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The list was promoted by Giants2008 via FACBot (talk) 00:25, 18 November 2024 (UTC) [1].[reply]

Aston Martin VH platform

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Nominator(s): 750h+ 07:57, 24 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Here is the platform that is the basis for what is currently all of my featured articles—the DB9, Rapide, Vanquish and the Lagonda Taraf—the VH platform. Shorter than other lists, I believe it meets the criteria. Enjoy! 750h+ 07:57, 24 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Drive-by comments
  • Please take a look at MOS:COLHEAD.
  • Also, choose either one of "Body style" or "Model name" as the header cell for each row. -MPGuy2824 (talk) 11:26, 24 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Addressed the first concern. No-one raised concerns about the latter in my previous FLC? 750h+ 12:28, 24 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    It got overlooked, I think. The usual way is just to have one header cell, but you can have 2 row headers just like you can have two column headers, though they'd both need scope=row and right now the name column cells don't. What would happen if you have two is a screen reader will read out "Grand tourer DB9" or "Sports car Vantage" as the identifier for the row- so if you're on the Introduction year column row 1 and hit the down arrow, it will read out "Sports car Vantage, Introduction year, 2005". If you're okay with that, then just add the rowscopes to the name column; I'd personally go with just having the name column as the header as it's unique to the row, but either way is fine. --PresN 21:27, 24 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    @PresN: is this better? 750h+ 04:11, 26 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    Made a small change, but yep, looks good. --PresN 14:04, 26 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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Comments

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  • " comprising the DB9, followed by the Vantage, DBS, Rapide (produced until 2020), Vanquish (produced until 2018)." => " comprising the DB9, followed by the Vantage, DBS, Rapide (produced until 2020), and Vanquish (produced until 2018)."
  • "They implemented modifications " - who is "they"? The last sentence referred to Bez, a singular person.
  • As the tables are sortable, you need to link terms every time they are used. Currently "grand tourer" is linked only once in the first table and not at all in the second.
  • The abbreviation for the "Ref." column should probably be "Refs." as every row has more than one
  • That's it! -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 11:05, 28 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    All done @ChrisTheDude:. Thanks for the review! 750h+ 11:21, 28 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 11:33, 28 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by CosXZ

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Support from Airship
  • Could we have more details on the differences between the "generations"?
    • It would also be nice if the tables below say which generation(s) each car belonged to.
      • Done the latter. Unfortunately i can't find much on the former,
  • The VH platform was developed to be flexible; every vehicle that uses it incorporates bonded and riveted aluminium to reduce weight. The phrase before the semicolon doesn't seem to be that relevant to the phrase after it, unless "flexible" refers to the lack of stiffness in the materials, and not design flexibility in systems as I had previously assumed?
    done
  • Do the different types of "Body style" have any impact on the VH platform? If not, why do they need a column in the table?
    thought it was important. body style is how the car looks, and they are probably the largest difference between the vehicles
  • Do we know anything about Aston Martin's future plans for the vehicles?
    the platform, and every car that uses it, is discontinued.
    Would be nice to have that explicitly mentioned. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 11:50, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
    @AirshipJungleman29: done. 750h+ 12:45, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Otherwise nice work. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 11:10, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@AirshipJungleman29: thanks for the comments. 750h+ 11:36, 29 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Wolverine

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Comments will be on their way shortly. Wolverine X-eye (talk to me) 03:54, 8 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Wolverine X-eye, just a friendly ping. Sometimes a reviewer saying they will be back will hold up a nomination from being promoted. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 17:38, 15 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • Excluding the V12 Vanquish, and the DB11, the latter of which was manufactured from September 2016 and used an all-new platform

In note 1, the first comma and second "the" seem unnecessary

  • The first vehicle to use the VH platform was the DB9, which constituted the platform's first generation. The Vantage, introduced in 2005, used the second generation of the platform, along with the DBS and DB10, introduced in 2007 and 2014, respectively. The third generation of the platform was used by the Virage in 2011, the 2012 facelift of the DB9 and the 2012 Vanquish. The Rapide and Lagonda Taraf used the fourth generation, an extended version of the platform.[8][9] The cars have since been discontinued. The Virage and DBS both ended production in 2012,[10][11] followed by the DB10 in 2015.[12] The DB9 and Taraf were discontinued in 2016,[13] [14] while the Vantage and Vanquish ended production in 2018.[15][16] Isn't it weird that all these sentences start with "the"?
    • no, not really. i don't really see what else to use
  • Manufacture of the Rapide ended in 2020. Manufacture doesn't sound right. Maybe "The manufacturing" or "production" would be better
  • Can you provide a page range for your bibliography? Because you are not using the whole book.
    • I don't really see why, since other articles don't.

That's all I got, excellent work!!! Once you're done, please give me a ping, and if you are interested please drop some comments at Wikipedia:Featured list candidates/List of pholidotans/archive1. I would also like to apologize for giving this review so late on. Life has been something else. Thanks anyway for your enduring patience. Wolverine X-eye (talk to me) 17:46, 15 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Wolverine X-eye: done. will take a look at your article soon. 750h+ 00:19, 16 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Support Nice work. Wolverine X-eye (talk to me) 04:30, 16 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments (source review)

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  • Per WP:BOLDAVOID, I think you either need to drop the bold or rewrite so that the title can be restated (almost) exactly.
  • Note 1 is confusing. You basically make a definitive statement in the text, but then qualify that in a hidden note that your statement isn't 100% true.
  • Image review: all images are freely licensed.
  • Source review: Passed
    • All reference formatting appears consistent.
    • All references are appropriate and reliable for what is being cited.
    • Spot checks on 16 different sources matched what was being cited.

750h+ nice work! « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 17:38, 15 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Gonzo fan2007: done. thanks for the review. 750h+ 00:23, 16 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Support « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 21:03, 16 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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