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DAY 13
Some people believe that zoos are cruel and to be closed.

But others think that zoos are important and animals
could be protected.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
❖1st Body paragraph: First view

❖2nd Body paragraph: Second view
2nd Body Paragraph
Moreover , these sanctuaries bear a paramount
importance in conserving animal species which are
under the threat of extinction in particular. For
instance , tigers and pandas are classic example for the
remarkable service that zoological researches have
carried out to protect the beings that are endangered
in their natural habitats. If these animals had not been
conserved in captivity , they would have disappeared
from the world a long time ago. Therefore , the
zoological gardens could obviously be ideal breeding
grounds for the animals that are on the brink of
disappearance.
Moreover , these sanctuaries bear a paramount
importance in conserving animal species which are
under the threat of extinction in particular.
Topic Sentence
For instance , tigers and pandas are classic example for
the remarkable service that zoological researches have
carried out to protect the beings that are endangered
in their natural habitats.
Example Sentence
If these animals had not been conserved in captivity ,
they would have disappeared from the world a long
time ago.
Supporting Sentence
( Conditional )
Therefore , the zoological gardens could obviously be
ideal breeding grounds for the animals that are on the
brink of disappearance.
Supporting Sentence
( Summarizing idea)
People who travel to another country to live , work or
study for a period of time often suffer badly from
homesickness.
Why is this ?
What are the best ways to reduce this problem?
However , this situation could be avoided by
implementing minor changes in the way children are
raised. Firstly , children should be taught to be
independent right from the age they start schooling.
Also , the children should be given the opportunity to
move out into the society of their own which will
enable them to distinguish between the good and the
bad by themselves. Secondly , the teenagers should be
encouraged to work part time to fund their tuition or
college expenses which is a common practice in
developed countries. However , on the contrary,
parents of families in poor families in poor countries
are in the habit of spoon-feeding their children in all
aspect.
However , this situation could be avoided by
implementing minor changes in the way children are
raised. Firstly , children should be taught to be
independent right from the age they start schooling.
Also , the children should be given the opportunity to
move out into the society of their own which will
enable them to distinguish between the good and the
bad by themselves. Secondly , the teenagers should be
encouraged to work part time to fund their tuition or
college expenses which is a common practice in
developed countries. However , on the contrary,
parents of families in poor families in poor countries
are in the habit of spoon-feeding their children in all
aspect.
Exercise 1
Some people say that the best way to improve public
health is by increasing the number of sports facilities.
Others, however, say that this would have little
effect on public health and that other measures
are required.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
❖ Hence , it would be beneficial to introduce a national
health policy , particularly at primary and high school
levels.
❖Consumption of healthy , nutrients and balanced diet
daily is as important as physical activities.
❖On the other hand, practice of various health
measures apart from sports would impose a significant
effect in upgrading the fitness of the general public.
❖It is also evident from research that getting an
adequate sleep is vital to maintain both physical and
psychological health.
❖If healthy eating habits are incorporated at a
grassroots level , it will have an enormous impact on
the improvement in public health.
Today’s schools should teach their students how to survive
financially in the world today. To what extent do you agree
or disagree with this statement?
_______significant shift in the ideology of education is

unlikely to take place soon, as the education system has
been in place for too long to be easily changed. ________ a
change of this scale would be costly, as teachers would have
to be trained and a syllabus for this potential subject would
have to be created. ________, in some countries,
___________Germany, a community subject is available in
which politics and finances are discussed. This leaves
students from Germany in a better situation to deal with
finances in their lives.
( Also , However , For example , This )
 (1)________, young people need freedom to make choices,
especially when it comes to their careers. Deep down, some
parents may want their children to choose prestigious
careers, or jobs that will impact society in some way. These
wishes are normal and not necessarily harmful.
(2)________, it can be problematic if these desires turn into
firm expectations. (3)________, offering a child freedom
does not imply that parents should be absent. Parents
should strive to foster open communication about career
decisions. (4)_______, if Tim’s aspirations do not line up
with his parents’ wishes, he may, (5) _______ fear that
approaching them could lead to judgement and
confrontation.
There are certain phrases we can
use to explain our ideas such as:
 That is to say…. (linking)
 In other words… (linking)
 This is because… (giving reasons)
 The reason is…. (giving reasons)
 As a result…. (describing result)
 As a consequence…. (describing result)
 Therefore…. (describing result)
Example 1– Women should be allocated a certain
percentage of roles, because to not do so discriminates
against them because of their gender. As a result,
women will be denied jobs, not because of their
intellect or skill, but simply because of their sex.
Females should be given a bigger share of jobs, because
women currently outperform males in most university
subjects. That is to say, those young women are just as
qualified as men, if not more, and should, therefore,
be given at least an equal share in the job market.
How to write examples
 For example, many businesswomen in Asia find it
difficult to get jobs as CEOs, despite having the same
qualifications as men.
 For example, in 2014 it was reported in The Straits
Times that only 9 of Singapore’s top 100 companies
have female CEOs, despite making up 50% of the total
workforce.

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DAY 13

Some people believe that zoos are cruel and to be closed.

❖1st Body paragraph: First view

_______significant shift in the ideology of education is

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