Talk:Pocahontas (1995 film)/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ssven2 (talk · contribs) 06:42, 4 February 2018 (UTC)

I will review this article. Thank you.  — Ssven2 ^{Looking at you, kid} 06:42, 4 February 2018 (UTC)

Comments

• "The musical score was written by Alan Menken, with songs written by Menken and lyricist Stephen Schwartz." — Can be rephrased "The musical score was written by Alan Menken, who also wrote the songs with Stephen Schwartz."
• "The project went quickly into development concurrently with" — Scrap "quickly".
• "Meanwhile, Disney studio chairman" — add "then" between the comma and Disney.
• Wikilink Indian at first instance.
• "produce another sweepingly romantic animated film" — "sweepingly" sounds like fluff. Scrap it.
• Just state Susannah Grant by her full name whenever you have written about her and mention Joe Grant by full name also. Best for now.
• "who provided the character's speaking voice.[59][60][61][62]" — Too many references cluttered. Link at least two of them to each of the artistes.
• "worked on the film." — Is this sourced?

-It's in ref 40

• Pomeroy's statement borders on WP:QUOTEFARM. Trim it by explaining portions of the quote in your own words.
• "Finding feathers difficult for Redfeather to gesture with," — Would be better if you rephrase this sentence to avoid repetition of "feather" at such close proximity.

-"Redfeather" is a proper name, so the sentence isn't repetitious.-MagicatthemovieS

• "Both wanted to use the keyboard, but they arrived at a working strategy." — What kind of strategy?
• "The Blu-ray was first released in Australia in February 2012 and followed by a May 30 European release and an August 21 American release." — The Australia and European releases don't seem to appear on the citations given (109 and 110).

I'll perform the source review tomorrow, MagicatthemovieS.  — Ssven2 ^{Looking at you, kid} 11:00, 6 February 2018 (UTC)

Source review

• The NYT reference title is incomplete. Wikilink NYT too.
• Wikilink BOM.
• Turner Classic Movie should be "Turner Classic Movies". Write the title as per the url (year and comma between Pocahontas and the included). De-italicise it.
• Wikilink Chicago Sun-Times.
• blu-ray.com should be Blu-ray.com. Include the date of publication.
• "p. 15-16" should be "pp. 15–16".
• Rewrite the reference as "Ziebarth, Christian (December 19, 2005). "A Conversation with Eric Goldberg". Animated Views. Archived from the original on May 24, 2015. Retrieved May 24, 2015." Do the same for Mike Gencarelli reference no 48.
• Fee required should be Subscription required.
• The reference is not found despite having been archived. Here is the link. 2014-08-26 should be August 26, 2014.
• Good enough.
• "pp. 240-1" should be "pp. 240–241".
• "rec.arts.disney" isn't a reliable source. Try some other URL.
• Wikilink "The Philadelphia Inquirer".
• Fee required should be Subscription required for all Highbeam references.
• Animation World Magazine redirects to Animation World Network.
• "pp. 220" should be "p. 220";
• Wikilink Los Angeles Times.
• "pp. 196-97" should be "pp. 196–197".
• "p. 506–7" should be "pp. 506–507".
• Mention the date as "July 31, 1995" for the Disney Adventures reference.
• Reformat reference number 111 properly
• Reference number 118 is a Box Office Mojo one, not Amazon.

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. Has an appropriate reference section:

   B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall: Passed, my queries were met and solved by the nominator.

   Pass or Fail:

Better now.  — Ssven2 ^{Looking at you, kid} 16:10, 9 February 2018 (UTC)