01,02-130
0
!"#$%&'($0
*+'($0
0
451,*-(67&!890,!:0++&1&(;!
4.&<7*%=&!890,!:0++&1&(;!
0
0
0 This week,
0
0
0
0
0 When we got there,
0
0
0
0
0 Next,
0
0
0
0 Last,
0
0
0
0
0 On the way home,
0
0
,-.#&/%0
4>1<?&*!>6(%&17&!@6&<2-1<;!
My class went on a field

trip to the Dole Plantation.
Ive never been before.

The plantation is in
Wahiawa.
I rode the Pineapple

Express train with my
friends.
The train took us

through the pineapple
plantation.
A mans voice told about
pineapples in Hawaii.
My teacher took us into the

garden.
We saw a lot of plants

and flowers.
The pink hibiscus was my
favorite.
I tasted pineapple ice

cream at the snack bar.
The ice cream tasted

just like a pineapple!
I got fresh pineapple on
top of my ice cream.
I fell asleep on the bus.
I wore the t-shirt I

bought at the gift shop.
I dreamed about going
back to Dole Plantation.
;<#=>/-0?#"#4"#>@0"!#$%&'(!)*%+!,-!.-'&!/'01,02-13!
!
!!!!!This week, my class went on a field trip to Dole Plantation. The plantation is in Wahiawa
close to North Shore. Id never been to Dole Plantation before. When we got there, I
rode the Pineapple Express train with my friends. The train took us through the pineapple
planation, and a mans voice told about pineapples in Hawaii. Next, my teacher took us into
the garden. We saw a lot of plants and flowers. The pink Hibiscus was my favorite. Last, I
tasted pineapple ice cream topped with fresh pineapple at the snack bar. The ice cream
tasted just like a pineapple! On the way home, I fell asleep on the bus. I wore the t-shirt
I bought at the gift shop and dreamed about going back to Dole Plantation.
49
!"#$%&'($)*+'($),-.#&/%01!*,203."#.-450
3#67/-089:"&+%0
!"#$%&'($)*+'($),-.#&/03#67/-089:"&+0
;--.%0
!"#$%&'($%0
*+'($%0
*77"(#+<-%!
=-/(>!
"!#$!%#$&!'()#*+!
345!'()#*+!'$&!,*-$#./(&.! 6!'()#*+!'$&!,*-$#./(&.!
,*-$#./(&.!0,-1!-$'*+,)#*!
0,-1!-$'*+,)#*!0#$.+2!
0,-1!-$'*+,)#*!0#$.+2!
0#$.+2!
"!#$!%#$&!'()#*+!'$&!
.&+($,7&.2!
345!'()#*+!'$&!.&+($,7&.2!
6!'()#*+!'$&!.&+($,7&.2!
"!#$!%#$&!'()#*+!'$&!#*!
-#8,(2!
345!'()#*+!'$&!#*!-#8,(2!
6!'()#*+!'$&!#*!-#8,(2!
"!#$!%#$&!'()#*+!'$&!
'$$'*9&.!,*!-1&!7&+-!
#$.&$2!
345!'()#*+!'$&!'$$'*9&.!
,*!-1&!7&+-!#$.&$2!!:;#%&!
'()#*+!%'<!7&!%,++,*9!#$!
#/-!#=!8>'(&2?!
6!'()#*+!'$&!'$$'*9&.!,*!
-1&!7&+-!#$.&$2!:@()#*+!
%'<!7&!%,++,*9!#$!#/-!#=!
8>'(&2?!
5!#$!%#$&!.&-',>+!&A8>',*!
&'(1!'()#*2!
3!.&-',>!&A8>',*+!&'(1!
'()#*2!
6!.&-',>+!&A8>',*!&'(1!
'()#*2!
5!#$!%#$&!.&-',>+!'$&!#*!
-#8,(!=#$!&'(1!'()#*2!
3!.&-',>!,+!#*!-#8,(!=#$!
&'(1!'()#*2!
6!.&-',>+!'$&!#*!-#8,(!=#$!
&'(1!'()#*2!
,-.#&/%0
?0!"#&.%0(@0A"&'$4B0C"4#$&D#'($03#67/-089:"&+0
;--.%!
*77"(#+<-%0
=-/(>!
B&9,**,*9!,*-$#./(&+!-#8,(2!
B&9,**,*9!'C&%8-+!-#!
,*-$#./(&!-#8,(2!
D#!*#)(&'7>&!7&9,**,*92!
E*.,*9!8$#F,.&+!'!(#*(>/.,*9!
+&*-&*(&!:#$!+&()#*?2!
E*.,*9!8$#F,.&+!'!+&*+&!#=!
(>#+/$&2!
E*.,*9!8$#F,.&+!*#!(>#+/$&2!
@>>!8'$-+!'$&!'$$'*9&.!,*!-1&!
7&+-!#$.&$2!
G'$-+!'$&!*#-!'$$'*9&.!,*!-1&!
7&+-!#$.&$2!!
G'$-+!'$&!%,++,*9!#$!1'$.!-#!
=#>>#02!
H#*+,+-&*-I!F'$,&.!-$'*+,)#*+2!
H#*+,+-&*-I!8$&.,(-'7>&!
-$'*+,)#*+2!
J*(#*+,+-&*-!#$!%,++,*9!
-$'*+,)#*+2!
50
LEARNING TO WRITE: REVISION
Preview
Revision involves making changes to improve the content and clarity of a piece of
writing.
Young writers need strategies for identifying and making revisions to a piece of
writing, but they also need to know why those changes are important.
The CCSS requires students improve their writing through revision as early as
Kindergarten.
What is revision?
Revision involves making changes to the content of a piece of writing. The
term revision describes the actions that writers take that lead to changes in content and
organization. Writers revise in order to improve the content of a piece of writing, to make
the message clearer, or to make the message more specific or descriptive. When writers
revise, they do more than correct grammar, punctuation, and usage; rather, they ask and
answer complex questions about their writing: Is the message clear? Does the message
achieve its purpose? Will the message meet audience expectations? The answers to these
questions help writers identify the kinds of changes that they should make. Revision may
involve replacing ordinary words with sparkle words, adding specific details, or putting
ideas in the best order.

Revision is the act of looking at a piece of writing in a different way, from a
fresh perspective. Revision gives writers the chance to step back from their work and see
what is missing or out of place. Writers may revise independently or collaboratively at any
time during the writing process. No matter the changes that writers make or when revision
occurs in the writing process, revision always involves making changes to the content and
organization of a piece of writing to make it sound better.
Why teach students to revise?

Revision helps students develop quality writing products. Author Robert
Cormier once wrote, The beautiful part of writing is that you dont have to get it right the
first time, unlike, say, a brain surgeon. No writer conveys his or her message perfectly the
first time (or even second time) around; writers often receive feedback and rewrite a draft
a few times before they get it the way they want it. In school, the focus on getting it right
the first time can give students the impression that revision is a punishment, and students
grow up believing that revising means fixing their writing because it is wrong. Revising
involves much more than fixing mistakes. Teachers implementing process-based writing
know that all writing can be made better, and one of the primary ways to improve writing
is through revision.

Teaching students to revise reinforces higher cognitive functions. When
students revise, they must analyze and evaluate their message, and then determine ways to
51
make the message clearer. More than fixing mistakes, revising is a complex process that
requires writers to examine their writing from different perspectives and make changes to
the content of their writing. When writers revise, they look at the way their ideas are
organized and developed, consider their audience, and review sentence structures and
word choice.

Students need support for revising their work. De La Paz, Swanson, and Graham
(2008) found that struggling writers could make revisions at the sentence level and at the
overall organizational level when given procedural support in the form of prompts to
consider the text as a whole before evaluating sentences. Procedural support involves
helping writers learn to identify and make changes to improve the quality of a piece of
writing. Teachers can model revision through modeled, shared, and interactive writing
experiences before asking students to revise on their own. In addition, teachers can
provide explicit prompts to guide students through the revision process using the language
of the six writing traits. Ruth Culham (2005) provides a helpful list of questions to guide
students toward reflective revisions based on the first five of the six writing traits. Using
these (or similar) questions can lead students to become reflective writers and critical
readers of their own work.

Ideas
Word Choice
Does my writing make sense?
Do these words sound and feel right?
Do I know my topic?
Have I tried new words?
Is my writing interesting?
Have I painted a picture?

Organization
Sentence Fluency
Do I start off strong?
Can I read my writing aloud?
Is everything in the right order?
Do my words and phrases go
Are similar things together?

together?
Have I tried to use sentences?

Voice
Can you hear me in the writing?
Can you tell I care about this idea?
Have I added some sparkle?

List of six traits revision prompts is reprinted from: Culham, Ruth. 6+1 Traits of Writing: The
Complete Guide for the Primary Grades.

Revision leads to reflection. Students not only need to know strategies for how to
revise their writing, but they also need to know why they are making those changes. Even
young students can reflect about their writing when prompted; therefore, comments and
questions about writing should guide students toward understanding why they make
certain changes in a piece. Essentially, this means that young writers should be able to
identify the changes that they make and describe why those changes were made. If
students understand the how and why behind the revisions that they make, then they are
much more likely to develop the habits of mind necessary to integrate those thought
processes into future writing projects.
52
How does revision fit into the Common Core?

Revision is a clear and important imperative in the CCSS. The Anchor
Standards for Writing include an entire standard dedicated to process-based writing, which
includes planning, drafting, revising, editing, and rewriting. The process approach begins in
Kindergarten and grows in complexity through the grade levels. Beginning in Kindergarten,
the CCSS requires students to revise by add details to strengthen their writing as the result
of peer-to-peer or student-to-teacher conferences. The CCSS stipulates that students need
to focus on a topic and strengthen writing as needed by revising and editing beginning in
second grade; the standard grows in complexity in third grade and beyond. Teaching
students to revise in the primary grades supports them to revise more effectively as they
move into the upper grades. Not only is revision an important, necessary part of the writing
process, revision is also implicit in the Common Core.

Revision provides an impetus for conferencing and sharing. The CCSS requires
that students receive feedback from teachers and peers to revise their writing (see Writing
Standard 5) beginning in Kindergarten. Teachers can teach students to conference, share,
and revise using prewriting strategies scaffold instruction so that students learn to revise
throughout the writing process. As students become more proficient writers and readers,
they can transition into sharing drafts of sentences and paragraphs with one another and
use revision strategies to make changes to their writing based on teacher and peer
feedback.
Best Practices for Teaching Revision

Create a revision-ready classroom. To create a revision-ready classroom,
teachers should do several things. First, teach students to skip a line when they write drafts
on folder paper. Students need space to make changes to their drafts. Skipping a line
provides a little extra room for them to revise (and later edit) their drafts. Second, use
colorful pens or colored pencils to mark revisions. Marking revisions with a different color
pen or colored pencil helps teachers and peer reviewers easily locate the changes that
students make to their writing during revision. An added bonus: Many students enjoy using
colorful pens and colored pencils! Third, create and post a revision chart (perhaps with the
ARMS revision prompts and examples) in the classroom. This visual reminder will help
students understand the complex actions that writers take when they revise. Finally,
teachers can create revision checklists and model how to use the checklist to revise. When
students know the criteria and understand how to use the criteria to revise, they learn to
become reflective readers and writers. The checklists can also become a guide for
structuring writing conferences between students and teachers.

Introduce revision at the sentence level as a springboard to whole-text
revision. Starting small with sentence-level revision gets students into the habit of revising
in a manageable way and (potentially) will get them to revise earlier in the school year. In
addition to revising sentence, students can also learn to talk to each other about and revise
drawings and prewriting in preparation for learning to revise text. For example, a first
grade teacher might begin the year by teaching students to revise drawings with the Draw-
53
Label-Caption strategy, and then teach students how to revise their one-sentence captions.
When students receive structured support in this way early in the school year, they are set-
up for revising paragraphs and short essays later in the year.

Prompt students to make specific revisions. Revision is a learned skill, and
although it may come more naturally to some students, all students need procedural
support for learning how to revise their writing. The revisions that students make hinge on
the feedback and instruction that they receive. For this reason, providing targeted feedback
based on common classroom language (like the six traits of writing) and giving specific
direction for how to make those changes is vital for students to learn how to revise
successfully. Modeling the revision process with think-alouds, shared and interactive
writing activities, and guided practice provides the procedural support that students need
in order to learn how to revise.
54
!"#"$"%"&#'()*)+,&%-./-'01&&
23)45&#'6'.',4'&
!"#$%$&'($%()*"(+,"()-(,./"(01$+&'(%-2&3(4"5"16(7*"&(01$)"1%(1"#$%"8()*"9(.33(3"%:1$;+#"(0-13%(.&3(
;*1.%"%8(1";<.:"(-13$&.19(0-13%(0$)*(%;.1/<"(0-13%8(.&3(;2)($3".%($&()*"(4"%)(-13"16(=*"(.:1-&9,(
>6!6?6@6(:.&(*"<;(%)23"&)%(1",",4"1()*"(.:+#$+"%($&#-<#"3($&(1"#$%$&'6(
!"#"$"%"&#'()*)+,&
!77&
7*.)("<%"(3-"%()*"(1".3"1(
&""3()-(/&-0A(
!77&8+.7*&/,7&7'-/)9*&-+&:/5'&8.);,0&:+.'&7'*4.)<;('"(
B(=1.$)%C(D3".%8(0-13(:*-$:"8(#-$:"(
#':+('&
>1"()*"1"(.&9("E)1.(3").$<%(
-1(4$)%(-F($&F-1,.+-&A(
#':+('&8+.7*&+.&*',-',4'*&-=/-&7+,>-&*3<<+.-&-='&:/),&)7'/"(
B(=1.$)%C(D3".%8(0-13(:*-$:"8(#-$:"8(%"&)"&:"(G2"&:9(
$+('&
D%()*"(01$+&'(;2)()-'")*"1(
$&()*"(4"%)(0.9A(
$+('&*3<<+.;,0&*',-',4'*&/,7&7'-/)9*&),-+&-='&?'*-&+.7'."(
B(=1.$)%C(H1'.&$I.+-&(
%3?*;-3-'&
7*$:*(0-13%(:.&(4"(
1";<.:"3(49(:<".1"1(-1(
%)1-&'"1(0-13%A(
%3?*;-3-'&+.7),/.1@&+('.3*'7&8+.7*&8)-=&4+9+.639@&*</.59'&8+.7*"(
B(=1.$)%C(7-13(:*-$:"8(#-$:"8(%"&)"&:"(G2"&:9(
!"#"$"%"&#'()*)+,&FG/:<9'(J((7"(0"&)()-()*"(
4".:*6(D)Q%(,9(F.#-1$)"(;<.:"6&
!77(J(7"(0"&)()-()*"(4".:*(-&(@.)213.9(
,-1&$&'6(D)Q%(,9(F.#-1$)"(;<.:"6(
#':+('(J(7"(0"&)()-()*"(4".:*(-&(
@.)213.9(,-1&$&'6(D)Q%(,9(F.#-1$)"(;<.:"6(
$+('(J(H&(@.)213.9(,-1&$&'8(0"(0"&)()-(
)*"(4".:*6(
%3?*;-3-'(J(H&(@.)213.9(,-1&$&'8(0"(
;.:/"3(.(;$:&$:(.&3(*".3"3()-()*"(4".:*6&
#'()*)+,A#'/71&B9/**.++:&
%5)<&/&C),'(J(D&%)12:)(%)23"&)%()-(%/$;(.(<$&"(
0*"&()*"9(01$)"()*"$1(31.K%6(L-$&'()*$%(0$<<(
'$#"(%)23"&)%(;<"&)9(-F(%;.:"(F-1(1"#$%$&'6(
B+9+.&B+7'(J(M%"(:-<-1F2<(;"&%(-1(:-<-1"3(
;"&:$<%()-(,.1/(1"#$%$-&%(%)23"&)%(,./"6&
!,4=+.&B=/.-*&J(N1".)"(.&3(;-%)(.&(.&:*-1(
:*.1)(0$)*(>!?@(1"#$%$-&(;1-,;)%(.&3(
"E.,;<"%(-&($)6((
#'()*)+,&B='459)*-*(J(N1".)"(.&3(;-%)(
1"#$%$-&(:*":/<$%)%(F-1(%)23"&)%()-(1"F"1"&:"(
0*"&()*"9(1"#$%"6(
D.+:<-&%<'4)E4&#'()*)+,*(J(O1-,;)(
%)23"&)%()-(,./"((%;":$P:(1"#$%$-&%8(-&"(.)(
.(+,"6((
55
!"#$%&'$(')*+),%-"$%.)/+,+0*%&)0')01),%
2#+13%.)-)$)01)%
&)0')01)%&1$(456+0*%
&'#7)0',%$)(,,)456)%,)0')01)%
4"7)6,8%
&)0')01)%9"45+0+0*%
&'#7)0',%1"45+0)%,:"$')$%
,)0')01),%+0'"%6"0*)$%,)0')01),8%
!"##$%&'#(%)&$%*+%*,%$&-.#'&
$"/.%(&$+#.0%$&#.&$+1(%*+&2.03*45&
&
!1+&$%*+%*,%$&/6/.+&/*(&6)/,%&+"%&
60%,%$&#*&+"%&7#/.(&#.&6.#8%,+#.5&
&
9))#2&$+1(%*+$&+#&61+&+"%&$%*+%*,%&
7/,:&+#4%+"%.5&&
!"##$%&'#(%)&$%*+%*,%$&-.#'&$"/.%(&
$+#.0%$&#.&$+1(%*+&2.03*45&!#'70*%&
$"#.+&$%*+%*,%$&#.&7.%/:&)#*4%.&
$%*+%*,%$&0*+#&$"#.+%.&$%*+%*,%$5&
&
<./,3,%&,#'70*0*4&$"#.+%.&$%*+%*,%$&
+#&'/:%&)#*4%.=&'#.%&$#6"0$3,/+%(&
$%*+%*,%$5&&
>##:&-#.&,#''#*&2#.($&+"/+&,/*&
7%&+/:%*&#1+&#.&.%/../*4%(5&&
;%,#.(&+"%&$%*+%*,%$&$+1(%*+$&
,.%/+%&#*&+"%&7#/.(&#.&6.#8%,+#.5&
;%,#.(&+"%&$%*+%*,%$&$+1(%*+$&
,.%/+%&#*&+"%&7#/.(&#.&6.#8%,+#.5&&
&
!#'6/.%&+"%&#.040*/)&$%*+%*,%$&20+"&
+"%&$%*+%*,%$&$+1(%*+$&6.#(1,%5&
&)0')01)%?@A(07+0*%
&'#7)0',%(77%7)'(+6,%'"%)@A(07%
,)0')01)%4"7)6,8%
!"##$%&'#(%)&$%*+%*,%$&-.#'&$"/.%(&
$+#.0%$&#.&$+1(%*+&2.03*45&<#$+&+"%&
$%*+%*,%$&#*&+"%&7#/.(&#.&6.#8%,+#.5&&
&
B%)%,+&/&2#.(&+"/+&,#1)(&7%&'#(0F%(&
20+"&/&(%$,.063G%&2#.(&#.&6"./$%5&&
!0.,)%&#.&1*(%.)0*%&0+5&
&
H./0*$+#.'&/&)0$+&#-&(%$,.063G%&
2#.($&#.&6"./$%$&20+"&+"%&,)/$$5&
!#'70*%&$%G%./)&2#.($&#.&
6"./$%$&+#&%I6/*(&+"%&$%*+%*,%5&
&
;%,#.(&+"%&$%*+%*,%$&$+1(%*+$&,.%/+%&
#*&+"%&7#/.(&#.&6.#8%,+#.5&
&)0')01)%;4+'(<0*%
&'#7)0',%=$+')%"$+*+0(6%,)0')01),%
5>%+4+'(<0*%4"7)6%,)0')01),8%
!"##$%&'#(%)&$%*+%*,%$&-.#'&
$"/.%(&$+#.0%$&#.&$+1(%*+&2.03*45&
&
B+1(C&+"%&$+.1,+1.%&#-&+"%&$%*+%*,%&
20+"&$+1(%*+$5&D%,0(%&2"%.%&%/,"&
6/.+&#-&$6%%,"&0$&)#,/+%(5&
&
E.0+%&#.040*/)&$%*+%*,%$&1$0*4&+"%&
$+.1,+1.%&#-&+"%&$%*+%*,%&'#(%)5&
;%,#.(&+"%&$%*+%*,%$&$+1(%*+$&
,.%/+%&#*&+"%&7#/.(&#.&6.#8%,+#.5&
?#'6:0*$=&@/0)&A5&!"#$%&'()*+&,'(-).#/#'$&'()0+1$"22)#'3)0+134$56)75%)"3&
56
!"#$%$&'()*+"(,&*-.(
/0$12(!"3"-"'1"(
!"#$%&'(#($)#*(#&$(+&,-%&'(.,-(/,()"0%1"(%1(#(2"#)&"$(1+%223(#&$(4#&5(64"13(5,7&'(-)%/")1(4#5(&,/(
.#0"(/."(8)%68#2()"#$%&'(#&$(-)%6&'(1+%221(/,()"0%1"(/."%)(,-&(-,)+(-%/.,7/(9),496&':(;&(#$$%6,&3(
5,7&'(-)%/")1(4#5(0%"-()"0%1%,&(#1(1,4"/.%&'(&"'#60"<=>?%&'=(-.#/@1(A-),&'=(-%/.(/."%)(-,)+:(B5(
/7)&%&'()"0%1%,&(%&/,(#('#4"3(/"#8.")1(8#&(/#)'"/(/."(1+%221(/.#/(/."5(-#&/(1/7$"&/1(/,(#8C7%)"3(
$"4,&1/)#/"(.,-(',,$(-)%6&'(8#&(D"8,4"(D"E")3(#&$($"0"2,9(1/7$"&/1@(8)%68#2()"#$%&'(1+%221:((
4-&1".0-"(
F: G)"9#)"(/."('#4"H(
;$"&6I5(9),49/1(I,)(/."()"0%1%,&('#4"(
D,#)$:(J#+"(/."('#4"(D,#)$(%&/,(#(
2#)'"(9,1/")(,)(4#+"(#($%'%/#2(8,95:(
K,8#/"(#(-)%6&'(1#492"(/,(71"(I,)(/."(
#860%/5:((
L#/.")(/."('#4"(D,#)$3(/,+"&M1N3($%"3(
#&$(8,9%"1(,I(/."(-)%6&'(1#492":((
O: P%18711(!"#$%$&'(-%/.(1/7$"&/1:(Q?92#%&(-.#/(
)"0%1%,&(%13(-.5(-)%/")1()"0%1"3(#&$(.,-(
-)%/")1()"0%1":(
R: G2#5(/."()"0%1%,&(D,#)$('#4"(-%/.(1/7$"&/1H(
G2#8"(/,+"&M1N(#/(/."(AS/#)/=(2%&":(
T#+"(/7)&1(),22%&'(/."($%"(#&$(4,0%&'(
/."(/,+"&:(
S.,-(1/7$"&/1(.,-(/,(I,22,-(/."(
)"0%1%,&(9),49/1(#&$(4#+"()"0%1%,&1(
/,'"/.")3(%&('),7913(,)(%&$"9"&$"&/25:(
U,&6&7"(),22%&'(/."($%"(#&$(4#+%&'(
)"0%1%,&1(7&62(/."(/,+"&()"#8."1(/."(
AV%&%1.=(2%&":(
W: U,49#)"(/."()"0%1"$(/"?/(-%/.(/."(,)%'%&#2(
/"?/:(P%18711(-.%8.(0")1%,&(1,7&$1(D"E")(
#&$(-.5:(
5$6"-"'7*7&'(
80%9&+$:"(9;"()*+"(,&*-.(X(;$"&6I5(
9),49/1(I,)(/."()"0%1%,&('#4"(D,#)$(D#1"$(
,&(#(19"8%>8(-)%6&'(/)#%/3(#(8,4D%&#6,&(,I(
/)#%/13(,)(#(D"&8.4#)+:(
(
<"'9"'1"(=&-2(X(;&/),$78"(/."()"0%1%,&(
9),8"11(D5(-,)+%&'(-%/.(,&"(,)(/-,(1%492"(
1"&/"&8"13(#&$(/."&(')#$7#225(4,0"(/,-#)$(
9#)#')#9.1(M#1(#99),9)%#/"N:(
(
=-$7'>()-&0?%(X(Y22,-(1/7$"&/1(/,(92#5(
/."()"0%1%,&(D,#)$('#4"(%&(9#%)1(,)(14#22(
'),791(-."&(/."5(D"8,4"(8,4I,)/#D2"(
-%/.(/."(1/)#/"'5:(
8@*%%(!"#$%$&'(X(G2#5(/."()"0%1%,&(D,#)$(
'#4"(#1(#(82#113(D7/(#22,-(1/7$"&/1(/,(
I,22,-(/."(9),49/1(/,()"0%1"(/."%)(,-&(
-,)+()#/.")(/.#&(#(8,44,&(1#492":(
=-$7'>(A*B(X(G,1/(#()"0%1%,&('#4"(D,#)$(%&(
/."(-)%6&'(2#D:(Y22,-(1/7$"&/1(-.,(>&%1.(
/."%)(-,)+("#)25(/,(0%1%/(/."(-)%6&'(2#D(/,(
92#5(/."(D,#)$('#4"(#&$()"0%1"(/."%)(-,)+(
%&$"9"&$"&/25:(
C'9-*'1"(*'.(CD$9(<@$?%(X(L%0"(1/7$"&/1(#(
1"&/"&8"(#&$()"0%1%,&(9),49/(#1(#&(
"&/)#&8"(,)("?%/(12%9:(
CD*+?@"(4-&+?9%(
E."*%(X(G7/(#(1/#)(&"?/(/,(/."(4#%&(%$"#:(;I(5,7(8#&@/(>&$(/."(4#%&(%$"#3(-)%/"(%/:(
F->*'$:*7&'(X(P,"1(/."(>)1/(1"&/"&8"(')#D(5,7)(#E"&6,&Z(;I(&,/3(D""I(%/(79:(
G&$1"(X([&$")2%&"(#(-,)$(,)(1"&/"&8"(/.#/(1.,-1(.,-(5,7(I""2(#D,7/(/."(/,9%8:(;I(5,7(8#&@/(>&$(#(
I""2%&'(-,)$(,)(1"&/"&8"3(#$$(%/:(
=&-.(8;&$1"(X(U%)82"(F(2%&+%&'(0")D:(U.#&'"(/."(2%&+%&'(0")D(%&/,(#&(#86,&(0")D:(
<"'9"'1"(H@0"'1I(X(U."8+(I,)("?/)#(-,)$1(%&(2,&'(1"&/"&8"1:(U),11(,7/(#&5(7&&"8"11#)5(-,)$1(/.#/(
5,7(>&$:(
57
58

=&-.(>?&$9"%
@-?15*%A%5-.4-.,%=*?+9%@)/.,*%()*%
-(%('%/.%/1B'.%=*?+9%
A&$9"%
&'*7%<'6?%8/8*?%7'6.0%5-4*%<'62%
H'E%1/.%<'6%(*552%
3-4*'$5*6&'%
&'%()*%+*,-..-.,%/.0%*.0-.,%
1'..*1(2%3-.4%()*%1'.1567-'.%
+/14%('%()*%('8-1%7*.(*.1*9%
7"'8"'9"(:2;"'9<(
&'%<'6%)/=*%/%+/5/.1*%'>%
7)'?(%/.0%5'.,%7*.(*.1*72%
3-4*'$5*6&'%
&'*7%()*%N?7(%7*.(*.1*%,?/+%
<'6?%/P*.B'.2%L>%.'(O%+**>%-(%689%
@."*%%
#00%/%C*C'?/+5*%0*(/-5%
/+'6(%()*%('8-19%
A&$9"%
D.0*?5-.*%()*%E'?0%'?%
7*.(*.1*%()/(%7)'E7%()*%+-,%
>**5-.,%-.%()*%8/8*?9%
7"'8"'9"(:2;"'9<%
@?'77%'6(%/.<%6..*1*77/?<%
E'?07%'?%7*.(*.1*79%
3-4*'$5*6&'%
F/4*%76?*%<'6%)/=*%/(%5*/7(%
()?**%(?/.7-B'.%E'?079%
=&-.(>?&$9"%
#00%G%7*.7'?<%E'?07%('%<'6?%
8/?/,?/8)9%
!"#$"%
7"'8"'9"(:2;"'9<%
F/4*%76?*%<'6%7(/?(*0%<'6?%
7*.(*.1*7%E-()%0-I*?*.(%
E'?079%
@."*%(
J6(%/%7(/?%.*K(%('%()*%C/-.%
-0*/9%L>%<'6%1/.M(%N.0%-(O%E?-(*%
-(9%
:;&%
=&-.(>?&$9"%
@-?15*%G%.'6.79%#00%/%
0*71?-+-.,%E'?0%('%*/1)%'>%
()*%.'6.79%
!"#$%$&'()*+"(,&*-.(
/0*+12"(
!"#$"%
&'(%
!"#$%$&'()*+"(,&*-.(
/"+01*2"(
59
!"#$%$&'()$*"(
+,$*-(!"."/"'*"(
O%'/70+('(/$'P('0/(I04>70+(*4>()4($%675%(75('(<%'$0%/(5I7<<E('0/(,'03(1,%5E(34?0+(>$7)%$5(,'3(04)(
*'6%()*%(;$71;'<($%'/70+('0/(>$710+(5I7<<5()4($%675%()*%7$(4>0(>4$I(>7)*4?)(&$4,&10+"(.0('//7140E(
34?0+(>$7)%$5(,'3(67%>($%675740('5(54,%)*70+(0%+'16%QRSD70+R(>*')T5(U>$40+R(>7)*()*%7$(>4$I"(V3(
)?$070+($%675740(70)4('(+',%E()%';*%$5(;'0()'$+%)()*%(5I7<<5()*')()*%3(>'0)(5)?/%0)5()4(';W?7$%E(
/%,405)$')%(*4>(+44/(>$710+(;'0(M%;4,%(M%N%$E('0/(/%6%<4&(5)?/%0)5T(;$71;'<($%'/70+(5I7<<5"((
0/&*"1,/"(
!" #$%&'$%()*%(+',%-(
./%0123(&$4,&)5(24$()*%($%675740(/7%"(
8$7)%(94$()3&%:()*%(&$4,&)5(70)4()*%(
/7;%()%,&<')%"(
=4;')%('(>$710+(5',&<%()4(?5%(24$(
)*%(';167)3"(
@')*%$()*%($%675740(/7%('0/(;4&7%5(42(
)*%(>$710+(5',&<%"(
A" B75;?55(!"#$%$&'(>7)*(5)?/%0)5"(CD&<'70(
>*')($%675740(75E(>*3(>$7)%$5($%675%E('0/(
*4>(>$7)%$5($%675%"(
F" #<'3()*%($%675740(/7;%(+',%(>7)*(5)?/%0)5-(
G*$4>()*%($%675740(/7;%"(
H*4>(5)?/%0)5(*4>()4(,'I%()*%(
;*'0+%5(5*4>0(40()*%(/7;%"(J<<4>(
5)?/%0)5()4(,'I%()*%(;*'0+%5(
5*4>0(40()*%7$(&'&%$5"(
G*$4>()*%(/7;%(5%6%$'<(1,%5('0/(
;4010?%(,'I70+()*%(;*'0+%5(
5*4>0"(
K" L4,&'$%()*%($%675%/()%D)(>7)*()*%(4$7+70'<(
)%D)"(B75;?55(>*7;*(6%$5740(54?0/5(M%N%$(
'0/(>*3"((
)$2"/"'343&'(
5,%6&7$8"(69"()$"(X(./%0123(&$4,&)5(24$(
$%675740(/7;%(M'5%/(40('(5&%;7S;(>$710+(
)$'7)E('(;4,M70'140(42()$'7)5E(4$('(
M%0;*,'$I"(
:"'6"'*"()$"(X(Y'I%('(5%;40/(/7%()*')(*'5(
'(/7Z%$%0)(5%0)%0;%(40(%';*(2';%"(G*$4>(
)*%(5%0)%0;%(/7%(>7)*()*%($%675740(/7%E('0/(
,'I%()*%($%675740()*$4>0()4()*%(5%0)%0;%(
)*$4>0"(
594';"(69"()$"(X(Y'I%(5%6%$'<($%675740(
/7;%"([5%('(/7Z%$%0)(5%)(%6%$3(1,%(
5)?/%0)5(/4()*%(';167)3"(
:"'6"'*"(<&/-(X(.0)$4/?;%()*%($%675740(
&$4;%55(M3(>4$I70+(>7)*(40%(4$()>4(57,&<%(
5%0)%0;%5E('0/()*%0(+$'/?'<<3(,46%()4>'$/(
&'$'+$'&*5(9'5('&&$4&$7')%:"(
(
</$3';(=/&,>%(X(J<<4>(5)?/%0)5()4(;$%')%(
'($%675740(/7%()4(I%%&(70()*%7$(/%5I5(4$(
;?MM3"(.05)$?;)(5)?/%0)5()4(?5%()*%(/7%(
>*%0($%67570+(70/%&%0/%0)<3E(>7)*('(
&'$)0%$E(4$(>7)*('(5,'<<(+$4?&"(
?'6"/4*3#"(!"#$%$&'(X(G*$4>()*%($%675740(
/7%('5('(;<'55E(M?)('<<4>(5)?/%0)5()4(24<<4>(
)*%(&$4,&)5()4($%675%()*%7$(4>0(>4$I(
9$')*%$()*'0('(;4,,40(5',&<%:"(
=,$1"1(!"#$%$&'(X(G*$4>()*%(;<'55T($%675740(
/7%(F()4(\(1,%5(>7)*(5)?/%0)5"(O%;4$/()*%(
&$4,&)5()*')(%';*(5)?/%0)()*$4>5"(J<<4>(
5)?/%0)5()4(;*445%('0/(,'I%(!(4$(A(
$%6757405(2$4,()*%(<75)"(
60
!"#$%&$'()*+$%,-.'%/0(1223334'*+/565,"748.'29$.'$+-:26'*9$528"#$;'.<$)496,%
!"#$%$&'()$*"(
+",-./0"(
61
!"#$%$&'()$*"(
!"#$%$&'(+,&-./%(012-.3"(
!"#$%&$'()*+$%,-.'%/0(1223334'*+/565,"748.'29$.'$+-:26'*9$528"#$;'.<$)496,%
455(2(
%"'%&,6(
5"/2$37(
8%"(2/(3"2%/(
9(/,2'%$:&'(
;&,5%7(
<$,*3"(/="(
-2$'($5"27(
D!00(+4EEF(
)&'G/(
*=2'B"(2(
/=$'BF(
>2?"(%@,"(
6&@,(
%"'/"'*"%(
2,"(5$A","'/(
3"'B/=%7(
455(2(5"/2$3(
2C&@/(/="(
/&.$*7(
62
!"#$%$&'()$*"(
+"',"'*"%(-./012"(
!"#$%&$'()*+$%,-.'%/0(1223334'*+/565,"748.'29$.'$+-:26'*9$528"#$;'.<$)496,%
3(/,"(
45"/67/%,8(
9:"(;&<(5/'8(
3(:/#"(/(
4='6(4";8(
@"(:/;(
5"*"%%8(
+:"(2/=<:";8(
9:">(?"',(
,&(,:"(
4"/*:8(

63
!"#$%$&'()*""+(
,-$./(!"0"1"'."(
O%'/70+('(/$'P('0/(I04870+(*48()4($%675%(75('(9%'$0%/(5I799E('0/(,'03(1,%5E(34?0+(8$7)%$5(,'3(04)(
*'6%()*%(=$71='9($%'/70+('0/(8$710+(5I7995()4($%675%()*%7$(480(84$I(87)*4?)(&$4,&10+"(.0('//7140E(
34?0+(8$7)%$5(,'3(67%8($%675740('5(54,%)*70+(0%+'16%QRSD70+R(8*')T5(U8$40+R(87)*()*%7$(84$I"(V3(
)?$070+($%675740(70)4('(+',%E()%'=*%$5(='0()'$+%)()*%(5I7995()*')()*%3(8'0)(5)?/%0)5()4('=W?7$%E(
/%,405)$')%(*48(+44/(8$710+(='0(M%=4,%(M%N%$E('0/(/%6%94&(5)?/%0)5T(=$71='9($%'/70+(5I7995"((
21&."3-1"(
!" #$%&'$%()*%(+',%-(
./%0123(&$4,&)5(24$()*%($%675740(
8*%%9"(:$7)%(;4$()3&%<()*%(&$4,&)5(
70)4()*%(/7=%()%,&9')%"(
>4=')%('(8$710+(5',&9%()4(?5%(24$(
)*%('=167)3"(
@')*%$()*%($%675740(8*%%9('0/(=4&7%5(
42()*%(8$710+(5',&9%"(
A" B75=?55(!"#$%$&'(87)*(5)?/%0)5"(CD&9'70(
8*')($%675740(75E(8*3(8$7)%$5($%675%E('0/(
*48(8$7)%$5($%675%"(
F" G&70()*%($%675740(8*%%9(87)*(5)?/%0)5-(
H?$0()*%($%675740(8*%%9"(
G*48(5)?/%0)5(*48()4(,'I%()*%(
=*'0+%5(5*480(40()*%(8*%%9"(
J9948(5)?/%0)5()4(,'I%()*%(
=*'0+%5(5*480(40()*%7$(&'&%$5"(
G&70()*%(8*%%9(5%6%$'9(1,%5('0/(
=4010?%(,'I70+()*%(=*'0+%5(
5*480"(
K" L4,&'$%()*%($%675%/()%D)(87)*()*%(4$7+70'9(
)%D)"(B75=?55(8*7=*(6%$5740(54?0/5(M%N%$(
'0/(8*3"((
!"#$%$&'()*""+(A79"1$7+%(
H4(,'I%()*%($%675740(8*%%9E(34?(8799(0%%/](
!O%675740(:*%%9(#'N%$0(
4$5"1"'676&'(
8-%9&:$;"(9*"()*""+(X(./%0123(&$4,&)5(
24$($%675740(8*%%9(M'5%/(40('(5&%=7S=(
8$710+()$'7)E('(=4,M70'140(42()$'7)5E(4$('(
M%0=*,'$I"(
(
8*7'<"(9*"()*""+(X(Y'I%(5%6%$'9($%675740(
8*%%95"(Z5%('(/7[%$%0)(40%(%6%$3(1,%(
5)?/%0)5(/4()*%('=167)3"(
="'9"'."()&1/(X(.0)$4/?=%()*%($%675740(
&$4=%55(M3(84$I70+(87)*(40%(4$()84(57,&9%(
5%0)%0=%5E('0/()*%0(+$'/?'993(,46%()48'$/(
&'$'+$'&*5(;'5('&&$4&$7')%<"(
(
)1$6'<(>1&-?%(X(J9948(5)?/%0)5()4(=$%')%(
'($%675740(8*%%9()4(I%%&(70()*%7$(/%5I5"(
.05)$?=)(5)?/%0)5()4(?5%()*%(8*%%9(8*%0(
$%67570+(70/%&%0/%0)93E(87)*('(&'$)0%$E(4$(
87)*('(5,'99(+$4?&"(
@'9"17.6#"(!"#$%$&'(X(G&70()*%($%675740(
8*%%9(87)*(5)?/%0)5E(M?)('9948()*%,()4(
249948()*%(&$4,&)5()4($%675%()*%7$(480(
84$I(;$')*%$()*'0('(=4,,40(5',&9%<"(
>-$3"3(!"#$%$&'(X(G&70()*%(=9'55T($%675740(
8*%%9(F()4(\(1,%5(87)*(5)?/%0)5"(O%=4$/(
)*%(&$4,&)5()*')(%'=*(5)?/%0)(9'0/5(40"(
J9948(%'=*(5)?/%0)()4(=*445%(!(4$(A(
$%6757405(2$4,()*%(975)()4(,'I%()4()*%7$(
8$710+"(
!G)?$/3(&'&%$(;='$/5)4=I(4$(&45)%$(M4'$/<(
!V$'/5(
!^49%(&?0=*(
!G=7554$5(
!Y'$I%$5('0/(=$'3405(
64
!"#$%$&'()*""+(
,-./0+"(
<$=&#%:)&#
*(:)#
%&'+&'7&%#
%+$)+#5,+8#
",>&)&'+#
5()"%.#
!""#$#
%&'%()*#
"&+$,-.#
!""#$#"&+$,-#
$/(:+#+8&#+(;,7.#
!""#$#/,0#
1&&-,'0.#
6,)7-&#+8&#
9$,'#,"&$.#
68$'0&#?#
-,'=,'0#@&)/#
,'+(#$'#
$74('#@&)/.#
<$=&#%:)&#
*(:)#
%&'+&'7&%#
$)&#",>&)&'+#
-&'0+8%.#
2%&#$+#-&$%+#3#
+)$'%,4('#
5()"%.#
65
!"#$%$&'()*""+(
,-."/'(0(,-/1(2(
!"#$%&'()$#*+$,'&-.$&-(+,/$
3$/"45&'%(
0/ 12-#+$2+3-,-'($42'54#,$'(#'$#*+$6+3-,-'($1*++&$7%8+2($9$7%2#$:/$
:/ ;,+$,<-,,'2,$#'$<"#$%&'()$#*+$,'&-.$+.)+$'=$>'#*$4%8+2(,/$
?/ 7"#$#*+$<"#$'"#$6+3-,-'($1*++&$7%8+2($9$7%2#$0$'($#'4$'=$#*+$6+3-,-'($1*++&$7%8+2(9$7%2#$:/$
@/ A'&+B4"(<*$#*+$<+(#+2$'=$6+3-,-'($1*++&$C*+2+$#*+$&-(+,$5++#/$
D/ 7"#$%$>2%.$-($#*+$*'&+$#'$*'&.$#*+$6+3-,-'($1*++&$#')+#*+2/$
66
!"#$%$&'()*""+(
,"-.+/0"(1(2/30(4(
5$3"67&'%(
!" #$%&'($')%*%+,(-$+.-&*(+,&+(&/'(0')%*%+,(#/''1(234'$,(5(23$&(6"(
6" 7*'(*8%**+$*(&+(89&(31+,:(&/'(*+1%;(';:'(+<(=+&/(-34'$,*"(
>" 29&(&/'(89&(+9&(0')%*%+,(#/''1(234'$,(5(23$&(!(+,(&+-(+<(&/'(0')%*%+,(#/''1(234'$,5(23$&(6"(
?" @+1'A-9,8/(&/'(8',&'$(+<(0')%*%+,(#/''1(B/'$'(&/'(1%,'*(.''&"(
C" 29&(3(=$3;(%,(&/'(/+1'(&+(/+1;(&/'(0')%*%+,(#/''1(&+:'&/'$"(
67
LEARNING TO WRITE: EDITING AND CONVENTIONS
Preview
-
-
-
Learning to use conventions of Standard English accurately is the primary focus of

editing.
Students can learn the conventions of Standard English in the context of their
experience with language, which can lead them to experiment with conventions in
their own writing.
The CCSS require s to edit as early as second grade, although all students in the
primary grades can use editing strategies to polish a text.
What is editing?
Editing involves polishing a piece of writing. Gail Tompkins (2008) writes,
Editing is putting the piece of writing into its final form (original emphasis). During
prewriting, drafting, and revision, writers focus on developing the content of a piece of
writing. When writers edit, they focus on making corrections to grammar, punctuation, and
spelling. Although editing usually comes near the end of the writing process, writers often
make changes to grammar and mechanics during drafting and revision. Rather than
describe a step in a linear writing process, the term editing is simply meant to describe
the actions that writers take when they attend to the surface features of words and
sentences.

Editing and revision are different. Like revision, editing is meant to make a piece
of writing better; however, when writers edit, they concentrate on using accurate
capitalization, grammar, and punctuation. Making this distinction is important because the
type of work students do when revising and editing are entirely different and require
different kinds of thinking. In addition, this distinction is important to ensure that teachers
between classrooms and grade-levels refer to the same type of activities in the writing
process: Revision focuses on changing the content and arrangement of a piece of writing;
editing focuses on grammar and mechanics.
Why should students learn to edit for conventions of?

Using accurate grammar and mechanics enhances the clarity of a message,
and in some cases, inaccurate use can affect the meaning of a message. Editing for
conventions is an audience-focused activity. The Writing Study Group of the National
Council of Teachers of English (NCTE) Executive Committees Beliefs about the Teaching of
Writing (2004) explains, Readers expect writing to conform to their expectations, to
match the conventions generally established for public texts. The term conventions in the
context of Standard English describes the agreed upon rules for correct grammar and
mechanics. For emergent and beginning writers, command of English language conventions
usually includes learning upper and lower case letter shapes, using capital letters at the
beginning of sentences and for the pronoun I, putting a punctuation mark at the end of
sentences, phonetic spelling, and ensuring subject-verb agreement.
68
Learning to use conventions accurately is the primary focus of editing.

Teaching conventions of Standard English does not need to be dull or plodding; teachers
can make conventions come alive! Writers not only use conventions to make their writing
clearer, they also use conventions to add meaning and effect to their writing. In the same
way that effective word choice puts sparkle in a piece of writing, conventions can be used
to enhance the writers voice, adding pizazz and taking the writing up a notch. Ruth Culham
(2005) explains, More than a rigid set of rules, conventions invite choices. They can clarify
or confuse the meaning of a text. They can make an otherwise dull passage come alive.
Students can explore how conventions operate in a text. Rather than memorizing rules,
students can experience conventions in meaningful ways and reflect upon how they use
conventions in their own writing.
How do editing and conventions fit into the Common Core?

The CCSS stipulates that students should edit their work beginning in second
grade, but all primary teachers can teach editing and conventions in the context of
students own writing. Foundational reading, writing, and language skills for students in
Kindergarten through second grade vary greatly and with little overlap from one grade to
the next. Luckily, the Language section of the CCSS provides a list of the conventions that
students should learn at each grade level. Teachers must dig into the standards to find out
which punctuation, capitalization, and grammar rules students need to know at the end of
each grade level. Participating in editing activities allows students to practice the
conventions of Standard English in context.

Rather than teaching conventions skills in isolation, teachers can provide
direct and indirect instruction through students experiences with language.
Students encounter Standard English conventions daily, and teachers can take advantage of
those language experiences. Reading like a writer means focusing on how a text is put
together, more specifically, the techniques the writer is using to get his or her message
across and how those techniques affect [readers] (Peha, 2003). When students look at
conventions in texts from the perspective of a writer, they question how the conventions
make the writing easier to read, how the author uses conventions in unusual ways, and
how the use of conventions deepens the meaning of a text (Peha, 2003). Lucy Calkins
(1986) writes, The use of the English language is a skill to be developed, not content to be
taught, and it is best learned through active and purposeful experience with it. Looking at
conventions from the perspective of a writer makes editing a more engaging, interactive
process.
Best Practices for Teaching Editing and Conventions

Address one pattern of conventions errors at a time. The Focus Correction
Approach (FCA) is a selective approach to assessing students writing. Rather than marking
every mistake on a students paper, teacher select one critical issue and provide direct
instruction for correcting the issue. This approach allows teachers to focus on individual
students needs as well as the needs of class populations. The issues that teachers address
with the FCA can be grounded in a specific benchmark or in the observations that teachers
make about students writing. Because teachers point out only one pattern of errors at a
69
time and work with students to correct those errors, the FCA provides an easy way to
differentiate instruction that is not overwhelming for students or teachers.

Incorporate self- and peer assessment strategies into editing and
conventions instruction. Self-assessment and peer assessment reach learners at all ages
and levels of ability; moreover, self- and peer assessment is a best practice approach for
differentiating instruction for English language learners. Allowing students to peer assess
gives them an opportunity to receive immediate feedback from a non-threatening audience
and gives teacher more time to meet with students individually or in small groups to
address immediate concerns.

Teach students to read through their drafts several times, looking for
different types of errors each time. This strategy is called multi-pass editing. No writer
catches all of his or her mistakes by reading his or her work once or twice. Instead of asking
students to re-read their work once to find errors, teachers may create a shared editing
checklist (or individual editing checklists based on students needs) for students to
reference as they edit. Students can read through their papers several times, focusing each
time on a different criteria in the checklist.
Figure 5.1 Sample instructional plan for using the Focus Correction Approach with self-
assessment and multi-pass editing
Determine the conventions skill that students need to learn
Focus on a specific benchmark
Find and fill a gap in students knowledge
Focus
Correction
Approach
Teach the skill that students need to learn

Provide instruction to individual students, small groups, or class
Practice the new skill
Offer opportunities for students to use the skill and locate errors
Create a checklist or rubric that reflects the skill(s) that students learned
Create the checklist or rubric with students
Create the checklist or rubric and explain it to students
Give students a copy of the checklist or rubric and allow them the
opportunity to practice multi-pass editing and self-assessment
Self-
Ask students to read their papers through one time for each item on
Assessment
the checklist and mark each type of error with a different color pen
and Multi-
or pencil
Pass
Editing
Ask students to record the results
Allow students time to correct the errors they marked

70
Figure 5.2 Sample instructional plan for using the Focus Correction Approach with peer
assessment and multi-pass editing
Determine the conventions skill that students need to learn
Focus on a specific benchmark
Find and fill a gap in students knowledge
Focus
Correction
Approach
Teach the skill that students need to learn

Provide instruction to individual students, small groups, or class
Practice the new skill
Offer opportunities for students to use the skill and locate errors
Create a checklist or rubric that reflects the skill(s) that students learned
Create the checklist or rubric with students
Create the checklist or rubric and explain it to students
Divide students into groups. Make each group member responsible for a
different part of the checklist:
Students A: Read all group members papers for misspelled spelling
words
Students B: Read all group members papers for capitalization errors
Students C: Read all group members papers for punctuation errors
Peer
Assessment
and Multi-
Ask students to circle the errors they find and record the results
Pass
Editing
Allow students time to correct the mistakes on their papers

71
!"#$%&'()*+,'-.*'/#%"0*&)*10%23%"'4*)"0'
56#7+'80-0*0%70'
9:;<.='
>?)1'1?0'9:;<.='(0)%,'
@.A'1.'B,0'1?0'9:;<.='
#$$"%&'()&*+,'"-*./"
012"32')"),"42$"!"
6272)2"8)*/2"9,-2)1:';",&)<"
=2".2*$".2*$"*"(1*%)2."4,,/!"
"
>'92.)"8*$$"9,-2)1:';<"
>"1*?2"-*./2.9"%2'(:79"*'$"(.*@,'9!"
"
P"
"
P"
AAAAA"
AAAAA"
AAAAA"
B1*';2"),"*"(*%:)*7"72C2."
!"
M"
)25)"
"
!"
AAAAA"
AAAAA"
AAAAA"
AAAAA"
AAAAA"
AAAAA"
AAAAA"
AAAAA"
AAAAA"
B1*';2"),"*"7,32.(*92"72C2."
D2"*)2"E&'(1",'")12"F7*@G.,&'$!"
" "
"
B12(/"9%277:';"
>"3&H"*)")12"%*./!"
B7,92"9%*(2"42)322'"72C2.9",."
3,.$9"
I.!"J&9+'"4.,&;1)"9""""""*7*$!"
#$$"9%*(2"
D*)2.":9";,,$L,."@,&M"
"
03:)(1"72C2.9",."3,.$9"*.,&'$"
0*)&.$*@".,$2"32"1,.929!"
>'$2')")12"%*.*;.*%1"
!N.:$*@"':;1)9"*.2")12"429)M">";2)"),"
9)*@"3:)1"-@";.*'$-*!"D2";,"),"
)12"-,?:29!"O12'P"32";,"1,-2"
*'$"%7*@"4,*.$";*-29!">"7,?2"
9%2'$:';"N.:$*@"':;1)9"3:)1"-@"
;.*'$-*!"
8""<"
8""<"
"
K"
:"9*3"-9!"[email protected]")&29$*@!"
AAAAA"
AAAAA"
AAAAA"
K"

72
!"#"$"%"&'()*+,&%-./-0,1&
23)45&6070.0+40&
!"#$%&'#(')*+'$,+')-'.-/#(*'0'.#+1+'-2'34#$%&'0%"',05+'0'.#+1+'-2'34#$%&'/--5'6+7+48'9*+%'34#)+4('
+"#):')*+;',05+'(<4+')*0)')*+;'*0=+'1-44+1)'&40,,04:'.<%1)<0$-%:'0%"'<(0&+8'>*+'014-%;,'?8@8A8B8'
10%'*+/.'()<"+%)('4+,+,6+4')*+'01$=#$+('#%=-/=+"'#%'+"#$%&8'
!"#"$"%"&'()*+,&
!/8)-/9):/*;+&
#</,0&
$3+4-3/*;+&
%8099)+,&
?0.#)0/#C+')*+'D4()'3-4"'-2'0'(+%)+%1+8'
?0.#)0/#C+'%0,+(:'./01+(:',-%)*(:'$)/+(:'0%"')*+'.4-%-<%'E8'
F0)1*'%-<%('0%"'=+46(8'
@(+')*+'1-44+1)'=+46')+%(+8'
@(+'.+4#-"(:'G<+($-%',045(:'-4'+H1/0,0$-%',045('0)')*+'+%"'-2'(+%)+%1+(8'
@(+'1-,,0('#%'"0)+(8'
@(+'1-,,0('6+)3++%'3-4"('#%'0'(+4#+(8'
I+,+,6+4')*+'4</+J'9*+%'#%'(#&*):'(.+//'#)'4#&*)K'
B-<%"L-<)'3-4"(')*0)';-<'"-%M)'5%-38'
?#41/+'3-4"(')*0)',#&*)'6+'(.+//+"'#%1-44+1)/;8'
!"#"$"%"&'()*+,&'=/>890'
&
&
(*+'./0;'3#)',+'0)'4+(+(('
&
!/8)-/9):/*;+'N'B*+'./0;'3#)',+'0)'4+(+(('
&
#</,0'N'B*+'./0;('3#)',+'0)'4+(+(('
&
$3+4-3/*;+'N'B*+'./0;('3#)',+'0)'4+(+((8'
&
%8099)+,'N'B*+'./0;('3#)*',+'0)'4+1+((8&
!"#"$"%"&!B0459)<-&'=/>890&7;.&C)+(0.,/.-0+&
! P#"'E'()04)'+01*'(+%)+%1+'3#)*'0'10.#)0/'
/+7+4U'
! 'P#"'E'10.#)0/#C+')*+'.4-%-<%'!U'
! P#"'E'<(+'0'.+4#-"'0)')*+'+%"'-2'+01*'
(+%)+%1+U'
'()*+,?60/(1&!9/<<.;;>&
%5)8&/&@)+0'N'E%()4<1)'()<"+%)(')-'(5#.'0'/#%+'
3*+%')*+;'34#)+')*+#4'"40O(8'P-#%&')*#('3#//'
&#=+'()<"+%)('./+%);'-2'(.01+')-'+"#)8'
!;9;.&!;(0'N'@(+'1-/-42</'.+%('-4'1-/-4+"'
.+%1#/(')-',045'+"#)(')*0)'()<"+%)(',05+8'
!;>>;+&'()*+,&A/.5<'N'>+01*'()<"+%)('
*-3')-'<(+'+"#$%&',045(8'
'()*+,&!B0459)<-<'N'?4+0)+'0%"'.-()'+"#$%&'
1*+15/#()('2-4'()<"+%)(')-'4+2+4+%1+'0(')*+;'
+"#)8'
#<0&'()*+,&%-./-0,)0<'N'@(+')*+'Q-1<('
?-44+1$-%'R..4-01*'SQ?RT')-')04&+)'(.+1#D1'
(5#//(:'0%"')+01*'()<"+%)(')-'<(+',</$L.0(('
+"#$%&'3#)*'1*+15/#()(8''
! P#"'E'1#41/+')*+'3-4"('E'"#"%M)'5%-3'*-3'
)-'(.+//U'
73
!"#$%&'"(()#*"+&,--(".#/&0"(&123*+4&
5$3#6&7)0)()+#)&
!"#$%&'()$*&++#',&-$.//+&0'"$1%*.2$033&4)$5#0'"#+)$5&$6&'()$&-$&-#$&+$54&$57/#)$&6$#++&+)$05$0$,8#$
+05"#+$5"0-$/&9-,-:$&(5$033$&6$5"#$#++&+)$0$)5(;#-5$80<#)=$!#0'"#+)$'0-$()#$5"9)$)5+05#:7$5&$;9>#+#-,05#$
9-)5+(',&-$5&$8##5$5"#$-##;)$&6$9-;9?9;(03$)5(;#-5)$&+$()#$5"#$)5+05#:7$5&$)(//&+5$5"#$4"&3#$'30))=$
8("#)2$()$
@= A#0;$0$)5(;#-5B)$4+9,-:=$
C= D#3#'5$&-#$57/#$&6$#++&+$5"05$5"#$)5(;#-5$
80<#)$8(3,/3#$,8#)=$%&+$#E08/3#F$5"#$
)5(;#-5$807$6&+:#5$5&$()#$0$'0/9503$3#G#+$05$
5"#$H#:9--9-:$&6$)#?#+03$)#-5#-'#)=$
$
I= J+&?9;#$9-)5+(',&-$6&+$'&++#',-:$5"#$#++&+=$$
J&9-5$&(5$5"#$#++&+$5&$5"#$)5(;#-5=$
D"&4$5"#$)5(;#-5$"&4$5&$'&++#'5$95=$
J&9-5$5&$0$)#'&-;$/30'#$4"#+#$5"#$
)5(;#-5$80<#)$5"#$)08#$#++&+=$
.)<$5"#$)5(;#-5$5&$'&++#'5$95=$
.)<$5"#$)5(;#-5$5&$K-;$&5"#+$/30'#)$
9-$5"#$)08#$5#E5$4"#+#$"#L)"#$
80<#)$5"#$)08#$#++&+$0-;$'&++#'5$
#0'"$&-#$9-;#/#-;#-537=$
C3D)()+*.*"+$
E3F+4&=/)&9=.+2.(2%$T$N-5+&;('#$-#4$
)<933)$1&+$+#O5#0'"$)<933)2$()9-:$5"#$%&'()$
*&++#',&-$.//+&0'"=$!#0'"$5"#$)<933)$&-#$
05$0$,8#$9-$5"#$'&-5#E5$&6$)5(;#-5)B$
4+9,-:=$
9.:-;)&!',&<+%=($#*"+.;&8;.+&0"(&>3+2)(4.(=)+$
&
?@>@A.&*0/95039M#$5"#$K+)5$4&+;$&6$0$)#-5#-'#$0-;$
5"#$/+&-&(-$!"$
&
?).(+3+4&B.(4)=$N$'0-$()#$'0/9503$3#G#+)$05$5"#$
H#:9--9-:$&6$)#-5#-'#)=$
$
@= *&8/3#5#$0$/+&'#))OH0)#;$4+9,-:$/+&P#'5$
495"$)5(;#-5)=$Q&,'#$5"05$5"#$80P&+957$&6$
)5(;#-5)$"0?#$6&+:&G#-$5&$'0/95039M#$5"#$
K+)5$4&+;$&6$0$)#-5#-'#=$
C= !#0'"$0$89-9O3#))&-$&-$()9-:$'0/9503$3#G#+)$
05$5"#$H#:9--9-:$&6$)#-5#-'#)=$
I= J+0','#$()9-:$'0/9503$3#G#+)$05$5"#$
H#:9--9-:$&6$)#-5#-'#)$9-$8&;#3#;F$
)"0+#;F$0-;$9-5#+0',?#$4+9,-:$0',?9,#)=$
A#0;$0$5#0'"#+O'+#05#;$4+9,-:$
)08/3#$495"$89))9-:$'0/9503$3#G#+)=$$
.)<$)5(;#-5)$5&$/&9-5$&(5$5"#$#++&+$
0-;$)"&4$5"#8$"&4$5&$'&++#'5$95=$$
.33&4$)5(;#-5)$5&$/+0','#$80<9-:$
'&++#',&-)$5&:#5"#+=$
<+23G32$.;3H)&<+%=($#*"+$T$!+0'<$5"#$57/#)$
&6$#++&+)$5"05$)5(;#-5)$80<#=$U&+<$495"$
)5(;#-5)$9-;9?9;(0337$1&+$9-$)8033$:+&(/)2$5&$
/+&?9;#$0;;9,&-03$)(//&+5$6&+$'&++#',-:$
5"&)#$#++&+)=$
R= N-)5+('5$)5(;#-5)$5&$+#O+#0;$5"#9+$
)#-5#-'#)$1&+$/0+0:+0/"2$0-;$'"#'<$5&$
80<#$)(+#$5"#7$"0?#$()#;$'0/9503$3#G#+)$05$
5"#$H#:9--9-:$&6$5"#9+$)#-5#-'#)=$
'";"(&'"2)&123=%$T$!#0'"$)5(;#-5)$5&$#;95$
5"#9+$/0/#+)$495"$0$;9>#+#-5$'&3&+$/#-$&+$
/#-'93=$
S= .33&4$)5(;#-5)$5&$'&++#'5$5"#$#++&+)$()9-:$0$
;9>#+#-5$'&3&+#;$/#-$&+$/#-'93=$
'";;)#=&C.=.$T$V##/$0$+#'&+;$&6$5"#$57/#)$
&6$'&-?#-,&-)$#++&+)$5"05$)5(;#-5)$80<#=$
.;;+#))$5"#$#++&+)$5"+&(:"$89-9O3#))&-)$
495"$5"#$4"&3#$'30))F$0$)8033$:+&(/F$&+$
9-;9?9;(03$)5(;#-5)$0)$5"#$-##;$0+9)#)=&
74
!"#$%&'(()*+,$-.)/01'02.3)
4",56)728212-52)
!"#$%&'(%#)*+#)*'),#*--#".#',(#)"+/(+0"+1#(%%"%1#',(2#,*/(#3*4(#&+#*#5&()(#".#$%&0+6#&+#"+(#%(*4&+67#
8,(#39-0:5*11#1'%*'(62#&1#*+#(4&0+6#'(),+&;9(#',*'#'(*),(1#1'94(+'1#'"#%(*4#',(&%#$%&0+6#1(/(%*-#03(1<#
-""=&+6#."%#4&>(%(+'#'25(1#".#(%%"%1#(*),#03(7#8,&1#1'%*'(62#?()"3(1#(/(+#3"%(#(>()0/(#$,(+#
1'94(+'1#,*/(#*#)"+/(+0"+1#),()=-&1'#1"#',*'#',(2#=+"$#(@*)'-2#$,&),#(%%"%1#',(2#*%(#'%2&+6#'"#-")*'(7#
&1952+"12)
A7 B%"/&4(#1'94(+'1#$&',#*+#(4&0+6#),()=-&1'7#
C+#(4&0+6#),()=-&1'#3*2#&+)-94(D#
E5(--#,&6,:.%(;9(+)2#$"%41#)"%%()'-27#
F1(#)*5&'*-#-(G(%1#'"#?(6&+#1(+'(+)(17#
F1(#59+)'9*0"+#'"#(+4#1(+'(+)(17#
H7 I+1'%9)'#1'94(+'1#'"#%(*4#',(&%#$%&0+6#*+4#
3*%=#(%%"%1#$&',#*#4&>(%(+'#)"-"%#5(+#"%#
5(+)&-7#E'94(+'1#3*2D#
J(*4#"+)(#'"#K+4#15(--&+6#(%%"%17#
J(*4#*6*&+#'"#K+4#)*5&'*-&L*0"+#(%%"%17#
J(*4#*6*&+#'"#K+4#59+)'9*0"+#(%%"%17#
M7 C1=#1'94(+'1#'"#%()"%4#',(#(%%"%1#',(2#
3*4(#"+#',(#),()=-&1'7#
N7 !"0)(#$,&),#(%%"%1#1'94(+'1#3*%=(47#
O7 P()&4(#,"$#'"#3"4&.2#&+1'%9)0"+7#
J(15"+1(1#'"#1'94(+'#+((41#3&6,'#&+)-94(D#
Q"+.(%(+)(#$&',#&+4&/&49*-#1'94(+'17#
J()*5#*#1=&--#$&',#13*--#6%"9517#
J('(*),#*#1=&--#$&',#',(#$,"-(#)-*117#
B'5,#,0'02)&221)*+,$-.)C19"D(#
A7 P&/&4(#1'94(+'1#&+'"#6%"9517#C11&6+#(*),#
6%"95#3(3?(%#'"#%(*4#."%#*#4&>(%(+'#
*15()'#".#',(#',(#),()=-&1'7#
!"#$%&"'('R#J(*4#*--#6%"95#3(3?(%1V#
5*5(%1#."%#15(--&+6#(%%"%17#
!"#$%&"')#R#J(*4#*--#6%"95#3(3?(%1V#
5*5(%1#."%#)*5&'*-&L*0"+#(%%"%17#
!"#$%&"'*'R#J(*4#*--#6%"95#3(3?(%1V#
5*5(%1#."%#59+)'9*0"+#(%%"%17#
H7 C1=#1'94(+'1#'"#)&%)-(#',(#(%%"%1#',(2#
-")*'(#*+4#%()"%4#',(#%(19-'17#
M7 C--"$#1'94(+'1#'"#%(/&($#',(#3*%=1#"+#
',(&%#5*5(%1#*+4#)"%%()'#3&1'*=(17#
&19?,+2)!"#$%@2?2#)A-(01"5$9-#
A7 Q%(*'(#*#1(;9(+)(#".#',(#)"+/(+0"+1#1=&--1#
1'94(+'1#1,"9-4#=+"$#?(."%(#-(*/&+6#2"9%#
)-*11%""37#
H7 C11(11#1'94(+'1V#=+"$-(46(#*'#',(#
?(6&++&+6#".#',(#2(*%7#8*=(#+"'(#".#$,&),#
)"+/(+0"+1#',(2#91(#W&+X)"%%()'-2#&+#',(#
K%1'#'$"#"%#',%((#$%&0+6#*11&6+3(+'17#
M7 P('(%3&+(#',(#)%&0)*-#(%%"%1#',*'#',(#
3*Y"%&'2#".#1'94(+'1#+((4#'"#3*1'(%7#
B%"/&4(#4&%()'#&+1'%9)0"+#'"#*44%(11#',"1(#
(%%"%1#*+4#*44#',(3#'"#',(#)-*11#(4&0+6#
),()=-&1'7#
N7 P('(%3&+(#',(#"+(#"%#'$"##)%&0)*-#(%%"%1#
',*'#&+4&/&49*-#1'94(+'1#+((4#'"#3*1'(%7#
B%"/&4(#&+1'%9)0"+#',%"96,#)"+.(%(+)(1#"%#
13*--#6%"95#3&+&:-(11"+17#C44#',"1(#(%%"%1#
'"#1'94(+'1V#&+4&/&49*-#(4&0+6#),()=-&1'17#
O7 J(/&1(#',(#)-*11#),()=-&1'#*+4#&+4&/&49*-#
1'94(+'1V#),()=-&1'1#*1#1'94(+'1#3*1'(%#
',"1(#1=&--17#
:,;212-$'$9-#
<=>=&=/=)'-+)!"#$%&'(()*+,$-.#R#S*1(#',(#
(4&0+6#),()=-&1'1#"+#',(#Q7F7B7E7#*)%"+237)
&199812'+,-.)!'16(#R#8(*),#1'94(+'1#,"$#
'"#91(#5%"".%(*4&+6#3*%=1#'"#4(+"'(#',(#
),*+6(1#',(2#+((4#'"#3*=(7)
<9#91)<9+2#R#F1(#4&>(%(+'#)"-"%#5(+1#*+4#
5(+)&-1#'"#3*%=#4&>(%(+'#'25(1#".#(%%"%17#T"%#
(@*35-(<##
U*%=#)*5&'*-&L*0"+#(%%"%1#&+#"%*+6(7#
U*%=#91*6(#(%%"%1#&+#6%((+7#
U*%=#59+)'9*0"+#(%%"%1#&+#59%5-(7#
U*%=#15(--&+6#(%%"%1#&+#?-9(77)
75
!"#$"%&'%()*+#),%$-.'/&)0+/1%/2+/()
34'-5)6%*%#%/-%)
!"+7>?>@+)0$7'"$8'A$2+/)$/B)C4/-"4$2+/!"!
D$3,0-.&$!&%:3)%53E%=-,!%,+!:*,&)*%=-,!.*5$(2!!
!
C#+-%B4#%)
F2 G,().*&)!()*+$,)(!)-!*,+$.53,$!)'$!>$;3,,3,;!
-0!)'$3.!($,)$,&$(!/3)'!%!;.$$,!53,$!%,+!
*,+$.53,$!)'$!$,+!-0!)'$3.!($,)$,&$(!/3)'!%!
.$+!53,$2!
!7%88'/&!"!#$%&'!()*+$,)(!)-!.$%+!/-.+(!-*)!-0!
&-,)$1)2!#'3(!0-.&$(!)'$4!)-!5--6!%)!/-.+(!
3,+373+*%5589!/'3&'!/355!4%6$!(:$553,;!$..-.(!
4-.$!%::%.$,)2!
!
,9+):77#+$-.%()
<'-/!()*+$,)(!'-/!)-!.$%+!)'$3.!/.3=,;!
>%&6/%.+(2!!
H2 I-=&$!)'$!:%C$.,!)'%)!$4$.;$(J!K.$$,LD$+L
K.$$,LD$+2!!
!
;.<)=");+#5(!"!#'$!:%C$.,!)'%)!$4$.;$(!
>$&-4$(!%!73(*%5!&*$!0-.!43((3,;!&%:3)%53E%=-,!
%,+!:*,&)*%=-,!4%.6(2!
)
DE$F78%!
M$)'!&-*5+,N)!>$53$7$!3)O!<'$!).3$+!0-.!)/-!
P!
P!P!
8$%.(!)-!4%6$!)'$!+%,&$!)$%42!#'3(!8$%.!('$!
P!P!
;.<)=");+#5()
@'$,!/$!.$%+9!/$!;$)!%!5-)!-0!3,0-.4%=-,!
0.-4!&-,)$1)2!A,+$.()%,+3,;!-,$!/-.+!3,!
)'$!($,)$,&$!'$5:(!.$%+$.(!*,+$.()%,+!)'$!
,$1)!/-.62!
B$C$.!&-4>3,%=-,(!%,+!(-*,+(!($.7$!%(!
4%.6$.(!)-!+$&-+$!/-.+(!3,!($,)$,&$(9!
$7$,!30!)'$!5$C$.(!%.$!,-)!3,!)'$!.3;')!
-.+$.2!
D$%+3,;!/-.+(!-*)!-0!&-,)$1)!&%,!'$5:!
()*+$,)(!5-&%)$!(:$553,;!$..-.(!4-.$!$%(3582!
?,%558!+3+!3)2!('$!6,$/!'$.!4-4!/-*5+!:.-*+9!
P!
)--2!
P!
!"#$%&'$()*&+$)*$,$%#"$)*')-,.&+$./,.$,$-,0).,($
(&1&%$)+$2)++)*34$
#$%&'!()*+$,)(!)-!*($!)'$3.!?,;$.(!-.!%!
().3:!-0!:%:$.!)-!5--6!%)!/-.+(!3,+373+*%5582!
C4/-"4$2+/)!-$1%/&%#)G4/")")Q3;*.$!-*)!'-/!+3R$.$,)!:*,&)*%=-,!4%.6(!S/-.6T!3,!%!)$1)2!
!
!
C#+-%B4#%)
;.<)=");+#5(!
!
B*&8!U%563,(!/.-)$9!S#'$!*($!-0!)'$!V,;53('!
! F2 D$%+!%!)$1)!/3)'!()*+$,)(2!Y(6!:.-4:=,;!
!
Z*$(=-,(!%>-*)!)'$!:*,&)*%=-,!4%.6(!
5%,;*%;$!3(!%!(6355!)-!>$!5$%.,$+9!,-)!&-,)$,)!
!
!
!
)'%)!%.$!3,!)'$!)$1)2!!
)-!>$!)%*;')9!%,+!3)!3(!>$()!5$%.,$+!)'.-*;'!
!
:*.:-($0*5!$1:$.3$,&$!/3)'!3)2T!
!
! H2 D$&-.+!($7$.%5!:*,&)*%=-,!4%.6(!)'%)!
!
!
()*+$,)(!?,+2!
!
#'3(!().%)$;8!%55-/(!()*+$,)(!)-!$,&-*,)$.!
!
<)%,+%.+!V,;53('!&-,7$,=-,(!/3)'3,!)'$!
! [2 U'--($!-,$!:*,&)*%=-,!4%.6!)-!+3(&*((2!!
!
!
Y(6!()*+$,)(!)-!+$(&.3>$!/'%)!)'$!
&-,)$1)!-0!)'$3.!-/,!$1:$.3$,&$!/3)'!
!
:*,&)*%=-,!4%.6!5--6(!536$2!
5%,;*%;$2!
!
!
!
)
!
#$55!()*+$,)(!/'%)!3)!3(!&%55$+2!
!
DE$F78%)
!
Y(6!()*+$,)(!)-!$1:5%3,!/'%)!)'$!
B37$9!).%7$59!%+7$,)*.$9!>5$((9!%,+!+-,N)!>$!(-..82!
!
!
!
:*,&)*%=-,!4%.6!3(!+-3,;!3,!)'$!)$1)2!
LW%&6!6$.-*%&!
!
!
!
! \2 ].%&=&$!*(3,;!)'$!:*,&)*%=-,!4%.6!3,!%!
#'$!'3;'53;')$+!:*,&)*%=-,!4%.6!3(!)'$!
!
!
&-55%>-.%=7$!-.!3,+$:$,+$,)!/.3=,;!
!
%:-().-:'$2!G)!5--6(!536$!%!X83,;!&-44%2!#'$!
%&=73)82!
!
%:-().-:'$!)%6$(!)'$!:5%&$!-0!)'$!S-T!3,!S,-)T!
!!
!
)!
%,+!4%6$(!)'$!/-.+!('-.)$.2!!
76
77
LEARNING TO WRITE: PUBLISHING
Preview
Publishing is the work done in preparation for sharing and the act of sharing writing
with an audience.
Publishing requires students to consider their audience.
The CCSS establishes the expectation that students produce and publish their work
for a range of tasks, purposes, and audiences.
What is publishing?

Publishing is the final stage of the writing process. After students have spent
time gathering and organizing their ideas, drafted, revised, and edited their work, it is time
to format the piece to be shared with an audience. The range of possibilities for publishing
a students work is vast. Publishing can mean formatting an essay in MLA style for a
teacher to read, creating a book that will be shared with others beyond the classroom, or
posting student work in the classroom or common areas for others to see. When students
know their work will be shared with a real audience, publishing can be a motivating factor
for students to improve their writing.
Why teach children to publish?

Publishing gives students an audience for their writing. Audiences for student
writing can be a single reader, a small group, the entire class, the school population, and
even readers in the community. Allowing students to share their work within the walls of
the classroom contributes to the reinforcement of content knowledge and builds a
community of writers. By exploring publishing opportunities beyond the classroom,
teachers can engage students in more meaningful, authentic writing experiences. Some
written products are more suitable for sharing at the classroom environment; but, when an
authentic writing opportunity presents itself, teachers should embrace it to give their
students the experience of writing for a larger and/or different audience.
How does publishing fit into the Common Core?

Publishing is the production and distribution of writing. From kindergarten
through high school, students are expected to be able to use digital tools and technology to
produce and publish writing (Writing Standard 6). Fourth grade students should be able to
type a minimum of one page in a single sitting. By 6th grade, students should be able to
demonstrate sufficient command of keyboarding skills to type a minimum of three pages in
a single sitting. The CCSS not only expect students to engage in the writing process to craft
quality writing projects, but also to be able to produce and distribute their work using 21st
century skills and technology.

Students should engage in a range of writing activities. Writing is more than
crafting an 5-paragraph essay to demonstrate your knowledge and learning to your
teacher. Writing can be a short answer response, a poem to a parent, or an opinion letter to
78
let the principal on a school issue. Students need to engage in a variety of writing
opportunities ranging from single day activities to pieces that require an extended time
frame for a range of discipline-specific tasks, purposes, and audiences. Each writing
opportunity is different; therefore, how it is published varies. Teachers should guide
students in considering how the task and audience affect the publication aspect of their
work.
79
!"#$%&'%()*
+"%,-*./0/1/(,/*
!"#$%&'%()*%&*+',*-(.$*&+.),*/0*+',*12%3()*42/5,&&6*%+*%(7/$7,&*+',*42/8"53/(*.(8*8%&+2%#"3/(*/0*12%3()9**
!"#$%&'%()*.*4%,5,*/0*1/2:*.$$/1&*+',*."+'/2*+/*&'.2,*+',%2*12%3()*1%+'*.(*."8%,(5,9**;',*."8%,(5,*5.(*
#,*+',*+,.5',2<*.*5$.&&=.+,<*/2*/+',2*=,=#,2&*/0*+',*5/=="(%+>9*
234&*56*!"#$%&'*75"8/(5*261-*
*
?9 @(*+',*5$.&&2//=*
A.7,*.(*."+'/2B&*5'.%2**1',2,*&+"8,(+&*2,.8*.$/"8*+/*.*&=.$$*)2/"4*/2*+',*5$.&&*
C%&4$.>*1/2:*/(*.*5$.&&*#"$$,3(*#/.28*
!2%(+*.*5$.&&*(,1&$,D,2*1%+'*.235$,&*12%D,(*#>*&+"8,(+&**
E2,.+,*.*5"="$.37,*#%(8,2*0/2*,.5'*&+"8,(+*+/*.88*1/2:*+/*/7,2*+',*5/"2&,*/0*+',*
>,.2*
F9 @(*+',*&5'//$*
E2,.+,*#//:&*/2*.(+'/$/)%,&*0/2*+',*&5'//$*$%#2.2>*
C%&4$.>*12%3()*%(*5/==/(*&4.5,&*$%:,*'.$$1.>&<*+',*5.0,+,2%.<*.(8*/G5,*
H,.8*&+"8,(+*12%3()*+/*5'%$82,(*%(*/+',2*5$.&&,&*
H,.8*.$/"8*.+*.*&5'//$*.&&,=#$>*
I2%+,*.*4%,5,*0/2*+',*&5'//$*(,1&$,D,2*
A/$8*.*&5'//$*1%8,*12%3()*0.%2*+/*&'/15.&,*&+"8,(+*12%3()*
J9 K,>/(8*+',*L5'//$*
E2,.+,*.*5$.&&*1,#&%+,*/2*#$/)*'%)'$%)'3()*&+"8,(+*12%3()*
L'.2,*12%3()*1%+'*0.=%$>*.(8*02%,(8&*
L"#=%+*.*4%,5,*+/*.*12%3()*5/(+,&+*
L"#=%+*12%3()*+/*.*$%+,2.2>*=.).M%(,*/2*,NM%(,*O,9)9<*L+/(,*L/"4*/2*;,,(@(:P*
L,(8*12%3()*+/*.*4,(*4.$*
L,(8*$,D,2&*+/*$/5.$*$,.8,2&<*#"&%(,&&,&*.(8*Q/2*:"4"(.
*
96::6(*961/*7535/*753(8318&*
*
21%;()*753(8318*<*R*I%+'*)"%8.(5,*.(8*&"44/2+*02/=*.8"$+&<*"&,*.*7.2%,+>*/0*8%)%+.$*+//$&*+/*
42/8"5,*.(8*4"#$%&'*12%3()<*%(5$"8%()*%(*5/$$.#/2.3/(*1%+'*4,,2&9*
S+'*)2.8,*R*8,=/(&+2.+,*&"G5%,(+*5/==.(8*/0*:,>#/.28%()*&:%$$&*+/*+>4,*.*=%(%="=*/0*
/(,*4.),*%(*.*&%()$,*&%T()*
U+'*)2.8,*R*8,=/(&+2.+,*&"G5%,(+*5/==.(8*/0*:,>#/.28%()*&:%$$&*+/*+>4,*.*=%(%="=*/0*
+'2,,*4.),&*%(*.*&%()$,*&%T()*
V+'*)2.8,*R*8,=/(&+2.+,*&"G5%,(+*5/==.(8*/0*:,>#/.28%()*&:%$$&*+/*+>4,*.*=%(%="=*/0*
+'2,,*4.),&*%(*.*&%()$,*&%T()*
W+'*)2.8,*R*.#%$%+>*+/*$%(:*+/*.(8*5%+,*&/"25,&*
21%;()*753(8318*=>*?@18AB5'C*D*I2%+,*2/"3(,$>*/7,2*,X+,(8,8*3=,*02.=,&*O3=,*0/2*2,&,.25'<*
2,Y,53/(<*.(8*2,7%&%/(P*.(8*&'/2+*3=,*02.=,&*Z.*&%()$,*&%T()*/2*.*8.>*/2*+1/P*0/2*.*2.(),*/0*
8%&5%4$%(,N&4,5%-5*+.&:&<*4"24/&,&<*.(8*."8%,(5,&9*
80
Six Writing Trait Rubric

The Six Writing Traits provide a common language for teachers and students to communicate
about their writing. They establish a clear vision of what good writing looks like and provide the
vocabulary to deliver effective feedback about writing, be it from teacher to student or student
to student. The Six Writing Trait Rubric is a general rubric that can be used to facilitate
conversations about writing to improve a piece of work or as a tool to evaluate a finished piece
of writing.
81
82
C+<&N($+9%&O2F(+0&D.(&P;#()#*9&@(+9#(%&I&Q+*"#()$(9#*&
E.-0#$F4#&F#)+**+*)&$*"&#*"+*)&
?"#"4+5'66'65",@+;&0)"0%"'60-%/1(+"0%&'("
?"#"76/'65"&-%8'/+)")%;+")+6)+"%="(*%)1-+"
?"#"3,-0)",-+"6%0",--,65+/"'6"02+"9+)0"%-/+-"
E.&*.-0#$F4#&F#)+**+*)&$*"&#*"+*)&
A"#"C%"-+,*"9+5'66'65"
A"#"76/'65"&-%8'/+)"6%")+6)+"%="(*%)1-+"
A"#"3,-0)",-+";'))'65"%-"2,-/"0%"=%**%<"
H&I&G*$F4#&9.&%0.(#&
C.;#>B$9&D.02%#"&$*"&04#$(7&+*042"#%&%.;#&
$55(.5(+$9#&"#9$+4%&
?"#"$%&'("')")%;+<2,0"(*+,-"
?"#":%;+"/+0,'*)")1&&%-0"02+"0%&'("
?"#"31-&%)+"')")%;+<2,0"(*+,-"
G*04#$(&D.02%7&%255.(-*)&"#9$+4%&$(#&;+%%+*)&.(&
"+%0.**#09#"&D(.;&9.5+0&
A"#"$%&'("')"16(*+,-"
A"#"B+<"%-"6%"/+0,'*)")1&&%-0"02+"0%&'("
A"#"31-&%)+"')"6%0"(*+,-"
H&I&G*$F4#&9.&%0.(#&
C.;#>B$9&$002($9#&2%#&.D&)($"#L4#8#4&0.*8#*-.*%&
AKL"#"N%)0*F",((1-,0+"&16(01,I%6"
AKL"#"N%)0*F",((1-,0+"(,&'0,*'M,I%6"
AKL"#"N%)0*F",((1-,0+"&2%6+I(")&+**'65"
AKL"#"N%)0*F",((1-,0+"5-,;;,-"
E2;#(.2%&#((.(%&+*&)($"#L4#8#4&0.*8#*-.*%"
PKQL"#"B-+R1+60*F"'6,((1-,0+"&16(01,I%6"
PKQL"#"B-+R1+60*F"'6,((1-,0+"(,&'0,*'M,I%6"
PKQL"#"B-+R1+60*F"'6,((1-,0+"&2%6+I(")&+**'65"
PKQL"#"B-+R1+60*F"'6,((1-,0+"5-,;;,-&
H&I&G*$F4#&9.&%0.(#&
C.;#>B$9&04#$(&%#*9#*0#%&
?"#"N%)0")+60+6(+)"+E&-+))"(%;&*+0+"02%1520)"
?"#"N%)0")+60+6(+)",-+"-2F02;'(G+,)F"0%"-+,/",*%1/"
?"#"O6+",/H+(I8+J",/8+-9J",6/G%-"&2-,)+"+E&,6/)")+60+6(+"
G*04#$(&.(&+*0.;54#9#&%#*9#*0#%&
A"#"B+<"%-"6%")+60+6(+)"+E&-+))"(%;&*+0+"02%1520)"
A"#"B+<"%-"6%")+60+6(+)",-+"-2F02;'(G+,)F"0%"-+,/",*%1/"
A"#"C%",/H+(I8+)J",/8+-9)J",6/G%-"&2-,)+)"+E&,6/")+60+6(+"
H&I&G*$F4#&9.&%0.(#&
M"$59#"&D(.;&C9#8#&R#B$&I&>>>ST;%S.()&
M002($9#&2%#&.D&)($"#L4#8#4&0.*8#*-.*%&9B(.2)B.29&0.;5.%+-.*&
?K?L"#".((1-,0+"&16(01,I%6""
?K?L"#".((1-,0+"(,&'0,*'M,I%6"
?K?L"#".((1-,0+"&2%6+I(")&+**'65"
?K?L"#".((1-,0+"5-,;;,-"
J.*8#*-.*%&
H&I&G*$F4#&9.&%0.(#&
@(+9#(A%&0.**#0-.*&9.&9B#&9.5+0&+%&2*04#$(&
A"#"D'@*+"%-"6%"'68%*8+;+60"<'02"02+"0%&'("
A"#"D'@*+"%-"6%"=++*'65"
A"#"B+<"%-"6%"/'-+(0")0,0+;+60)"
@(+9#(A%&0.**#0-.*&9.&9B#&9.5+0&+%&%.;#>B$9&04#$(&"
?"#":%;+"'68%*8+;+60"<'02"02+"0%&'("
?"#":%;+")0-%65"=++*'65)"
?"#":%;+"/'-+(0")0,0+;+60)&
@(+9#(A%&0.**#0-.*&9.&9B#&9.5+0&+%&04#$("
!"#":0-%65"'68%*8+;+60"<'02"02+"0%&'("
!"#":0-%65"=++*'65)"
!"#">'-+(0")0,0+;+60)&
/.+0#&
@#44LF2+493&04#$(&%#*9#*0#%&
!"#".**")+60+6(+)"+E&-+))"(%;&*+0+"02%1520)"
!"#".**")+60+6(+)",-+"-2F02;'(G+,)F"0%"-+,/",*%1/"
!"#"$<%"%-";%-+",/H+(I8+)J",/8+-9)J",6/G%-"&2-,)+)"+E&,6/")+60+6(+"
@.("&JB.+0#&K&C#*9#*0#&142#*0?&
:#)+**+*)3&;+""4#3&$*"&#*"+*)&$(#&5(#%#*97&9#<9&
=.>%&4.)+0$44?&
!"#"4+5'66'65"'60-%/1(+)"0%&'("
!"#"76/'65"&-%8'/+)"(*%)1-+"
!"#".**"&,-0)",-+",--,65+/"'6"02+"9+)0"%-/+-"
'()$*+,$-.*&
1.02%#"3&04#$(3&$*"&%5#0+607&+*042"#%&(#4#8$*9&
%255.(-*)&"#9$+4%&
!"#"$%&'("')"(*+,-"
!"#".**"/+0,'*)")1&&%-0"02+"0%&'("
!"#"31-&%)+"')"(*+,-""
!"#$%&
83
>+M&N($+4%&O29(+0&@.(&P;#()#*4&E(+4#(%&D&Q%4&$*"&R*"&S($"#&
A.&*.-0#$93#&9#)+**+*)&$*"&#*"+*)&
A"#"C%"-+,*"9+5'66'65"
A"#"76/'65"&-%8'/+)"6%")+6)+"%="(*%)1-+"
A"#"3,-0)",-+";'))'65"%-"2,-/"0%"=%**%<"
C&D&B*$93#&4.&%0.(#&
B*03#$(6&%255.(-*)&"#4$+3%&$(#&;+%%+*)&.(&
"+%0.**#04#"&@(.;&4.5+0&
A"#"$%&'("')"16(*+,-"
A"#"B+<"%-"6%"/+0,'*)")1&&%-0"02+"0%&'("
A"#"31-&%)+"')"6%0"(*+,-"
C&D&B*$93#&4.&%0.(#&
E#33G92+34:&03#$(:&$*"&7$(+#"&%#*4#*0#%&&
!"#".**")+60+6(+)",-+"(*+,-G16/+-)0,6/,9*+"
!"#".**")+60+6(+)",-+"-2H02;'("
!"#".**")+60+6(+)"8,-H")';&*+G(%;&%16/"
)0-1(01-+"
>.;#<?$4&03#$(&$*"&7$(+#"&%#*4#*0#%&
?"#"N%)0")+60+6(+)",-+"(*+,-G16/+-)0,6/,9*+"
?"#"N%)0")+60+6(+)",-+"-2H02;'("
?"#"N%)0")+60+6(+)"8,-H")';&*+G(%;&%16/"
)0-1(01-+"
B*03#$(&.(&+*0.;53#4#&%#*4#*0#%"
A"#"B+<G6%"(*+,-G16/+-)0,6/,9*+")+60+6(+)""
A"#"B+<G6%"-2H02;'(")+60+6(+)"
A"#"B+<G6%"8,-',6(+"'6")+60+6(+")0-1(01-+&
C&D&B*$93#&4.&%0.(#&
>4(.*)&3$*)2$)#&0.*7#F%&;#%%$)#&03#$(3F&
!"#":0-%65"8+-9)"'6=%-;",(E%6)"
!"#":0-%65",/8+-9)",6/",/F+(E8+)"
!"#".((1-,0+"<%-/)",6/"&2-,)+)"
'("+*$(F&3$*)2$)#&0.*7#F%&;#%%$)#&
$"#I2$4#3F"
?"#"L-/'6,-H"8+-9"(2%'(+"
?"#"L-/'6,-H",/8+-9)",6/",/F+(E8+)"
?"M"":%;+<2,0",((1-,0+"<%-/)",6/"&2-,)+)&
J+;+4#"&3$*)2$)#&;$K#%&;#%%$)#&2*03#$(&.(&
"+L0234&4.&2*"#(%4$*"&
A"#"D';'0+/"8+-9"(2%'(+"
A"#"D';'0+/",/8+-9)",6/",/F+(E8+)"
A"#"O6,((1-,0+"<%-/)",6/"&2-,)+)"
C&D&B*$93#&4.&%0.(#&
>#*4#*0#&132#*0F&
A.-0#$93#&9#)+**+*)&$*"&#*"+*)&
?"#"4+5'66'65",@+;&0)"0%"'60-%/1(+"0%&'("
?"#"76/'65"&-%8'/+)")%;+")+6)+"%="(*%)1-+"
?"#"3,-0)",-+"6%0",--,65+/"'6"02+"9+)0"%-/+-"
>.;#<?$4&@.02%#"&$*"&03#$(&4.5+06&%.;#&
"#4$+3%&
?"#"$%&'("')")%;+<2,0"(*+,-"
?"#":%;+"/+0,'*)")1&&%-0"02+"0%&'("
?"#"31-&%)+"')")%;+<2,0"(*+,-"
E.("&8?.+0#&
83#$(&9#)+**+*):&;+""3#:&$*"&#*"&
!"#"4+5'66'65"'60-%/1(+)"0%&'("
!"#"76/'65"&-%8'/+)"(*%)1-+"
!"#".**"&,-0)",-+",--,65+/"'6"02+"9+)0"%-/+-"
'()$*+,$-.*&
1.02%#"&$*"&03#$(&4.5+06&(#3#7$*4&"#4$+3%&
!"#"$%&'("')"(*+,-"
!"#".**"/+0,'*)")1&&%-0"02+"0%&'("
!"#"31-&%)+"')"(*+,-""
!"#$%&
H"$54#"&@(.;&>4#7#&T#?$&D&<<<UV;%U.()&
C&D&B*$93#&4.&%0.(#&
A2;#(.2%&#((.(%&+*&)($"#G3#7#3&0.*7#*-.*%"
PIQJ"#"B-+R1+60*H"'6,((1-,0+"&16(01,E%6"
PIQJ"#"B-+R1+60*H"'6,((1-,0+"(,&'0,*'K,E%6"
PIQJ"#"B-+R1+60*H"'6,((1-,0+")&+**'65"
PIQJ"#"B-+R1+60*H"'6,((1-,0+"5-,;;,-&
>.;#<?$4&$002($4#&2%#&.@&)($"#G3#7#3&
0.*7#*-.*%&
AIJ"#"N%)0*H",((1-,0+"&16(01,E%6"
AIJ"#"N%)0*H",((1-,0+"(,&'0,*'K,E%6"
AIJ"#"N%)0*H",((1-,0+")&+**'65"
AIJ"#"N%)0*H",((1-,0+"5-,;;,-"
H002($4#&2%#&.@&)($"#G3#7#3&0.*7#*-.*%&&
?I?J"#".((1-,0+"&16(01,E%6""
?I?J"#".((1-,0+"(,&'0,*'K,E%6"
?I?J"#".((1-,0+")&+**'65"
?I?J"#".((1-,0+"5-,;;,-"
8.*7#*-.*%&
C&D&B*$93#&4.&%0.(#&
B*03#$(&<(+4#(=4.5+0&0.**#0-.*&
A"#"D'@*+"%-"6%"'68%*8+;+60"<'02"02+"0%&'("
A"#"D'@*+"%-"6%"=++*'65"
A"#"B+<"%-"6%"/'-+(0")0,0+;+60)"
>.;#<?$4&03#$(&<(+4#(=4.5+0&0.**#0-.*"
?"#":%;+"'68%*8+;+60"<'02"02+"0%&'("
?"#":%;+")0-%65"=++*'65)"
?"#":%;+"/'-+(0")0,0+;+60)&
83#$(&<(+4#(=4.5+0&0.**#0-.*"
!"#":0-%65"'68%*8+;+60"<'02"02+"0%&'("
!"#":0-%65"=++*'65)"
!"#">'-+(0")0,0+;+60)&
/.+0#&
84
;&<($+5%&.=&1(+-*)&>8?(+0&
!
!
!
!
!
!
&
&
&
&
&
&
!
!
!
!
!
!
!
!
!
!
!
!
!
!
!
!
!
!
!
!
!
!
!
!
1.("&23.+0#&
!"#$%&
4#*5#*0#&678#*09&
'()$*+,$-.*&
2.*:#*-.*%&
/.+0#&
Writing Process Planning Matrix

Effectively engaging students in the writing process to produce quality pieces of work requires
planning. The Writing Process Planning Matrix is a tool to assist teachers in the development
of a series of lessons to guide students through the writing process. Different organizers and/or
strategies can be used to support each stage of the writing process (many of them can be found
in the Writing Resource Guide). It is also important to consider the specialized skills and
Language Arts standards that apply to different tasks or purposes. These skills can be
developed through mni-lessons in the context of the students writing. Sharing/Conferencing is
an important part of the writing process to help students improve their work. The Martix
guides teachers to consider which stages of the writing process students will conference and
with whom. Finally formative assessment throughout the writing process can help shape
quality student writing. By completing the Writing Process Planning Martix, teachers can
outline the tools/strategies they will use to supporting each stage of the writing process,
specialized mini-lessons, the facilitation of sharing, and the assessment instrument that will be
used to evaluate the writing.
85
86
4))())5(%6*
./$"&%#0*
1-%2("(%3&%#*
+&%&*,())-%)*
!"#$%&'(")*
7-8&39*
:(%"(9*
!"#$%&'(")*+,,'(-.%%#%&'/.0"#1'
87
2=*>??())@*
F)&%#*9&$.-#*
*
C(("**
*
*
N*L"&;%#*,"$&8*M01"&?*
B*!"#$%&'$;-%*
*
/011.(*2$3*
4.-5*67$"8*
9"$5*:$1(.*6$3;-%*
<))$=*!"#$%&'("*
A(E0(%?&%#*
C(("**
*
/011.(*2$3*M01"&?*
!"#$%&'(")*
$%+*,--.)*
2&%&*
:())-%)*
A7$"&%#*
>))())J(%8*
,-3&?Q*C(")-%$.*<R3("&(%?(*
N*L"&;%#*,"$&8*M01"&?*
O*A(%8(%?(*4.0(%?=*
*
A80+(%8I,($?7("*
*
A(%8(%?(*A8"0?80"(*
A7-5B,(..*
N*L"&;%#*,"$&8*M01"&?*
B*6-%P(%;-%)*
*
AJ$..*K"-03*
G0-8$;-%*2$"H)*
C0%?80$;-%*C$D("%*
A7((8*
K(%"(Q*S$""$;P(*
N*L"&;%#*,"$&8*M01"&?*
*
L7-.(*6.$))*
*
!"#$%&'(")*+,,'(-.%%#%&'/.0"#1'
88
2>*?@@())A*
I>%-%>G)*
H"-3("*K-0%)*
H0%@C0$:-%*
L0-C$:-%*2$"5)**
*
H(("**
IG$..*F"-03*
;4-.(*9.$))*
IC0+(%CM,($@4("*
*
N*;"&:%#*,"$&C*D01"&@*
*
/011.(*2$3*
,4&%5&%#*2$3)*
6"$7*8$1(.*9$3:-%*
;;<*
=))$>*!"#$%&'("*
I033-":%#*+(C$&.)*
H(("**
IG$..*F"-03*
;4-.(*9.$))*
IC0+(%CM,($@4("*
/011.(*2$3*D01"&@*
N*;"&:%#*,"$&C*D01"&@*
!"#$%&'(")*
$%+*,--.)*
2&%&*
8())-%)*
I4$"&%#*
?))())G(%C*
,-3&@O*H&(@(*-P*8&C("$C0"(Q*K-%BR&@:-%*H&(@(Q*
=E(%CQ*H(")-%$.*=S3("&(%@(Q*(C@T**
N*;"&:%#*,"$&C*D01"&@*
*
H(("**
IG$..*F"-03*
;4-.(*9.$))*
IC0+(%CM,($@4("*
*
I(%C(%@(*IC"0@C0"(*
,"$%)&:-%B?@:-%B
6(C$&.*
D(E&)&-%*F$G(*
2>*?@@())*D(E&)&-%*
H.$%*
I4-7*,(..*
N*;"&:%#*,"$&C*D01"&@*
*
H(("**
IG$..*F"-03*
;4-.(*9.$))*
IC0+(%CM,($@4("*
*
H0%@C0$:-%*
9-GG$)*
H0%@C0$:-%*H$J("%*
I4((C*
N*;"&:%#*,"$&C*D01"&@*
*
H(("**
IG$..*F"-03*
;4-.(*9.$))*
IC0+(%CM,($@4("*
*
9&C$:-%)*
9&C$:-%*2$@4&%(*
F(%"(O*!3&%&-%M?"#0G(%CQ*U%P-"G$:E(M
=S3.$%$C-">Q*K$""$:E(*
!"#$%&'(")*+,,'(-.%%#%&'/.0"#1'

Writing Process

Uploaded by

Copyright:

Available Formats

Writing Process

Uploaded by

Document Information

Original Description:

Copyright

Available Formats

Share this document

Share or Embed Document

Sharing Options

Did you find this document useful?

Is this content inappropriate?

Copyright:

Available Formats

Writing Process

Uploaded by

Copyright:

Available Formats

WRITING

Aloha WEIS Teachers,

The complete Literacy Resource Guide is available at http://www.cds.hawaii.edu/writingmatters/

Kkau Mea Nui Team

LEARNING TO WRITE Kindergarten through Second Grade

Continuum of Teacher Support

LEARNING TO WRITE: PREWRITING AND PLANNING

Prewriting involves analyzing a writing situation, as well as generating, collecting,

Why should children learn to prewrite?

How does prewriting fit into the Common Core?

Prewriting Strategy Explanation: Draw-Label-Caption

What is Draw-Label-Caption? Draw-Label-Caption is a prewriting strategy that can help

Because Draw-Label-Caption permits students to draw and label pictures, it is easy to

Draw-Label-Caption and the Six Traits of Writing

Connecting Draw-Label-Caption and the CCSS

L.K.1f Produce and expand complete sentences in shared language activities.

Sample Scope and Sequence for Draw-Label-Caption in K-2

Draw-Label-Caption for Expository Writing in Kindergarten

Common Core Standards

W.K.2 Use a combination of

Draw-Label-Caption for Expository Writing in Kindergarten

I can write and expand a

Common Core Standards

Draw-Label-Caption for Descriptive Writing in First Grade

Common Core Standards

W.1.2 Write informative

Draw-Label-Caption for Descriptive Writing in First Grade

I can read first grade

I can follow rules for

Common Core Standards

Draw-Label-Caption for Narrative Writing in Second Grade

Common Core Standards

W.2.3 Write narratives in

I gave balloons to my auntie for her

Prewriting Strategy Explanation: Bubble Map

Bubble Maps and the Six Traits of Writing

Bubble Maps and the CCSS

Sample Scope and Sequence for Bubble Maps in K-2

Bubble Maps for Expository Writing in Kindergarten

I can select an idea

I can use drawings

I can write and

I can capitalize the

Common Core Standards

W.K.2 Use a combination of

Bubble Maps for Expository Writing in Kindergarten

Common Core Standards

Bubble Maps for Expository Writing in First Grade

Common Core Standards

Bubble Maps for Expository Writing in First Grade

I can work with peers

I can find the main

I can use past-tense

I can write simple

Common Core Standards

Bubble Maps for Expository Writing in First Grade

Common Core Standards

Bubble Maps for Persuasive Writing in Second Grade+

I can express and