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    HL Essay Examiner's Comments Coversheet: English A: Language and Literature Example A: Identity - TV Series Criterion A

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    This document provides examiner comments for a student essay on the TV series "House" and the character of James Wilson. The examiner gives the essay high marks (5) in all four criteria. For criteria A and B, the examiner praises the clear presentation and convincing analysis supported by evidence and quotes from the show. For criteria C, they note the precise progression of the argument and illustration of points. For criteria D, the examiner comments on the varied, expressive, and accurate language used. The general commentary concludes this was a fine piece of writing that economically explained the character's unity and identity over time in a clear style.

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    This document provides examiner comments for a student essay on the TV series "House" and the character of James Wilson. The examiner gives the essay high marks (5) in all four criteria. For criteria A and B, the examiner praises the clear presentation and convincing analysis supported by evidence and quotes from the show. For criteria C, they note the precise progression of the argument and illustration of points. For criteria D, the examiner comments on the varied, expressive, and accurate language used. The general commentary concludes this was a fine piece of writing that economically explained the character's unity and identity over time in a clear style.

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    This document provides examiner comments for a student essay on the TV series "House" and the character of James Wilson. The examiner gives the essay high marks (5) in all four criteria. For criteria A and B, the examiner praises the clear presentation and convincing analysis supported by evidence and quotes from the show. For criteria C, they note the precise progression of the argument and illustration of points. For criteria D, the examiner comments on the varied, expressive, and accurate language used. The general commentary concludes this was a fine piece of writing that economically explained the character's unity and identity over time in a clear style.

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    HL essay example A: examiner‘s comments coversheet

    HL Essay examiner’s comments coversheet

    English A: language and literature


    Example A: Identity – TV series

    Criterion A Markband: 5
    Examiner’s comments:
    The first paragraph makes it clear that Identity will be explored through the character of James
    Wilson, and that the full series of House will be considered, quite an ambitious task. A very clear
    presentation is made about the character, and with each progressive revelation pertinent evidence,
    including quotations from the script, adds convincing detail and confirms the analysis.

    Criterion B Markband: 5
    Examiner’s comments:
    The claims about James Wilson, and his part in the interplay of scenes throughout time and space
    in the series of House are very well supported with a convincing set of details, and consistently add
    to the argument and our impression of how the character has been used dramatically. Not only
    does the essay add information and detail in each paragraph, but the significance of why these
    scenes and accompanying dialogue have been chosen by the writers of House, to maintain a
    stable character, is commented on with convincing judgments.
    Criterion C Markband: 5
    Examiner’s comments:
    The progression of the argument, the illustration and discussion of each point of assessment on the
    identity and stability of the character, the use of quotations, and the clarity of each paragraph, are
    precise and convincing. The concluding paragraph is rather brief, but it still manages to sum up the
    entirety of the essay and its argument. And in any case, the development speaks for itself, and we
    are left in no doubt by the end of the essay. References made in the footnotes to the series and
    episode numbers add authenticity.
    Criterion D Markband: 5
    Examiner’s comments:
    Language is very clearly and accurately used, with varying and expressive vocabulary, and the
    confident handling of complex sentence construction, with seamless incorporation of references
    and quotations. There are a couple of flaws, but nothing to detract from the overall assuredness of
    the discussion, which also avoids any inflated academic vocabulary, but simply concentrates on the
    perceptive unfolding and analysis of the argument, in the clearest of terms.

    General commentary
    A fine piece of writing. It manages to explain the unity and identity of the character through time, in
    an economical and efficient style, with no waste of words, and to make the TV series and its style,
    theme, and character clear even to those who did not watch it. That is a good achievement.

    Language A: language and literature assessed student work 1

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