Talk:Billy Elliot/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 09:48, 1 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments

• " British dance drama film" this is a WP:SEAOFBLUE. Doubtful of the utility of linking British or dance for our readers.
• "earning £73 million (US$109.3 million) on a £3 million budget (US$5 million) worldwide." better as "earning £73 million (US$109.3 million) worldwide on a £3 million budget (US$5 million)."
• Why are budgets in the infobox initially in $ whereas the lead has it initially in £ and it's a British movie?
  • Figures are now given only in USD, as per their sources. I think we should just stick to USD, as providing the £ conversion now would just be an estimate. (I did take a look at 2015 British films and only USD is given.)
• soup kitchen could be linked.
• Don't link major geographical entities like London.
• "Terraced homes used.." fragment, no full stop. If you added "were" between homes and used, keep the full stop.
• Ellipsis needs non-breaking spaces either side.
• "The BBC also financed" why "also"? And consider linking BBC.
• " in total[5] before" nasty placement, move to after punctuation.
• "On 3 June 1999..." whole para is unref.
  • I was unable to find a source to cite any of that, so I've added a new paragraph of details.
• Newcastle-upon-Tyne and Lynemouth are overlinked.
• "Billy Elliot advert" italics for title of movie.
• Also would make that "advertisement" for encyclopedic tone.
• Dancer in the Dark has a small "i" for In.
• "on Blu-ray Disc on" remove "Disc".
• "...on 10 January 2012." unref.
• "Roger Ebert gave the..." who is he?
• "the BBC gave" you linked BBC this time, but in italics now?
• Recipients in the table, would expect them to sort by surname.
  • I've re-jiggled the recipients for each award, however, current structure is fine as Awards should be presented alphabetically (eg. Academy Awards first)
    • The names of the actors should sort by their surname. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 16:22, 3 April 2020 (UTC)
      • The Rambling Man Okay, but how can I do that without compromising the order of the Awards and their Categories? If I sort the entire table by surname, the awards will no longer be grouped and there would be a lot of repetition. Just Lizzy^(talk) 18:15, 3 April 2020 (UTC)
        • Using {{sortname}}? The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 18:19, 3 April 2020 (UTC)
          • I see thanks, I've added sortname to the actors and this now sorts it by surname. Just Lizzy^(talk) 11:34, 4 April 2020 (UTC)
• "reviews[53] and ran " move that ref to end.
• Ref titles shouldn't be using spaced hyphens, they should use spaced en-dashes.
• No SHOUTING in ref titles.
• Consistent formatting of things like Rotten Tomatoes (italics or no?)
  • Rotten Tomatoes, Metacritic, CinemaScore and BBC don't need italics, but all other media publications do. (example, see Mulholland Drive)
    • But your usage in the article and references is inconsistent. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 16:23, 3 April 2020 (UTC)
      • I've resolved the one for BBC. I can't control the italics in the references, however. Hoping the rest is okay now. Just Lizzy^(talk) 18:15, 3 April 2020 (UTC)
        • Sure you can. Either chose work (italics) or publisher (not italics). But consistency is needed. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 18:19, 3 April 2020 (UTC)
        • I've updated them again in article and refs, and should be consistent now. Just Lizzy^(talk) 11:34, 4 April 2020 (UTC)
• BAFTA awards refs need better titles.

That's enough for a first pass, so I'll put it on hold while we deal with these. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 14:53, 1 April 2020 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: Thanks for the review! I've addressed all the above comments, and replied to some of them. I've also done a cleanup of the prose, thanks Just Lizzy^(talk) 16:13, 3 April 2020 (UTC)

Lizzy150 responded to a couple of those. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 16:23, 3 April 2020 (UTC)

Okeydokes, happy with this now meeting GA criteria. Well done, promoting. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 19:35, 4 April 2020 (UTC)