Assignment 1 A Erdal Resub Commented

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Assignment 1a
Focus on the Learner (Assignment 1a) 400 words
09/2011
In this part of the assignment, you will look at written work from a student and listen to a spoken sample from another student. You will analyse their language and find examples of errors.
Name:
ERDAL ERIKLI
1st sub 1. Identify the learners language needs
2nd sub
Correction of the 4th collocation in section 2 needs attention.
partial
2. Correctly use terminology to describe language systems
Look again at what you say about the second learners intonation Ive given some clues
3. Use written language that is clear, accurate and appropriate to the task
Yes / No PASS RESUBMISSION needed PASS ON RESUBMISSION FAIL ON RESUBMISSION OVERALL COMMENT
Date
1st marker
2nd marker
Yes
29/02/1
L. Aykanat
NB: If you need to resubmit an assignment, make sure you hand in the original version and the resubmitted version. Both versions need to be in your portfolio.
Assignment 1a
09/2011
Task 1 & 2 (Language Analysis)

Task 1
University Prep Class (writing sample) In task 1, you will look at a students writing and identify the errors. Look at the group profile and writing sample collected in response to an exam task for this class. Look at the parts of the text highlighted in GREEN (A-E), RED (i-v) and BLUE (14). For each of these categories: give the category a general name (Criterion 1) look at each error - say what the problem is and what the correction should be. You must use appropriate terminology to do this. (Criterion 2)
Task 2
Business English Class (spoken sample) In task 2, you will listen to a students spoken sample and identify the errors. Look at the group profile and listen to the spoken sample for this class (see Moodle http://moodle19.iti-istanbul.com/mod/resource/view.php?id=2578). Look at the categories given and find THREE examples of errors from the spoken sample. Also say what the correction should be. (Criterion 1) Before handing in your assignment, please proof-read it carefully. (Criterion 7)
Task 1- Writing sample from a student in the University Prep Class and group profile University Prep Class Level Type of class Group composition Reason for learning Learning background Motivation *A2 (Late Elementary) General English University preparation students To be able to listen to lectures, take notes and write academic essays Studied in private schools in different regions of Turkey. Used to translation and studying grammar. Mixed some learning so they can study in English, others pressured by their parents * CEF Level: A2 Can understand sentences and frequently used expressions related to areas of most immediate relevance. Can communicate in simple and routine tasks requiring a simple and direct exchange of information on familiar and routine matters. Common European Framework of Reference for Languages Council of Europe as cited in:

Learning characteristics / needs
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Good learning skills but often lazy, enjoy games and activities with movement
Thornbury, S. and Watkins, P. (2007) The CELTA Book, CUP
Writing sample EXAM TASK: Write an opinion paragraph of 75-100 words on the topic: Nightlife in Istanbul is expensive/cheap.
1 On my opinion, nightlife in Istanbul is more very expensive. Everyone say so.

(eg) (1) (eg)
2 First of all; If you want to go Bebek on monday, sunday, saturday and all night you
(eg) (i)
3 must give a lot of money for your funny so everyone cant go out in Istanbul.
(2) (3) (ii)
4 Secondly; Some parts of Istanbul _____ chep for nightlife but they ______not very good & you
(A) (B)
5 will see bad things. You will see very bad People so we are dont go out.
(iii) (C)
6 In conclusion; Istanbul is very big city so If you went to nightlife in Istanbul you saw
(iv) (D) (E)
7 very bad people. But Istanbul is too beautiful city.

(v) (4)
Task 1 Language Analysis
Blue category (1-4) Wrong Choice of Words (eg) The preposition on used instead of in" 1. The adverb more very used instead of too {we witness another error here; more and very should not be used together}. 2. The verb give used instead of pay 3. The adjective funny used instead of the noun fun 4. The adverb too used instead of a very 3
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Red category (i v) Punctuation (eg) A semi-colon followed by a capital letter used instead of a comma followed by a lower case letter. i. Lower case letters used for names of days instead of capital letters.(Monday) ii. Contraction used without the apostrophe between n and t (.cant) iii. Capital letter used instead of a lower case letter (people) iv. Capital letter used instead of a lower case letter (if) v. Full stop followed by a capital letter used instead of a comma and followed by a low case letter.
Green category (A E) Lack of or incorrect verb use (forms) (eg) Although everyone has a plural meaning, its grammatically singular so needs Present Simple 3rd person s. A. Omission of verb to be (are); this sentence needs verb to be. B. Omission of verb to be (are); this sentence needs verb to be. C. Use of auxiliary with helping verb (are and dont); auxiliary and helping verb are not used together. It should be we dont go out D. Use of past form of verb (went) used instead of infinitive (go); this sentence should be in Present Simple as this is about a general idea. - yes, though since its part of point E as well, you could have mentioned it was a conditional sentence E. Use of past form of verb (saw) used instead of bare infinitive (see) with will; the first conditional dictates this rule.
Rubric & examples word count for this section = 70 (deduct this from the total for this section to calculate your word count)
Task 2 Sound file from the Business English Class and group profile GROUP 2 Level Type of class Group composition Reason for learning **B2 (Upper-Intermediate) Business English Business people working in different companies To be able to give presentations, conduct meetings, and cope on business trips ** CEF Level: B2 Can interact with a degree of fluency and spontaneity that makes regular interaction with native speakers quite possible without strain for either party. Can produce clear, detailed text on a wide range of subjects and explain a viewpoint on a topical issue

Learning background Motivation Learning characteristics / needs
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Studied English at school and university but currently learning with native speaker teachers. Highly motivated companies pay for classes and better English will lead to promotion Keen to improve their speaking and pronunciation; they like a mixture of activities, particularly anything related to listening
giving the advantages and disadvantages of different options. Common European Framework of Reference for Languages Council of Europe as cited in: Thornbury, S. and Watkins, P. (2007) The CELTA Book, CUP
Task 2 Language Analysis
Find 3 examples of the following errors (NB: Write the time when the error occurs as in the examples). Tense (eg) (0.07) We are making... Present Continuous instead of Present Simple.
1. (0.11) we are selling to... Present Continuous instead of Present Simple 2. (0.43) we didnt expect... Simple Past instead of Simple Present 3. (1.04) because we are importing them... Present Continuous instead of Simple Present
4. (1.14) we expect... Present Simple instead of Simple Past
5.
(1.36) if its going like that... Present Continuous instead of Simple Present
Collocations (eg) (1.21) So it isnt my hand instead of So its out of my hands.

1. (1.30) We will see what will happen instead of We will see what happens As with 1st sub, also a grammar (tense) error, not collocation but you only needed 3 in this section anyway. 2. (1.27) Do precaution instead of take precautions. 3.
(1.36) We will bankrupt instead of we will go bankrupt.

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4. (0.55) At the mean while instead of in the mean time. An appropriate choice, but the correction is wrong think again.
Incorrect pronunciation of words (NB: Use phonemic symbols in this section as in the example) (eg) (0.06) automotive / tmtv / should be / tmtv / 1. (1.05) them /dem/ should be /em/ 2. (1.56) staff /stf/ should be /st:f/ 3. 0.49why /vaI/ should be /waI/ Intonation
Briefly comment on the students intonation and what effect it might have on the listener. I think any listener will find this particular students intonation rather problematic as it does not allow the listener to figure out the start or the end of most sentences making it difficult for the listener to follow and understand the important information the speaker wants to give or even misinterpret it because of the incorrect pauses he gives.Youre still not there with this. Listen again to the very first part where he says Hello. // This is Fatih. // I have a company // in field of automotive // Where Ive put //, does his intonation rise or fall? What should it do? (This is the issue throughout his presentation). Throughout his presentation his intonation falls while it should rise.
Rubric & examples word count for this section = 98 (deduct this from your total for this section)
Focus area for part b

In Part b, you will find activities to help one of the students work on their errors. Choose ONE category only and briefly say WHY you have chosen it, with reference to the learner profile. I have chosen to focus on the green category (inappropriate tense use) because these are very common yet very serious grammar mistakes that I believe should be dealt with at this stage as this student is expected to write academic essays.
Rubric word count for this section = 40 (deduct this from your total for this section)
1a (Task 1 & 2) Total Word Count: 414

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1st sub 1. Identify the learners language needs

Correction of the 4th collocation in section 2 needs attention.

2. Correctly use terminology to describe language systems

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Task 1 & 2 (Language Analysis)

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Thornbury, S. and Watkins, P. (2007) The CELTA Book, CUP

1 On my opinion, nightlife in Istanbul is more very expensive. Everyone say so.

7 very bad people. But Istanbul is too beautiful city.

Task 1 Language Analysis

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Task 2 Language Analysis

4. (1.14) we expect... Present Simple instead of Simple Past

Collocations (eg) (1.21) So it isnt my hand instead of So its out of my hands.

(1.36) We will bankrupt instead of we will go bankrupt.

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Focus area for part b

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