ALS444: ACADEMIC WRITING FOR RESEARCH

PARAPHRASING 1
Further Practices 2 - 4
Monday 20 April 2020 (2 – 4 pm)
FURTHER PRACTICE 2:

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1 In Malaysia, prices of certain essential The government are the one who controlled the Cooking oil is one of the price-controlled items
goods, such as cooking oil, are controlled certain necessary items expenses in Malaysia such in Malaysia.
by the government. as cooking oil.
2 If population is to grow, the birth rate must When the number of citizens is increasing, the There is population growth when the number of
be higher than the death rate. death rate must be lower than the birth rate. births exceeds deaths.
3 The candidate submitted his application at The applicant handed in his forms at last minute. At the last minute, the applicant handed in his
the eleventh hour. forms.
4 The Olympic Games began more than Even though the Olympic Games started 20 Women were not allowed to take part in the
2,000 years ago in Olympia, Greece: centuries ago, women still not allowed to take part Olympic Games which were first staged 20
however, women are forbidden to in the events. centuries ago in Olympia, Greece.
participate in the events.
5 Pictures that showed the brutality of war The daily night news displayed the scenes of the Millions of TV viewers watched scenes of the
entered the living room of millions of TV brutal war on million people TVs. brutal war on the news every night.
watchers on the nightly news.
6 Institutes of higher education should revise Colleges and university shall reconsider to reflect To meet current needs, colleges and universities
their curricula to reflect contemporary current needs by improving their curriculum. have to improve their curriculum.
needs.
7 Mood-influencing drugs may be useful for Mood-enhancing drugs are harmful if used for Mood-enhancing drugs may be used to treat
treating certain illnesses but are dangerous other intentions even though it is effective on some ailments; however, they are harmful when
if used for other purposes. treating a particular disease. misused
8 “The Green Revolution” of the 1960s World food output had risen after “The Green World food supply had risen due to the
increased global food production by Revolution” of the 1960s announce the high- introduction of genetically enhanced crops
introducing high-yielding varieties of crops. yielding varieties of crops. during the 1960 to 1970 period of “The Green
Revolution”.
9 The Indians who lived in Peru before the The Indians who lives in Peru are apart of the Before America was discovered by the
discovery of the New World by Europeans Incan culture before they were exposed to the Europeans, Peruvian Indians were from the Incan
belonged to the Incan culture. New World by the Europeans. culture.
10 According to research, hypertension is Based on a research, person who has diabetes According to research, the chances of getting
about twice as prevalent in patients with disease are likely to have a high blood pressure high blood pressure are two times more among
diabetes as in those without the disease. than those who don’t. diabetics.

FURTHER PRACTICE 3:

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1 Locally produced party drugs are not only Yip Yoke Teng (2009) state that party drugs Yip Yoke Teng (2009) reports that locally made
cheaper and more easily available, but they which produced by local people and are likely to designer drugs are cheaper and easily obtainable,
also come mixed with a host of other be found around the neighborhood area contains however, they are made of a concoction of
harmful ingredients. – Yip Yoke Teng. dangerous elements. harmful substances.
“Party drugs that kill” , The Star N3, 23
November 2009.
2 Children of tense parents who lived in BBC News (2007) reports that children of Connie Wang in her 2007 article entitled
polluted areas were far more likely to have stressed parents that lives in a polluted area has a Stressed parents up asthma risk mentions that
asthma than friends in the same higher chance of getting asthma compared to kids of stressed parents living in polluted places
neighborhood. – BBC News. “Stressed other parents and children who live in the same had a higher chance of getting asthma compared
parents up asthma risk” , 21 July 2007. place. to their peers residing in the same locality.
3 Men live 8 to 10 years less than women. John Santrock (2001) writes that male survive John Santrock (2001) writes that females survive
They have higher rates of stress-related approximately a decade less than females. Male 8 to 10 years longer than males. This is because
disorders, alcoholism, car accidents and are more likely to develop stress-related illnesses, males are more prone to strain-related illnesses,
suicides. In sum, the male role is hazardous addicted to alcohol, involved in car accidents and consume more alcohol, make up a big percentage
to men’s health. John Santrock. commit suicides than women. In conclusion, the of traffic fatalities and are more likely to commit
“Adolescence”, 2001, McGraw-Hill, male role is dangerous to his well-being. suicide. In short, the male role is dangerous to
London. his well-being.
4 With the rising costs of airfares and the Most of parents with children prefer to travel by Kimbell (2008) points out that more parents with
increasing time it takes to get through cars for vacations just like the old days. This is toddlers are opting to travel by cars for vacations
security at the airports, more and more caused by the increasing price of air travel and just like in the good old days. This could be due
families are deciding to travel by car for also the time-consuming to passed the strict to expensive air travel as well as time-
their vacation. Most of us with young security checks at the airport (Jeff Kimbell, 2008). consuming, stringent security checks at the
children are returning to the days we grew airports
up in when we travelled to most places by
car with our parents. – “10 tips when
travelling by car with children” by Jeff
 Kimbell (2008).

FURTHER PRACTICE 4:
Original Text:
Women from north America, western Europe and Australia/New Zealand who travel internationally are likely to be astonished and chagrined by the
way they are regarded in some overseas cultures, where ideas of appropriate feminine behavior can be quite different. In some countries, a woman who
outranks a man may not be treated that way by the hosts; they may still speak to and prefer to negotiate with the male, assuming he is her superior. In Asian
countries and Muslim countries women may find they are omitted from substantive conversation or overlooked in negotiations because of designated gender
roles. Sometimes, a woman can establish greater credibility by clarifying her title, role and responsibilities in writing before personal visit, but even this step
wont guarantee the desired effect.
-Adler, R,. & Elmhorst, J.M. (2008). Communicating at Work: Principles and Practices for Business and Professions. McGraw-Hill: Singapore. (p.46)

Your Paraphrase Text:

According to Adler and Elmhorst (2008), Caucasian women who travel throughout the world are often surprised by the treatment they get from some
Muslim and Asian nations because female are different due to different cultures. Even though the female may outrank her accompanying male counterpart, it
seems that foreign hosts are likely to negotiate terms with the male counterpart than the female counterpart. Women can ensure better treatment and
credibility by informing the host of their job designation prior to such a visit, but even that may not ensure the expected results.

Sample Answer:
According to Adler and Elmhorst (2008), Caucasian women are often surprised by the treatment they receive from some Asian and Muslim nations
due to the differing cultural ideas of female roles. Foreign hosts may prefer to negotiate terms with the male counterpart than the female counterpart even
though the female may outrank her accompanying male. Women can ensure better treatment and credibility by informing the host of their job designation
prior to such a visit, but even that may not ensure the expected results.