Talk:Shang-Chi and the Legend of the Ten Rings/GA1
Latest comment: 10 months ago by BigLordFlash in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: BigLordFlash (talk · contribs) 16:29, 2 January 2024 (UTC)
Hello! I'm gonna take this one. If you have any questions, just talk with me! BigLordFlashtalk 16:29, 2 January 2024 (UTC)
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1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. | I left some comments below. |
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1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. | I left some comments below. |
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2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. | All good here. |
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2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). | All good here. |
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2c. it contains no original research. | All good here. |
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2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism. | All good here. |
| 3. Broad in its coverage: | ||
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3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. | It addresses all the main aspects of the topic. |
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3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). | True. |
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4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. | It's neutral. |
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5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. | It seems to be stable. |
| 6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio: | ||
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6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. | Nothing wrong here. |
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6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. | All media are relevant and have suitable captions. |
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Plot:
This allows some of the Dweller's soul eaters to escape, and the Ten Rings join forces with the villagers to fight them.
- Why the Ten Rings joined forces with the villagers to fight the Dweller's soul eaters?
Comment: In order to jointly deal with the threat of the soul eaters, I did some CE around the area to provide what I believe was additional context. Feel free to ping me back if unresolved. -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 23:22, 2 January 2024 (UTC)
Cast:
Liu was knowledgeable in taekwondo, gymnastics, and Wing Chun, and learned and trained in tai chi, wushu, Muay Thai, silat, Krav Maga, jiu-jitsu, boxing, and street fighting for the film.
- Excessive use of the word "and".
Development:
(...) and began looking at Asian and Asian-American filmmakers to potentially direct the film. The studios' goal was to explore Asian and Asian-American themes presented by Asian and Asian-American filmmakers,(...)
Excessive use of the expression "Asian and Asian-American".
Fixed -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 23:22, 2 January 2024 (UTC)
Choreography:
(...) rising and rising to almost ridiculous levels".
- It doesn't look good.- Fixed - Favre1fan93 (talk) 23:00, 2 January 2024 (UTC)
Visual effects:
40 to 50 of its 168 shots were mostly digital, with the environment requiring digital pieces for the bus, buildings, and people.
- It doesn't look good starting a sentence with a number.
Theatrical:
in over 4,200 theaters, with 400 IMAX, over 850 in premium large format, 1,500 3D, and 275 in specialty D-Box, 4DX, and ScreenX.
- I think the way it's written is strange (400 IMAX, 1500 3D, etc.).
Critical response:
decision to give the "second-tier" Shang-Chi the same "over-the-top treatment" as major Marvel heores had broadened Marvel Studios'
- It's "heroes".- Fixed - Favre1fan93 (talk) 23:00, 2 January 2024 (UTC)
Important topics:
- Streaming viewership information should be in "Reception" section.
- Per MOS:FILM#Home media, that info should be in that section. - Favre1fan93 (talk) 23:00, 2 January 2024 (UTC)
- WP:DUPLINK all over the article (mostly in "Accolades" section).
- I've removed the DUPLINKS as highlighted by the script. The repetition within the Accolades table is acceptable. - Favre1fan93 (talk) 23:00, 2 January 2024 (UTC)
BigLordFlashtalk 18:17, 2 January 2024 (UTC)
- I've responded to a few of the notes above. - Favre1fan93 (talk) 23:00, 2 January 2024 (UTC)
- @BigLordFlash: Hey there! I've also (hopefully) resolved some of the issues above. Let me know if there's any outstanding issues. :) -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 23:22, 2 January 2024 (UTC)
I think I'm going to pass this one. You really did a great job! Congratulations! :D BigLordFlashtalk 13:16, 3 January 2024 (UTC)
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