Talk:2022 NCAA Beach Volleyball Championship/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 18:26, 19 August 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Mostly copy changes to make here. Quality stuff. Ping me when ready. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 19:11, 19 August 2023 (UTC)

@Sammi Brie: Thanks for taking on this review. I think I've addressed all the main points below. Let me know if you still have any concerns and I'll try to address them promptly. Regards. Bennv123 (talk) 02:28, 20 August 2023 (UTC)

Copy changes

Encouragement: Consider adding captions to all tables. They make the tables scannable for screen reader users. See MOS:DTAB.

Lead

• The biggest tournament upsets came from the tenth-seeded Georgia State Panthers, who beat the seventh-seeded Grand Canyon Antelopes and the second-seeded TCU Horned Frogs, before being knocked out of the elimination bracket by the Loyola Marymount Lions. Not an appositive; remove the comma after Frogs
  •  Done
• the Seminoles suffered a loss to USC in the winners bracket, before overcoming the LSU Tigers, Loyola Marymount Lions and UCLA Bruins in the elimination bracket to set up a rematch against the Trojans Remove comma after "winners bracket"
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• The final three days of the NCAA championship was attended by a live audience of 10,151, setting a new tournament record. should be "were", not "was", for the plural "days"
  •  Done

Background

• What does "flighted" mean? As someone unfamiliar with this format, I'm a little lost.
  • "Flighted" format here means that the players/pairs are ranked by ability and only compete against those of the same rank in other teams. The "ranks" are then known as "flights". (see definition #4b in merriam-webster.com). The sentence "In an NCAA dual, each team fields..." explains what the "flighted team-dual format" means here. To make that clearer, I combined the sentences as such:

Conversely, NCAA beach volleyball is played using a flighted team-dual format such that in an NCAA dual, each team fields five individual pairs who are ranked from No. 1 to No. 5 by skill level, and each pair plays a best-of-three-set match against their corresponding pair on the other team.

Does this sufficiently address your concern? Alternatively, I could add a footnote with the definition of "flighted".

Teams

• No. 5 and No. 2 seeds respectively Comma after "seeds"
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• Don't hyphenate "top six" here
  •  Done

Dual summaries

• Grand Canyon took an early lead with a straight-set victory at the top pairs flight, before Georgia State evened the dual with a three-set victory at the fourth flight. Remove comma before "before". This comes up a few times here.
  •  Done I think I've removed all instances of this.
• Meanwhile, Florida State was tied 2–2 in their dual against Cal Poly, when their No. 3 pairing of Anna Long and Kate Privett found themselves down 10–12 in the third-set tiebreaker of the deciding match. Remove this comma too. "Before" and "when" start dependent clauses; when second in a two-clause sentence, no punctuation precedes them.
  •  Done
• it was Kraft and Slater's first lost of the season that's "loss"
  •  Done
• Florida State had match points on both courts and their No. 2 pairing of A. Chacon and Fitzpatrick ultimately won their match first to close out the dual Comma after "courts". See User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences (CinS)
• The next round of staggered matches began and USC only needed one more pairs win You need a comma after "began". (CinS)
  •  Done
• "Gruelling" should be grueling, one L, in American English
  •  Done

Broadcast and attendance

• The opening single-elimination round on May 4, 2022, as well as the double-elimination rounds on May 6 were broadcast live on ESPNU. Complete or remove the appositive by adding a comma after 6 or changing "as well as" to "and".
  •  Done
• Hyphenate "seven-percent"
  •  Done

Spot checks

• 3: Since 2016, when the NCAA approved beach volleyball as a championship sport, it has become the fastest-growing collegiate sport in history. The 500% figure is in [2] (As of September 2020, there were 90 intercollegiate programs across the nation, and a 500% increase since 2011 (Next College Student-Athlete, 2020) Y
• 27: USC athletics report: sixth appearance, 32–1 record, Pac-12 championship Y
• 32: Volleyball Magazine article. This one is called a lot for the records of various teams; the USC and UCLA prior titles; USC's winning streak and loss to UCLA; seeds; LSU's record to the other five (only once have they broken through and beaten one of the five teams seeded above them) their 37 combined losses; and GCU as an independent. Y
• 45: Another highly used citation from the same publication. The quotes and facts in here all check out. Y
• 59: FSU match report. This is a dead link, so I changed its status, but the archive checks out. Both courts were at 14 points apiece when Alaina Chacon won the match for the Seminoles 15-9 with a big swing. White and Moon were up 14-10 when the final horn was blown. Y
• 64: In addition to Dorn, Slater, Graudina, Harward, Scoles, Ebertin, Villapando, Schafer, Scully, the Trojans honored graduate transfers Emily Hansen and Paige Hammons, and fifth-year senior Paige Dreeuws. They were all graduating seniors (Dorn having graduated in 2020). Y
• 70: ShowBuzzDaily report of ratings shows 117,000 and 123,000 viewers for the listed matches. Y

Earwig catches quotes and names of paired players that make five- or six-word strings.

Images

• There are seven images. The NCAA Beach Volleyball logo is below TOO. The flyover photo is a screenshot from a PD-USGov video. The others are a variety of CC-licensed images. Encouragement: Add alt text.

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