Talk:Rye/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) 09:20, 4 May 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: PCN02WPS (talk · contribs) 16:05, 20 July 2024 (UTC)

Will review as part of WP:GARC. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 16:05, 20 July 2024 (UTC)

Many thanks! Chiswick Chap (talk) 17:26, 20 July 2024 (UTC)

Lead and infobox

• "weeds, and provides abundant" → remove comma (WP:CINS)
  • Done.

• "staple food in the Middle-ages" → taking from our article on the subject, should be "Middle Ages" from what I can tell, with caps and no hyphen
  • Done.

• "Around half of world production is in Europe" → Maybe "Europe produces half of the world's rye" or "Around half of world rye production takes place in Europe"? This is more personal preference, I suppose there isn't anything wrong with it as written but I prefer the alternatives for flow
  • Done.

Origins

• "Russian рожь rožʹ" → maybe "and Russian рожь rožʹ" since you're concluding a list?
  • Done.

• "dates, and identifications based solely" → remove comma
  • I think this one's correct: inconsistencies are only in dates; the id isn't inconsistent but narrowly based.

• "Roman naturalist Pliny the Elder" → you can add "The Roman naturalist" to avoid a WP:FALSETITLE, but this is not a necessity
  • Done.

Descriptions

• "It is composed of many" → "It" is a little ambiguous here
  • Fixed.

Cultivation

• Here, "Central" and "Eastern Europe" are capitalized but the directions aren't capitalized in the lead; I think capitalizing is correct but it should be consistent nonetheless
  • Fixed in lead.

• "can tolerate pH between 4.5 and 8.0" → Do you think a link to pH would be appropriate?
  • Linked.

• "Rye can thrive in subzero environments" → I would recommend specifying temperature here, since the last numerical concept being talked about was pH
  • Fixed.

Production and consumption

• "2016 was $186M" → I don't think there's a super compelling reason to abbreviate this from "$186 million", ditto for "$30.1B"
  • Spelt out.

• The last paragraph gets a little choppy with the sentences, though this isn't anything super major
  • Edited.

Nutritional value

• No notes.
  • Noted.

Uses

• "traditional Falun red paint" → does "Falun" need caps here?
  • Yes, Falun is a placename.

• "chromosomes, and are used" → remove comma
  • Edited.

In human culture

• "tar, and may end in tips" → remove comma
  • Done.

• "different animals; such" → reads better to me as a comma instead of a semicolon
  • Done.

Nice work, as always. That's what I found. Your patience is much appreciated! PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 13:23, 31 July 2024 (UTC)

Many thanks! Chiswick Chap (talk) 13:40, 31 July 2024 (UTC)

Spotchecks look good and I'm happy with the changes, looks good to me! PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 13:56, 31 July 2024 (UTC)

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