Int/Ext. Treatment Fragment
Int/Ext. Treatment Fragment
Int/Ext. Treatment Fragment
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by Declan Foley
Introduction:
- E.L. Doctorow
This shallow criteria now defines and controls nearly all aspects
of a persons existence: their job, their friends, their wealth,
their accommodation and most importantly: their mating habits.
The film will deploy an ensemble cast but the central story will
revolve around the efforts of one man from this lower gene pool: a
struggling (and comically bad) poet and fierce proponent of
courtly love who finds himself completely infatuated with a
celebrity from the upper tier of society.
30/04/2011
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Treatment:
Two impossibly tall and stunning women are chatting and attempting
(needlessly) to perfect their appearance in a mirror that takes up
the entire wall.
As one of the women walks away from the mirror to her bag we cut
to an identical apartment.
However, the change in hair color and voice of the woman walking
an identical route to her bag should be the only change from
anything in the previous scene. Even the same shallow, obnoxious
conversation we heard continues as if they we have not cut to a
different location with different people.
The camera now begins to slowly pull away from the tv screen and
we see that we are now in a radically different apartment. In many
ways it is the complete opposite to the sterile luxury we were
beginning to become accustomed with.
His transfixion from the screen is broken when somebody calls his
name telling him that he has to get ready. It almost appears as if
they are getting ready for a bank raid. Three men along with our
protagonist stand-out as they are dressed in tuxedos. Around them
crowds are desperately trying to perfect their appearance. We see
someone attach a line of hair to someone’s forehead to try and
disguise a receding hair-line. We see another person step into
normal looking shoes which add an extra 4 inches to the man’s
height. All of them are having make-up applied to them.
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We also get a sense from this exchange that our protagonist does
not consider himself an equal to his companions. This comes out in
his overall disposition; we get a sense throughout the film that
he believes because he has the manners and graces and pretensions
of the higher-class that he almost believes he should be one of
them. We also get the sense that he is intellectually a few levels
above his peers; at least in the classical sense.
She has just won the prize. A bouquet of flowers are in her hands,
the sparkles from pyrotechnics float down behind her bathing her
in a golden haze. Bu t she doesn’t look q uite right, almost
artificial. We see the arrogant nods of approval from upper-tiered
men in the audience. Somebody from the TV studio remarks that he
has never seen her looking as radiant as she does tonight. She
tries to smile as much as her new face will allow it. She looks
pretty good.
(He drives them there, we see he’s using the excuse so he can go
see a bilboard of his muse. (They’re going to the after party of
show).Protagonist sneaks in to talk to the new swan - he met her
once. She acts like she no longer belongs to his world. Because
she doesn’t. He wonders if he can get her to arrange a meeting
with this model. She laughs at him.
The scene builds in intensity until they are thrown out of the
after-party and
The dialogue of all these different people merges into one. The
total lack of individuality as a city prepares for a night on the
town sings out in a united chorus. The same shallow aims and
shallower ambitions for a night. Striking in its nothingness.
Why don’t we get rid of you? What would we do with ourselves? We’d
all be normal. Nobody is tall or small, rich or poor, beautiful or
ugly but by comparison to others.