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Margarita Danielyants
Zack De Piero
Writing 2
4.13.15
WP1: Dessert Recipes
Desserts are for the most part universally recognized as something people enjoy
consuming regardless of demographics. For every sweet-tooth candy lover out in the world, there
exists a delicious recipe to satisfy any craving pertaining to sugar. If the recipe also happens to
involve chocolate, its a win-win situation because baking goods and chocolate are never a bad
combination. Dessert recipes, brownies in particular, seem to be a popular choice when it comes
to baking, and are fairly easy to follow regardless of age or skill. Brownie recipes serve as a way
for people to experiment with ingredients, make fun new things, and most importantly, enjoy the
delicious end product.
Recipes are sets of instructions that are typically used to create a specific dish. They
provide ingredients and their measurements and guide you step-by-step in order to make things
easier. One does not need any prior baking experience in order to use recipes. As long as a
person is able to operate a stove and stir together the needed elements, baking should be a
breeze. The authors specifically provide these recipes so that the public can have access to them.
Mentioned later in the reading, you will find the description of three brownie recipes that inform
those with a craving for something sweet and decadent how to bake delicious brownies.
Normally, one would not look up a recipe unless they encounter the need to create a
particular dish, such as in the case of brownies. But the reason that recipes like such exist at all is
so that baking enthusiasts or people with a sweet tooth would be able to recreate them. In fact,
the authors of all three different brownie recipes that have been reviewed insist that everyone
must make their brownies, whether they are chocolate chip cookie, better-than-crack, or rocky
Zack De Piero 4/17/2015 2:42 PM

Comment [1]: Ha!
Comment [2]: Perfect spot for dashes.

Comment [3]: Necessary
Comment [4]: Ditto, above. I think that
Intros have 3 ingredients: hook the reader
(you did that), establish context and address
the so what?, then lay down the thesis
statement (what youre going to argue).

Anything else is somewhat distracting. Id
consider scrapping the fluff.

Comment [5]: HmmIm not quite sure
what youre arguing here. Remember: your
reader is most likely going to be expecting a
thesis statement at the end of your Intro (or
occasionally 2nd paragraph) that clearly
detail what point/argument/stance
theyre taking and what evidence theyre
basing that on. Right now, I dont know
where youre taking me.

Comment [6]: What authors? What
recipes? Hook me up with the specifics. Tell
me what youre basing all of this on!

Comment [7]: HAAAAAAAAA.

(I dont think you need the hyphens since
youre putting them in quotes. One or the
other will set this apart from the rest of the
text as a colloquial phrase.)

road smores. Recipes arent typically geared toward a narrow audience, especially because there
are so many different variations of what they could be. Instead, they serve a wider crowd of not
just baking enthusiasts but also, people who love sweets, or people who are just interested in
trying something new.
The circumstances that caused all three of the recipes to be written are similar. The
authors experimented something new with a regular brownie recipe and realized that the product
is far more superior to the original so they decided to share them. I really dont have any words,
other than you must try them. They will change your life, said Jessica, author of How Sweet It
Is and creator of the better-than-crack brownies. A similar theme also ran through the other
two blog entry recipes, with each author claiming that their brownies turned out amazing and
absolutely irresistible. So irresistible in fact, that they had to give a portion away or else they
would end up inhaling the entire batch. Sarah Fennel, author of the blog by the name of Broma
Bakery claimed that she had to give almost all of them away, because [she] could. not. stop
eating them!
Recipes are usually not written in a formal format of follow a strict syntax. They are
typically written using casual language that doesnt include and exclusive jargon, which as
described in Murder! Rhetorically Speaking as the terminology used by those in a particular
profession or group (Boyd, 89). Apart from a brief introduction of the dish and the ingredients
list, what really makes a recipe a recipe is the list of instructions on how to prepare the dish,
whereas genres that are more complicated, such as research papers have multiple points that they
should hit before being considered research papers (Dirk, 256). Following the theme of
informality, writers of dessert recipes in particular, also tend to have a humorous and upbeat tone

Comment [8]: I kinda/sorta get where
youre going, but its not clear to me in the
paragraph.

So the rhetorical conventions that shaped
this genre are. what? What are the
circumstances, exactly? The fact that the
cookies were good? They had to get the
word out?

cracking jokes, making silly analogies or even sometimes over sharing which is something
that is not often encountered in academic writing.
All recipes share certain similar features, the most obvious ones, as mentioned, being the
instructions and list of ingredients. But the conventions of dessert recipes dont simply stop
there. Most recipes also include photos depicting the ingredients, preparation and end product.
Very often these photos are taken with a nice camera, which can take in-depth close ups of the
foods, and have very nice lighting.
A similar scheme is found in all three of the recipes reviewed has been how the authors
have structured and written the recipes. All of them started off with either saying how intrigued
they were by the recipe or by swearing that it is absolutely amazing and delicious. While one
writer claimed they are truly oh-my-gosh-so-good-I-could-cry. Really, I shed a tear,
another wrote, They will change your life. This seems to be a running thread in many recipes,
not just those involving dessert brownies. Along with claims that sounded alike, the authors also
cracked jokes about how their brownies will change your waistline or some sort of other
humorous statement about gaining weight from eating too many sweets. Blog authors and writers
of dessert recipes such as the brownie ones often use the techniques mentioned in order to catch
the eye of readers and make their recipe sound appealing and worth baking. One might think that
saying that the brownies will alter your physique would be a bad thing, but in fact it just makes
the audience believe that not only are the desserts worth creating, but also worth saying sorry,
hips and being okay with it.
Not all recipes are the same however. Dessert recipes usually have more of an upbeat
tone with more humorous remarks, while savory recipes tend to be more serious. Recipes also
vary in length and complexity, as well as minuscule things such as the way photos were taken, or

Comment [9]: This is excellent, Margarita,
and I especially like how youre weaving in
course readings throughout your paper.
However, youve got to make sure you back
these claims (ie, no strict syntax). Ill lok
for that in the ensuing paragraphs.


Comment [10]: OK, two things. 3
actually:

1, Find a way to bump this up into the topic
sentencethe topic sentence provides the
idea anchor for what the paragraph is
about.

2, Its tough to give textual evidence for
photos, but you can sneak around this by
describing them.

3, Is it that plain and simple? They all have
pictures, and the pictures are all the same?
In what way(s)?

Comment [11]: I dont think this is
needed. This whole paper is, essentially,
about how theyve written the recipes.


Comment [12]: You mentioned jokes in a
previous paragraph, so why is this coming
up again? Wouldnt it be more effective
there? Or to scrap the initial one and
include that here?

Make sure that you correctly/clearly file all
of your ideas in the appropriate folders (ie,
paragraphs).

the order in which the instructions go. Some recipes have more ingredients, some less, which is
what determines how lengthy or difficult they will be. The three brownie recipes all share a
common goal creating brownies but vary in the amount of time needed to prepare and the
ingredients required. The reason why the brownie recipes are similar is because although some
ingredients vary, it would be impractical for the authors to deviate and make the layout of a
recipe different the audience wouldnt be able to understand it.
Without studying genre, people would not be able to tell the difference between Op-Eds
and movie reviews. In the case of brownie recipes, we know that they are recipes because they
are written in a certain way, just like any other genre would feature its own unique aspects.
Not being able to tell the difference would result in terrible misunderstandings and confusion.
The importance of learning genre is essential because it comes down to aiding peoples survival.
People all over the world rely on reading pieces from different genres on a daily basis; without
being aware of genres and their differences we simply would not be as well-rounded as we are
because all the written pieces would have to explicitly specify which genre they pertain to.

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