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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted by Laser brain via FACBot (talk) 12:40, 21 December 2018 [1].

Brie Larson

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Nominator(s): Krimuk2.0 (talk) 15:02, 9 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

If you dislike pop culture icons but are a fan of cheese, dolls, architecture, rice, or latex, then there's plenty for you here. If not, I sure won't be clapping for you. Krimuk2.0 (talk) 15:02, 9 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Source review - spotchecks not done

  • Quotes within quotation marks should use single quotes
  • FN95 is missing author, same with FN92, check for others
  • FN4: author name doesn't match source, check for others
  • Channel names shouldn't be italicized
  • Website names generally should be italicized
  • Archives and retrieval dates aren't needed for GBooks links - the links are courtesy
  • Don't be overspecific with book publication dates
  • Edition statements aren't part of the title
  • FN30 and others: not all Vulture articles are from New York, check that things are properly attributed
  • FN32 is incomplete
  • FN52: publication title doesn't match source, check for others
Nikkimaria, this seems fine to be. Krimuk2.0 (talk) 07:40, 11 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]
That link gives the publication title as Slant; the citation gives the publication title as Slate. Nikkimaria (talk) 14:12, 11 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • FN73: date doesn't match source, check for others
  • FN107 has an odd author format
All done. I hope I haven't missed anything. Krimuk2.0 (talk) 07:40, 11 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Nikkimaria, all done now, hopefully. Krimuk2.0 (talk) 17:21, 11 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]
'Fraid not. I realize it would be time-consuming to check each ref, but that might actually be the best approach in this case - it seems for whatever reason there is a significant rate of errors or omissions. Nikkimaria (talk) 19:30, 11 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Nikkimaria, I went through each of the references and have fixed the errors. Cheers! Krimuk2.0 (talk) 07:27, 12 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Aoba47

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  • I have a question about this sentence (She was mostly homeschooled, which she believed allowed her to explore innovative and abstract experiences.). How can one be “mostly” homeschooled?
  • For this part (be featured in the Untitled Avengers film), I am uncertain if “Untitled” needs to be capitalized.

Wonderful work with the article. I could not find much that needed improvement. Surprisingly, I have never actually seen any of Larson’s work (film or television), but I still very much enjoyed reading this article. I hope you find this review to be helpful. I will support this once both of my nitpicky comments are addressed. Have an excellent rest of your weekend! Aoba47 (talk) 07:16, 11 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the kind words, Aoba47. In response to your first comment, I'd say that it's a bit tricky. This source says that she was "home-schooled for much of her childhood" and this says "mostly homeschooled" as well. My best guess is that she briefly attended public school but I couldn't find any mention of it anywhere. Krimuk2.0 (talk) 07:40, 11 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you! :) Krimuk2.0 (talk) 07:27, 12 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Image review

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Thanks, Aoba. :) Krimuk2.0 (talk) 06:25, 15 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Hawkeye7

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Support ALooks of the required standard to me. I did find one curiosity:

  • "A journalist for Slant Magazine magazine"?
Hawkeye7 (discuss) 10:24, 24 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you, Hawkeye7. :) I've removed the duplicate "magazine". Thanks for pointing it out. Krimuk2.0 (talk) 11:44, 24 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Moise

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  • “She was next hired for the ABC sitcom Hope & Faith, but she and some other cast members were dropped after the unaired pilot.” One would expect all, not just some, cast to be dropped if the pilot was cancelled. Can you clarify this in the article?
The show wasn't cancelled. Some of the cast were replaced after an unaired pilot, which is quite common during pilot season. I've tweaked the sentence. Does it read better now? Krimuk2.0 (talk) 07:28, 1 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • “blaming it on filmmaker's inability to typecast her.” Is that “filmmakers’ “? Even so, I found this sentence not clear. Could you clarify it?
She said, "I wasn't a perfect package of one thing. I wasn't pretty enough to play the popular girl, I wasn't mousy enough to be the mousy girl, so I never fit in". Is there a better way to say this? Krimuk2.0 (talk) 07:28, 1 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Changed to club DJ. Krimuk2.0 (talk) 07:28, 1 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Looking forward to the rest of your comments, Moisejp. :) Krimuk2.0 (talk) 07:28, 1 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, Krimuk. I'll get back to this very soon. In my first read-through and a half, not much jumped out at me in the prose, but I'd like to at least finish my second read-through. If I have time I hope to do spotchecks of a few sources, or if I don't have time I'll limit the scope of my review to the prose. Moisejp (talk) 06:51, 3 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I support on prose. It is very well written and engaging. Moisejp (talk) 05:54, 6 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you so much, Moisejp. :) Krimuk2.0 (talk) 06:26, 6 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
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