Jew 1108

A the thief

Nighttime rises, the skyscraper lighting the city and the traffic light gleaming

around. In the street full of vehicles, the scarlet light burst out. The siren voicing

through the area and the group of armed people appears. At the front of them was a

huge historic monument which symbolized the knowledge. On the other side of the

museum was a building with the flat roof which one girl stand atop. The girl in her

left-hand holds the pocket watch, as the time pass, when the clock’s hands stop at

nine and twelve, the girl makes her move. The girl jumps from each building roof to Commented [1]: first word of a sentence

roof toward the scene full of a siren. As she nearly makes her way toward the

monument, the light beams to her vision.

“ It’s A! Everyone do as what we planned,” one man in a blue suit said. Commented [2]: first word of a sentence
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“ Don’t let that chick near the museum!” the guy equipped with full armor
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shouted.

A, the mysterious thief who was recently popular as the wanted criminal around Commented [5]: Is this story past or present? Be
consistent.
this time, was a thief who targeted the treasure from various place especially the

place where valuable things were kept safe. She was a thief who can steal even

when the security still presents and sometimes she would secretly give back the

stolen thing with unknown reason. Some of the witness said that what she might do it Commented [6]: Is this story past or present? Be
consistent.
just for fun or mess the police around. No one knows A’s identity as the information

that consists of A is that she is female and before her mission she would send the

mail to the police.

 A turns her face at the guy who shouted at her. She immediately recognized the Commented [7]: Check your subject/verb agreement.
Do this for the whole story.
armed man to be the leader of the group due to how his appearance was different

from other police. She thinks back before she come here and now she remember Commented [8]: Check your subject/verb agreement.
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that he was the inspector who show up in news in this morning where he hold her Is this story past or present? Be consistent.

mail that she send to them before she come to the monument. she then wave her

hand to the police.

“ Well, well, isn’t it the group of idiot police?” A speaks to the man. Commented [9]: Jew, check your entire story for sub. /
verb agreement problems
“ This time you even get some of the SWAT staffs for me. I appreciate your effort

Mr. Inspector,” A turns her body around in a circle as if she doesn’t care about

anything. As she speaks mockery to the police, behind her was someone just about

to grab her shoulder but then…..

“ But no matter how many people you have been gathered that doesn’t mean it

can stop me!” A expression change rapidly after the talked then the smoked misting

over the area. The group of men began to devastating when the smoke become

huge and huge. One by one the police fell into the dream as the smoke expanding

around.

“ As I say, don’t let her get inside!”, The inspector said. Commented [10]: don't capitalize words in the middle
of the sentence
The police use the huge fans to blows out the smoke but it too late. As they look

back at where the thief was targeted, the thief was already disappeared. Everyone

turns around to find out that the guards which guard at the front of building’s

entrance were rested on the floor with their eye closed while at the stalker side

they’re found out that it's a trap. The floor where the thief used to stand was left with

a dummy doll which resembling her as well as the speaker which stick at the doll’s

neck. Next to the doll lying a paper contains the word, “ bunch of Idiots “. After the

shocked, the inspector and his comrades without hesitating runs toward the
building’s entrance. As they run through the corridor, between the group was the

lying museum guards.

“ What happen here?!”, the Inspector said.

The group of police still continue to run toward the hallway, and as they continue

running, they saw the thief. As their vision got the thief, they get more work up as if

this time is their only chance to capture the thief.

“ This time we will stop you, you coward chick,” the inspector said while his

hands try to catch the thief.

“ wah… when did you guy get in here, I think I should improve my smoke

boom.”A said while her face turns behind her back while her feet run toward the light.

As this plays continues to spread through the museum’s hall, the thief then sighs

her face while face toward the police. But unfortunately, the thief’s ankle turn down.

“ Wahhhh------”

“ The thief trips, everyone gathers around her!” one of the police said.

The thief collapses while she running, and the police surround her. the police

thought that today is their chance to put to end to the thief acts. They thought that

this will end everything and bring backs peace to the city but not before that, she

giggled.

“ Do you think this chick will let herself end up in the jail?” the thief whose body

collapse speak while at her left hand throw out something.

The room began to fills with white smokes and the police one by one collapses

into the floor. Her plan successful as she pretends to accidentally trip her ankle in

order to gather the horde of police. As all of the police that gathers around her, her

plan was already success.

 “ I will …. not….let ...yo..” the inspector crawling on the floor tries to grab the thief

cloth.

the thief walks pass the inspector while she looked around the area. As the thief

walks forward she then enters one room, The room was filled with many lasers and

at the back of the room was the box full of codes and the iron door that looked

sturdy. The thief dance in the middle of the room filled with lasers elegantly. She

stops at the front of the door while she pulls out something behind her back. She

stuck it with the box and then the number began to come out.

“ 12LOM09RT73P” the group of letters comes out within one second and she

enters the code.

After long havoc, the thief finally faces with her treasure. The door open and in

the girl’s eye reflect the picture of one diamond lying on the table.

“ Ah hah there you are my little kid,” A said with the expression of motherhood.

the thief walks out from the room with her neck hold the sapphire color gleaming

diamond. The color of the diamond and her long azure hair beaming through the

area as if she was a noble then she speeding through the hallway with her neck hold

the stolen diamond. As she tries to escape from the room, she saw the museum’s

entrance.

“ Let get home before mom found out that I was not in the room” she speaks to

herself

But not before that, one knife flew to her as she about to open the door. Noticing

that, the thief dodge the knife and the thief stops for the moment. She looked around

and then she said:

“ Who's there?, show yourself” the thief speaks loudly.

 As A speaks finished, mysterious figure comes out approach from the shadow,

The figure wore a unique costume which resembling a vigilante. The figure’s body

was surrounded with vermillion color and at the lower of the body was a pure white

trouser. A suspects the vigilante to be male due to how the appearance base on

what he wore in her thought and as she looks at his hand she saw his both hand

grabs each four knives which resembling the throwing knife that use to stop the thief.

“ Hand over that diamond,” the man speaks to A.

After the man said his words, A began to think if he was also after the diamond.

She then puts away the stolen diamond into her back pocket.

“ First the police and this time the hero?, this isn’t some jokes that I could hear

this day” A speak mockery to the passerby man.

The mysterious figure standstill even he was taunted by the thief as if he didn’t

hear what she said.

“ Go play somewhere else this isn’t place for you to play your hero act” the thief

speaks to the mysterious figure while her feet walk forward to the entrance.

“ Then allow me to mak----- Waaaaaaaaaaaaah!” , A’s reaction burst around the

hallway as she nearly about to open the door, the figure throws knives toward the

thief. But luckily the thief dodge it. Her hand then began to bleeding.

“ Don’t ignore me” the man said

The man then began to walk toward the thief.

“Just give me that diamond and you can leave,” the man said

“ This isn’t funny, I warn you if you still get in my way, I shall show you no mercy -

------”, Before she could finish her words, the man points the knife at her face without

her noticing.
 “ You want to fight so badly?! prepared yourself, you have made me angry”, A

said as her hand moves behind.

A then pulls out her gun and shoots at the feet of the man that attacked her to Commented [11]: why?

make him step back from her. The man steps back from the thief but as the thief said

to the figure, the thief rapidly shoots at the figure mercilessly and then running

toward the figure. Her leg was about to fly into the figure’s face but luckily the figure

use it left hand to stop her violence kick. The figure throwing the thief into the ground

but the thief managed to stand back and the figure began to counterattack the thief,

began to throw knife around to decrease the thief’s speed.

“ Stop throwing knives around!” A said while her body dancing between the Commented [12]: Review the dialogue punctuation
rules. Do this for the whole story.
knives.

The thief doesn’t have a chance to payback the figure as it throwing the knife at

her without stop but in the end, the figure’s knives were outed. Giving the chance,

the thief shoots the gun at the figure while he was prepare his new knives.

“ Enough playing around, you asshole”, A said.

The thief pulls another gun from her back, now both of her hands holds twin guns

which paired each other, the bullets now shoots twice per second without at rest and

the figure feet began to retreat. As her opponent’s feet step backward, it ended up

cornered. As A still shoot at the man without hesitated, the man has already out of

lucks. Without any rest, the man trips his back and now he was rest with his front

body open widely. A then walk toward the man while she put her other gun in the

right hand back at the back of her body. After that, she loads her new bullets as she

was about to approach the man’s body

“ This may hurt but please sleep for while”, A said

 A step in the man’s body with her left leg then she moves her left hand that holds

the gun toward the man’s body.

“Good night”, the thief smile as she speaks.

The bullet flew toward the shadow’s head. As the bullet was about to drill through

the man’s body but………...

“ You too” , The man said.

Unnoticed by the thief, the man who was stumped by A’s leg throws the knife

which was scattered on the ground when he was tripped by A’s attack.

The sound burst as the knife and the bullet touch both foreheads, the sound

echo through the hall like an evening bell. After both knife and bullet land on the

ground.

“A..a.ah..” A was shocked from the attack from the man.

A slowly pulls her hand off and began to stand. A thought that she was about to

die but thank to her hat she survives. Back at the man side, he too survives from the

bullet thank to how A moved her leg out of his body to make him move again

but………

“eh”, A look at the man.

At the eye of A, she saw a man with handsome face with blue eyes and blonde

hair color while luckily for the thief, the man can saw only her azure hair which come

out from the hat after the knife flew it out.

“A foreigner?”, she said after saw the man’s head.

She confused for a moment after she saw a Caucasian man then…….. new

sound turn up. She turns her head toward where the sound comes from and she saw

the horde of the police that she was escaped from.

“ Get her!!!”, one police said.

 Surprise by the police, she without any hesitate go toward the entrance but……

as she opens it she was surrounded.

“ This will be your end,” the inspector said with the sound of someone who just

awaked.

Now A was surrounded by the police from inside and outside of the building. the

police then slowly walk toward her in circle formation in order to not let her move

from her position and capture her. As they about to get her, the thief again uses her

tactic to fool the police.

“ the smoke again?!”, the inspector said.

“Sorry but I don’t have time to play with you guy”, A said to the police.

A use the situation to escape the scene as the police still swarmed by the smoke

but that doesn’t the situation as the entrance was not blocked by the police. She runs

toward upstair of the building as she has no choice but before she goes up, she

looked for the man who attacks her but finds out that he was nowhere. she picked

her shooted hat that lay on the ground and began to escape. On the rooftop, she can

saw the whole city and many skyscrapers play the light. She then pulls out her

pocket watch.

“oh shit it the new day already”, she surprises while said.

She quickly makes her escape as she jumps from each rooftop of the building

and then she began to think what happen today. She thought about the man who

attacks her today during her mission. She thinks about how he can throw the knife so

accurate even in the dark place .

“Did he go easy on me?” she said to herself.

 From what A have observed from the last ambush, she thinks that she could die

if he after her life. He only throws the knife at her lower body as if he tries to avoid

serious injuries. Also even when he was about to get killed by her, he tries not to let

the knife get her face. A concludes that he might only after the diamond that she has

stolen from the museum and might no harm her if she gives back the stolen thing.

“ What a weirdo guy,” she said to herself.

She smile while she travel through sky.The next day later every news channels

report about what happened at the museum. The story becomes the topic of the

people and everyone talks about it.

“Again with the thief,” one girl with blue hair in high school uniform said as her Commented [13]: who is this girl?

I'm confused. Who is the boy that walks into class?

eye which looks like someone who works on the homework all night before the due

date of it look at the screen of her phone.

The girl with blue hair sits at her table playing her phone while waiting for her

class to start. She saw everyone in her room talk about the thief while sliding her

phone. The girl with blue hair smiled as she saw everyone talk about the thief.

“ The thief that you guy are talking about was none other than me from the

beginning. Praise me more if you want” the girl with blue hair who played her phone

said in low voice.

“Attention class”, someone said.

The front door of the class open and the teacher come in. Everyone in the class

stops gossiping and go back to their desk. Everyone prepare for the class as the

teacher come in and then.

“.....!” the girl who play the phone shocks as she saw someone come in the class.

“ Today we have new student,” the teacher said at the front of the class.
 The boy who just enter the room then take a leftover chalk from the front table

and began to write his name on the board.

“ My name is Williams………..Williams Whateley. You can call me Will” He said

to his classmate.

The teenage boy has blonde hair and blue eyes as well as his face which feature

the face of an actor. The girl who plays the phone shock to the boy appearance as Commented [14]: "the" means a specific one that has
already been mentioned
she has seen him somewhere. After the moment of his brief introduction to everyone Don't you mean "an actor"?

in the class, the girls in the classroom’s face turns red toward the oversea student.

except the blue haired girl who still shocks at the boy appearance.

“ Williams you can sit behind Araya,” the teacher said.

Will walk toward the blue haired girl who sit at the back of the room.The girl looks

at the transfer student as he sits behind her and then he said…………

“We meet again”, the boy said.