Govt.

College University Lahore

Assignment Topic: Descriptive Writing

Submitted By: Hassan Khalid
Roll#: 231-BH-ECO-14
Department: Economics

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Table of Contents

Definition:...................................................................................................................................................4
 Elements of Descriptive writing:.........................................................................................................4
 1) SENSORY DETAILS:.......................................................................................................................4
 2) FIGURATIVE LANGUAGE:.............................................................................................................4
 3) A DOMINANT IMPRESSION:........................................................................................................5
 4) PRECISE LANGUAGE:...................................................................................................................5
 5) CAREFUL ORGANIZATION:..........................................................................................................5
 A) CHRONOLOGICAL ORDER:......................................................................................................6
 B) SPATIAL ORDER:......................................................................................................................6
 C) ORDER IMPORTANCE:.............................................................................................................7
 The Structure of a Descriptive Writing:..............................................................................................8
 A) INTRODUCTION:.........................................................................................................................9
 Explain the context:....................................................................................................................9
 State Your Thesis (Dominant Impression):..................................................................................9
 B) BODY:..........................................................................................................................................9
 INCLUDE THOUGHTS AND FEELINGS:..........................................................................................9
 ARRANGE THE DETAILS INTO A LOGICAL ORDER:.......................................................................9
 C) CONCLUSION:..............................................................................................................................9
 Examples.............................................................................................................................................9
 SHOW, DON'T TELL:.......................................................................................................................10
1. Use dialogue:.................................................................................................................................10
2. Use sensory language:..................................................................................................................11
3. be descriptive................................................................................................................................11
4. be specific, not vague....................................................................................................................12
 HERE ARE SOME EXAMPLES OF DESCRIPTIVE WRITING TO SHOW HOW IT IS:........................12

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 Definition: DESCRIPTIVE WRITING is the clear description of people, places, objects,
or events using appropriate details. An effective description will contain sufficient and
varied elaboration of details to communicate a sense of the subject being described.

 The primary purpose of descriptive writing is to describe a person, place or thing in such

a way that a picture is formed in the reader's mind. Descriptive writing creates a picture

of person, place, thing, or event. Description tells what something looks, smells, sounds,

tastes, or feels like.

 Elements of Descriptive writing: Good descriptive writing is comprised of

five elements; Sensory Details, Figurative Language, Dominant Impression, Precise

Language, and Careful Organization

 1) SENSORY DETAILS: Good descriptive writing includes many vivid, sensory

details that paint a picture and appeals to all of the readers’ senses of sight, hearing,

touch, smell, and taste when appropriate. Descriptive writing may also paint pictures of

the feelings the person, place or thing invokes the writer.

 2) FIGURATIVE LANGUAGE: Good descriptive writing often makes use of

figurative language to help paint the picture in the readers mind. There are many ways

to use figurative language, and it is a talent that should be practiced until perfected.

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  3) A DOMINANT IMPRESSION: When you plan a descriptive writing, your focus

on selecting details that help your readers see what you see, feel what you feel, and

experience what you experience. Your goal is to create a single dominant impression, a

central theme or idea to which all the details relate-for example, the liveliness of a street

scene or the quiet of a summer night. This dominant impression unifies the description

and gives readers an overall sense of what the person, place, object, or scene looks like

(and perhaps what it sounds, smells, tastes, or feels like). Sometimes but not always

your details will support a thesis making a point about the subject you are describing.

 4) PRECISE LANGUAGE: Good descriptive writing uses precise language. Using

specific words and phrases will help the reader “see” what you are describing. If a word

or phrase is specific, it is exact and precise. The opposite of specific language is language

that is vague, general, or fuzzy.

 5) CAREFUL ORGANIZATION: Good descriptive writing is organized. Some ways

to organize descriptive writing include:

 Chronological (time), Spatial (location), and Order importance

 A) CHRONOLOGICAL ORDER: Chronological order is a way of organizing ideas in

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 the order of their occurrence in time. We use this pattern to tell stories, relate historical

events, and to write biographies. We also use it to explain processes and procedures.

 Time clues of all kind like: First, second, third, Next, soon, after, Afterwards, Initially,

In the end, At the same time, In the future, Before , During, Later, Finally, etc. used in

chronological order.

 B) SPATIAL ORDER: Spatial order refers to space or layout, it is used for describing a

location. To use spatial order, you describe the setting in some sort of order based on

location. You can go in a clockwise direction, or start at the front and go to the back, or

go from top to bottom. So long as you list things in some kind of logical order.

 For example, if you write a paragraph about your local mall, you could organize the

paragraphs and begin at the entrance, then describe each section of the mall until you

got to your favorite store. Write your topic sentence. Now, list everything in that setting

in order, depending on where it is. Make each item in your list into a complete sentence,

check for correct punctuation and spelling, and you've got your paragraph.

 C) ORDER IMPORTANCE: The sequence of events that have the most value

(importance) to the least. Puts the most important detail at the beginning or at the end.

An example of this is an Eid presents list that your parents make you write starting with

the item you want the most to the least. It is best for describing objects and people.

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  To show order of importance following kind of words are uses: Amazingly, But

the most important, Equally, Increasingly important, Even more striking,

Strikingly, The most, The major, The main, Primarily, Best of all, Foremost,

One reason is that, Most significantly etc.

 The Structure of a Descriptive Writing: The structure of descriptive

writing is as follows:

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 A) INTRODUCTION: Grab your reader's attention quickly with an interesting

introduction. Begin with a mysterious statement, A funny story, or a question. Then

clearly identify the subject of your essay.

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  Explain the context: Provide your readers with background information that will help

them understand.

 State Your Thesis (Dominant Impression): This helps to organize your essay into

something more than a random.

 B) BODY: To help your readers visualize your subject. Engage all of the senses not just

sight in your essay. Tell how things smell, taste, sound, and feel. Remember that factual

details such as size or age can help paint a picture for your readers.

 INCLUDE THOUGHTS AND FEELINGS: Tell your readers your thoughts and

feeling about your subjects.

 ARRANGE THE DETAILS INTO A LOGICAL ORDER: Use Spatial order,

Chronological order, or Order of Importance.

 C) CONCLUSION: To remind your readers why the subject you are describing is

important. Restate your dominant impression to close with flourish.

 Examples: We've all heard the phrase "Show, don't tell" but may not know what it
means or how to do it. It's one of those elusive things that seem impossible to capture,

even harder to get down on paper. However, there are a few tricks.

 SHOW, DON'T TELL: I know those words can be frustrating. You might not know

exactly what “show, don’t tell” means. Or you might believe that you are showing when

you’re really telling.

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  First, you need to know the difference between TELLING and SHOWING. Telling is

abstract, passive and less involving of the reader. It slows down your pacing, takes away

your action and pulls your reader out of your story.

 Showing, however, is active and concrete; creating mental images that brings your story

-- and your characters -- to life. When you hear about writing that is vivid, evocative and

strong, chances are there's plenty of showing in it. Showing is interactive and

encourages the reader to participate in the reading experience by drawing her own

conclusions.

 Here are some tips that will help make your writing more vivid and alive for your

reader.

1. Use dialogue:
 This is probably one of the first things. Dialogue allows the reader to experience a scene

as if they were there. Instead of telling the reader your mom was angry, they can hear it

for themselves:

 “Justin Michael,” mom bellowed, “Get in here this instant!”

 Dialogue can give your reader a great deal about character, emotion and mood.

2. Use sensory language:

 In order for readers to fully experience what you’re writing about, they need to be able

to see, hear, taste, smell and touch the world around them. Try to use language that

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 incorporates several senses, not just sight.

3. be descriptive
 I’m sure everyone remembers learning to use adjectives and adverbs in elementary

school. When we’re told to be more descriptive, it’s easy to go back to those things that

we were taught. But being descriptive is more than just inserting a string of descriptive

words. It’s carefully choosing the right words and using them sparingly to convey your

meaning.

 The following example is from a short story I wrote.

 Telling: He sits on the couch holding his guitar.

 There’s nothing wrong with that sentence. It gives the reader some basic information,

but it doesn’t create an image. Compare that sentence with this:

 Showing: His eyes are closed, and he’s cradling the guitar in his arms like a lover. It’s as if

he’s trying to hold on to something that wants to let go.

 The second example takes that basic information and paints a picture with it. It also uses

figurative language—in this case, the simile “cradling the guitar in his arms like a

lover”—to help create an image.

 When using description, it’s important not to overdo it. Otherwise, you can end up with

what I call “police blotter” description. For example:

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  He was tall, with brown hair and blue eyes. He wore a red shirt and jeans, and a brown

leather jacket.

4. be specific, not vague

 Frequently, people will turn in essays with vague, fuzzy language. I’m not sure if they

think this type of writing sounds more academic, but all it really does is frustrate the

reader.

 Instead of writing, “I had never felt anything like it before in my entire life,” take the time

to try and describe what that feeling was, and then decide how best to convey that

feeling to the reader. Your readers will thank you for it.

 HERE ARE SOME EXAMPLES OF DESCRIPTIVE WRITING TO SHOW HOW

IT IS: #1: TELL: "You are such a jerk," he said angrily.

 SHOW: "You are such a jerk." Dan slammed the phone book shut and threw it at the

couch. The pages ruffled open, the names inside seeming exposed and vulnerable

against the stark black leather. Dan got to his feet, moving so fast his chair skidded

against the floor and dented the new drywall.

 #2: TELL: The room was perfect. She saw it and was immediately transported back to

her childhood because it had all the elements she remembered.

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  SHOW: She threw open the wide oak door and stepped into a past from twenty years

ago. The bedroom she remembered, down to the last detail. Pink candy-striped walls

with white trim. A thick white shag carpet, two plush maroon velvet chairs flanking a

silent fireplace. An enormous canopy bed, draped with a sheer white veil. Linda pressed

a hand to her mouth. What were the chances? Another room, just like the one she'd

had, years ago, before she'd grown up and grown out of the one space that had brought

her happiness.

 #3: TELL: Rapping at the door, Elaine made her presence known to the people inside the

house.

 SHOW: Elaine formed a tight fist with her right hand and pounded on the unforgiving

oak. They'd hear her, or she'd break her hand letting them know she'd come to call.

 #4: TELL: He got up and punched his friend in a fit of anger.

 SHOW: His face grew as red as crimson. Sucking in a deep breath, he stood up. His right

fist flew up and swung swiftly across the cheeks of his friend.

 #5: TELL: The food was spoilt.

 SHOW: There was a thin film of moisture on the cooked rice. When I ate a scoop of it, it

tasted like a mixture of salt and soured milk.

 #6: TELL: My brother is talented.

 SHOW: My brother modifies car engines, competes in classroom speeches,

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 tournaments, and analyzes chess algorithms.

 #7: TELL: The house was run-down and dirty.

 SHOW: The flowers in the front garden were long dead, the grass was knee-high and

paint was flaking from the window frames. As Sarah pushed open the front door, a

rotten smell hit her. There were patches of damp mold creeping up the walls. The

floorboards were uneven and creaky.

 #8: TELL: Sarah was a pretty girl, with blue eyes and blond hair.

 SHOW: Mary's blue eyes glistened with joy, her blond hair bouncing with each step.

 #9: TELL: Ammad is a wonderful person.

 SHOW: Ammad is always there when anyone needs him. He's the first to arrive with a

casserole when someone is sick the first to send a note of encouragement to those who

are troubled, the first to offer a hug to anyone.

 #10: TELL: My mornings are crazy. It’s hard to get to school on time!

 SHOW: I awaken to the deafening buzz of my alarm clock at 7:00 a.m. I hit the snooze

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 button three times before dragging my drowsy self to the bathroom. i brush my teeth,

take a shockingly cold shower, and blow dry my wet hair in record time. After trying on

nearly every outfit in my closet, I run down the stairs, and inhale my oatmeal breakfast. I

toss my books in my backpack, grab my coat and gloves, and finally race out the front

door. I arrive at the bus stop just as the bus drives away.

 #11: TELL: Sara was nervous about her piano recital.

 SHOW: As Sara stood backstage, she could feel her knees go weak. She wiped her palms

against her velvet dress to remove the sweat that continued to collect. Her heart was

pounding like keys on a piano as she went over the song she would be playing in her

head.

 #12: TELL: The girls were excited.

 SHOW: Giggles and screams filled the arena. The soft curls were now damp with

perspiration and the anticipation of the event. They held tight to each other in a mock

effort to contain themselves. Arms flailed upward, and voices echoed in varying tones.

The moment was here.

 #13: TELL: The room was vacant

 SHOW: The door opened with a resounding echo that seemed to fill the house. Cob

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 webs once attached flowed freely in the air as the open door brought light to a well-

worn floor. The light gave notice to the peeling paint on the walls and to the silhouettes

once covered by pictures. The new air gave life to a stuffiness that entrapped the room.

Faded and torn white sheets covered once new furniture now drowning in dust.

 #14: TELL: He is angry.

 SHOW: Sitting at his desk, his jaw tightened. His eyes flashed heat waves at me. The

words erupted from his mouth, "I want to talk to you after class." The final hiss in his

voice warned me about his feelings.

 #15: TELL: The morning was beautiful.

 SHOW: Behind the mountains, the sun peaked brightly, ready to start a new day. The

blue sky remained silent yet showed signs of sadness. The wind whispered through the

trees as the cheerful sun rose. The birds sang gently by my window as if they wanted to

wake me up.

 #16: TELL: The coffee was enjoyable.

 SHOW: She cradled the mug in both hands and leaned her head over it in the rising

steam. Pursing her lips, she blew softly over the clouded surface and let her eyelids drop.

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 Her shoulders rose slightly as she breathed in, and she hummed with her head low. I

lifted the tiny porcelain pitcher and poured a brief rotating arch of white into the black

depths of my own cup. She opened her eyes, and we looked at each other across the

table without speaking.

 #17: TELL:

 SHOW:

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 #19: TELL: Sidra’s mother was angry. She hit Sidra. It was very painful

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  SHOW: Sidra’s mother was angry. She hit Sidra. It was very painful. She had moved so

quickly, her hand going back and across in one movement, slapping his left cheek with a

crack that silenced the room. The pain hung hot on his cheek.

 #20: TELL: Sarah was frightened. She thought someone was behind her.

 SHOW: Sarah was frightened. She thought someone was behind her. It seemed a

shadow had fallen over her. But there was no shadow. Her heart had given a great jump

up into her throat and was choking her. Then her blood slowly chilled and she felt the

sweat of her shirt cold against her flesh.

 #21: TELL: I went hunting, and I shot a deer.

 SHOW: My cousin, Scotty, and I were having a good time. Fall could be felt around us.

The sun was shining on the leaves making the beautiful fall colors light up the mountains

where we had gone searching for the deer. After having been taught several useful

hunting techniques, I was eager to put them to good use. “Scotty, did you hear that?” A

nod from him confirmed that an animal was close by. The look in his eyes and the

second nod confirmed that he had seen it about the same time I had: less than ten feet

away stood a beautiful buck that must have been at least eight points. Raising my gun, I

was careful to aim with accuracy and good technique. I could feel my finger slowly

moving the trigger. The bang from the gun’s barrel filled our hears. “You got him,

Logan!” exclaimed my cousin. Walking over, I was all smiles.

 #22

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  #23: TELL: I was really nervous

 SHOW: I could feel my heart beating fast. Sweat dripped down my forehead. I went as

white as a ghost. I noticed my hand shaking. And then it started…

 #24: TELL: It was the fastest slide I have ever been on.

 SHOW: Sitting atop the giant water slide, I had a picturesque view of the aqua colored

water around me. You have never really seen the ocean, until you see it from an Arial

view. Even though, I wasn’t exactly in the air, I was elevated enough to have a pretty

spectacular view. Upon finally starting to move, I could feel myself gaining speed and the

distant water was coming closer and closer. The giant smile on my face turned into

laughter at about the exact moment that SPLASH! The steep drop had propelled me into

the water.

 #25: TELL:  I left work feeling happy. It was a left work feeling happy. It was a good day.

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  SHOW: When I left my office that beautiful spring day, I had no idea what was inspiring
day, I had no idea what was in store for me. To begin with, everything store for me. To
begin with, everything was too perfect for anything unusual to be too perfect for
anything unusual to happen. It was one of those days when happen. It was one of those
days when a man feels good, feels like speaking toe man feels good, feels like speaking
to his neighbor, is glad to live in a country his neighbor, is glad to live in a country like
ours, and proud of his government. Like ours, and proud of his government. You know
what I mean, one of those one of those rare days when everything is right then and
nothing is wrong.
 #26:

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 #28:

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 #30:

 #31: SHOW: He gazed at the pile of rubble which used to be his house.  His chin wobbled
his eyes filled with tears. He sat down as they slowly started to slide down his face.
 #32: SHOW: His hands were damp as a wet towel.  His face turned red.  His fists were
clenched when he saw his house getting bombed.

 #33: SHOW: The movement of his legs were like jelly.

 #34: SHOW: A huge smile was etched on his face, his eyes were alight with joy.
 #35: SHOW: The lump in my throat was expanding minute by minute
 #36: SHOW: The girl was grinning ear to ear when she saw her parents.

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  #52: SHOW: The raindrops attacked the galvanized roof and the windows rattled. We
huddled under the bed and held each other tightly.
 #53: SHOW: Barley looked at Clive, who had one of those English faces that seemed to
have been embalmed while he was still a boy king, at his hard clever eyes with nothing
behind them, at the ash beneath his skin.

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  #54: There was a knock at the door and Winkle came in, an eternal student of fifty-
seven. He was tall but crooked, with a curly grey head that shot off at an angle, and an
air of brilliance almost extinguished… He sat with his knees together and held his sherry
glass away from him like a chemical retort he wasn’t sure of.
 #55: The gates opened electronically and beyond them lay mounds of clipped grass like
mass graves grown over.  Olive downs stretched towards the sunset. A mushroom-
shaped cloud would have looked entirely natural.
 #56: The best of good books have purposeful slowdowns in pace from time to time
because the author knows that readers, like athletes, must catch their breath.
 #57: They went to New York to see Cats. They both enjoyed it very much. When they
tried to go home, their flight was delayed because of the snow so they stayed another
night and decided to see the musical again.
 #58: Kate rubbed her eyes and willed herself to keep them open.
 #59: New buds were pushing through the frost.
 #59: Charlie wore dark glasses and was accompanied by a seeing-eye dog.
 #60: Sheena has three piercings in her face and wears her hair in a purple Mohawk.
 #61: At ease,” James called out before relaxing into the Captain’s chair
 #62: When the recess bell rang, I grabbed my chess set and dashed to freedom, eager to
win the daily tournament of outcasts. I didn’t look, but I knew Lucinda was watching, I
could feel her curly locks swaying as her head tracked me. Of course, I tripped in the
doorway. Tennis shoes and sandals stepped around me as I scrambled after pawns and
bishops. And there was Lucinda, waiting for me to notice her. She smiled, lifted her shiny
patent-leather shoe, and slowly, carefully ground her heel right on the head of my white
queen.
 #63: “Our coach is a former champion wrestler, but now he is overpaid, overweight, and
over forty.”
 #64: He’s drenched in sweat, his knuckles are white, he’s on the other side of the Ping-
Pong table, and I’m about to bring him down.
 #65: Ping-Pong may look like a relaxing pastime, but for experts, winning the game
requires manual dexterity, agility, and endurance.

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  #66: On the shelf in my bedroom is a first-place football trophy, and a first-place chess
trophy.  Above my bed on one side is the head of a four-point buck I shot when I was 16,
and on the other side is a framed photo of me winning “Junior Chef of the Year.”   Before
you ask me to play cards, you should have a full wallet.  If your son wants to play
marbles with me, he should know I play for keeps.  If your daughter starts crying while
I’m playing house with her, I won’t stop until she looks me in the eye, and admits, “You
won!”
 #67: That stranger had been scanning the room, and this time, Sally thought his eyes
flickered in her direction. Wait — was that a half smile? Had he just put his hand on his
heart? Or was he just brushing something off of his shirt? That shirt looked soft. Sally
smiled.
“He’s kind of cute,” her roommate giggled.
 #68: Whenever puppies in the pet store window distracted me from our walk, Fido
flattened his scruffy ears, growling. But he always forgave me. As his sight faded, the
smell of fresh air and the feel of grass would make him try to caper. Eventually, at the
sound of my voice, his tail thumped weakly on the ground. This morning, I filled his
water bowl all the way to the top–just the way he likes it–before I remembered.
 #69: A saw and hammer dangled from his belt and an adze was hooked into it, one
thumbnail was black, and when he bowed she saw several long wood-shavings caught in
his curly hair.

 #70: They gripped each other and the tweed of his jacket was rough under her cheek.
His hand came up to stroke her hair; she smelled leather and horses on the skin of his
wrist. He was trembling.

 #71:  Show us how James stands at the bar, give us what he says, show us Anna looking
up into his face and seeing love in his smile... and then show us what James says, in the
gents toilet, about making sure this girl - "What's her name? Anna?" - doesn't discover
his address.

 #72: The morning air was bitter ice in her nose and mouth, and dazzling frost lay on
every bud and branch.
 #73:
          She kicked open the screen door, letting it slam against the wall as she dashed
outside.  Down the steps and into the yard she flew.  Grabbing the first rock in her path,
she hurled it back toward the house.  It crashed through the living room window with an
explosion of shattered glass.”

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  #74: Mary opened her present quickly.  She took out a doll.  It was the one she’d always
wanted.  She thanked her parents, and happily started to play with it.
 

 #75:  knew it would be a bad day at the grocery store when I parked my bike in the
parking lot.  Cars were everywhere.  All the parking slots were used up.  There were cars
on the sidewalk, getting tickets from a smiling policeman, of course.  When I walked
through the automatic doors it was like a circus, or a zoo.  Everyone was running to get
their foods, like the earth would blow up.  When I took a step, I got run over by a large
woman with a full shopping cart and four children tagging along.  She yelled, “Move it or
lose it, Bucko!”
          All I wanted was a pack of gum
 #76: George flung open the door and threw his backpack in the corner by the
coatrack.  "Mom, I'm home!" he called out.
Mom stuck her head out of the kitchen.  "Do you want a baloney sandwich?" she asked.
 #77: "No, I'm not hungry right now," George said.  Why did Mom always try to get him to
eat, anyway?  If he wanted a sandwich he'd make one.  And it wouldn't be baloney
either.  It would be pepperoni and mustard!

 
 #78: Good morning my teachers and friends. Today I want to show and tell you about
this teddy bear. This is my teddy bear. Everything is pink so its name is Pink Post pet. I
like it the most because it is pretty and lovely. It has pink hair, pink nose, pink ribbon and
brown eyes. My mother gave it to me on my birthday. That was two years ago. I keep it
in my bedroom. When everything bores me, I hug and play with Pink Post pet. It makes
me feel better. Before I finish I want to tell you Pink Post pet is very important to me."
 #79: "Hello! My name is Chana nard. Today I want to show and tell for you about my
stamp album. I collect stamps because I like stamps very much and find them beautiful
and interesting to look at. My father bought it for me. My father bought it at Central
Department Store. Stamps come from envelopes. Every month I get new stamps. Stamp
collecting is important for me."
 #80: "Hello everybody. Today I want to show and tell for you. These are Harry Potter
books. My mother bought them for me for my birthday at Se-Ed Book Center in Central
City Bangna. I like them very much because they are expensive and they are very, very
fun. They were about one thousand baht. I read them every Sunday and Saturday."

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  #81:

 #82: Baby makes days shorter, nights longer, home happier, and love stronger."
 #83: We met the teacher today too!! I almost cried on the way out I was so happy. His
classroom is perfect, his teacher is perfect. I am so excited.
 #84: My son had chosen to talk about Uno....which he was really into. It was really easy
for him to speak about as he knew the rules and how to play, by heart. So may be
something which she really likes.....it would be easier for her to talk about.
 #85: Valek took a gray rock off his desk and hurled it toward me. Stunned, I froze as the
stone whizzed past and exploded on the wall behind me." 
 #86: You avert your eyes from the flickering light as you are led down the main corridor
of the dungeon. Thick, rancid air puffs in your face. Your bare feet shuffle through
puddles of unidentifiable muck."

 #87: The moon is out and reasonably bright.

 #88: The scene is either outdoors or near a window or open door.
 #89: Something significant has happened to cause glass to break and be left where it
fell.
 #90: Mary's heart thrummed when his fingers slid down her neck.

 #91: Pink petals fluttered from the trees like cotton-candy snow in the spring sun.
 #92: Jimmy slapped the smoke alarm, flung open the door, and tossed the flaming pan
out into the rain.

 #93: Jesse's fingertips brushed the grass. The delicate blades, hardy from recent rains,
felt like eiderdown.

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  #94: Marie stepped into the kitchen, faltering at seeing the deep blue murals on the
walls and ceiling.  She shivered.  The dark color absorbed the morning sunshine that
filtered through frayed curtains.
Drawn to the sweet odor rising from the sink, she stepped close.  She ran a finger over the
porcelain; still smooth after all these years.
"Damn!"  Marie yanked her hand out of the sink.  She picked at the Teflon flakes embedded in
her index finger.
"Stupid frying pan."
 #95: His eyes are closed, and he’s cradling the guitar in his arms like a lover. It’s as if he’s
trying to hold on to something that wants to let go.
 #96: 'She shivered and pulled her coat more tightly around her.
 #97: "The gun's trigger felt cold on Mary's finger. It was harder to pull than she'd
imagined: all those films where the hero quickly pulls out his revolver and shoots the
villain, all those films were a lie. Shooting someone required effort. She pressed hard,
until the trigger obligingly gave way, and - bang! - her boyfriend was no more." 
 #98: He slammed the change return switch and shook the machine, demanding it either
give him his money or the orange soda he selected
 #99: He ate a full rack of lamb, three roasted chicken, a dozen eggs, seven dinner rolls,
and a pint of ice cream. He ordered another chicken and some short ribs.
 #100: His eyes bulged, mouth dried and sweat broke across his forehead. His racing
pulse demanded his body into action. It was Adrenaline. Or maybe just survival instinct
kicking in. It didn't matter as his legs failed him knocking him down on his backside .

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